Crime Doesn't Pay
I don't like spiders - do you? Having fun here.16 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
excellent consonance of hard C sounds in creeps and scuttles and alliteration in smelly stuff
I love that this is written from the point of view of the spider :-)
I also like the colloquial speech patterns
great personification - love the humor of Aunty Black Widow and her mourning dress
oh, what a fun gallows humor ending LOL
I am laughing out loud :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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excellent consonance of hard C sounds in creeps and scuttles and alliteration in smelly stuff
I love that this is written from the point of view of the spider :-)
I also like the colloquial speech patterns
great personification - love the humor of Aunty Black Widow and her mourning dress
oh, what a fun gallows humor ending LOL
I am laughing out loud :-) Brooke
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Hey Brooke, You could keep a copy for young Sawyer! I'm glad you laughed. We saw a 6ft snake in our park yesterday - we learn to live with them...yuk! Love, K.
Comment from jmdg1954
Not a big fan of spiders myself. Cleverly written poem that certainly let's us know of your disdain towards the spider...
"Splat" !!! Was all that was needed, nicely done...
John
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Not a big fan of spiders myself. Cleverly written poem that certainly let's us know of your disdain towards the spider...
"Splat" !!! Was all that was needed, nicely done...
John
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Hi John, We have some of the most dangerous critters in the world - spiders and snakes! I was having fun. LOL Kay.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written you tell the story well leading up to the ending well done on this creative poem that I enjoyed regards Jill
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Yes this is well written you tell the story well leading up to the ending well done on this creative poem that I enjoyed regards Jill
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Hello Jill, Thanks for reading; having some fun because Oz has some of the most dangerous critters in the world. LOL. K.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
LOL!! I curled up! Oh, Kay, this is so funny, the ending was so unexpected, I just loved it! We don't have Black Widows here, but we do have scorpions, so I am very careful when I move rocks. How can you make something that scares the life out of me, make me laugh so much!!! Wonderful. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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LOL!! I curled up! Oh, Kay, this is so funny, the ending was so unexpected, I just loved it! We don't have Black Widows here, but we do have scorpions, so I am very careful when I move rocks. How can you make something that scares the life out of me, make me laugh so much!!! Wonderful. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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G'day mate - Oz has THE most deadly snakes and spiders in the world, at least one didn't get away. I used to keep a shovel near the door when I lived in the country - cats kept bringing mummy red-bellied black snakes in! ZING OFF WITH IT'S HEAD! Love, Kay XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX
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You are one of the funniest, and brightest, person on here. You always put a smile on my face! :)
Comment from humpwhistle
Well, there's a cautionary tale for you. Careless
vanity will earn you SPLAT--whatever Auntie Black Widow
might tell you. Nice little bit about Uncle
having passed away.
I like that you told your tale through the eyes of the spider.
Peace, Lee
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Well, there's a cautionary tale for you. Careless
vanity will earn you SPLAT--whatever Auntie Black Widow
might tell you. Nice little bit about Uncle
having passed away.
I like that you told your tale through the eyes of the spider.
Peace, Lee
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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G'day Lee, Thanks for reading; we have the most venomous spiders and snakes in the world! One less now - LOL Kay.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
No, I don't like spiders, and like this story/poem I think a good spider is a dead one, and I don't care about nature's balance as far as they are concerned.Always have the mortein handy I say. A good read, I enjoyed.
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reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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No, I don't like spiders, and like this story/poem I think a good spider is a dead one, and I don't care about nature's balance as far as they are concerned.Always have the mortein handy I say. A good read, I enjoyed.
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Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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G'day Pearl, I hate all creepy crawlies especially snakes! Don't care if they are protected! Thanks for reading and glad you enjoyed. Blessings, Kay.
