THICKER Skin
Pentameter Whimsy and Lament...29 total reviews
Comment from steevie
You sound more resilient than me. It's no secret that each one of us carries a different load when it comes to our tolerance levels. Some cry at the drop of a hat and some whine about every little thin g that crosses their path.
But to me, the secret is balance. There is a time for everything and we have to decide ahead of time what pushes our buttons and what doesn't.
I have anticipated potential emotional upsets and braced myself for them. Believe me when I say that usually works out for the better.
Well started, Pee
hugs
smiles
steve
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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You sound more resilient than me. It's no secret that each one of us carries a different load when it comes to our tolerance levels. Some cry at the drop of a hat and some whine about every little thin g that crosses their path.
But to me, the secret is balance. There is a time for everything and we have to decide ahead of time what pushes our buttons and what doesn't.
I have anticipated potential emotional upsets and braced myself for them. Believe me when I say that usually works out for the better.
Well started, Pee
hugs
smiles
steve
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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I'm up and down Steve. Hot or cold...In or out. I think they call it fickle. LOL I'm super sensitive but so is HE. Both highly critical and arguementative but he'd start a fucking arguement with paper and manage to make it feel guilty for being born. Not to worry. Pee just crushed that violin remember? haha
Smiles back mate
Pee
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Well here's a news flash, dearie, most woman are emotional to a vast degree and are fickle and tons of other stuff, whereas, us men, we are the solid rock of stability, and if you say this isn't true, I'll never speak to you again! LOL
smiles
stevo
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Are we really ALL that fickle?
No surely not.
Well I know I am...but only some of the time.
Then again, I can be a bit up and down...
Look there's no fuckin inbetween roite?
Yep, I got the newsflash! LOL
x
Pee
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I rest my case, your honor. The prosecution may now cross examine.
Well done, old chap, as the Brits say, which you are practically a Brit, on a different piece of rock and dirt.
So what have you written, lately, my dear? Have you been busy? You will hate me when I tell you that I have time to burn each day.
My work days are short and can give, sometimes a few hours a day for FS.
HUH, you'd think my writing would be better. LOL
Good to see you, roite?
TTYL
stevo
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*steam coming from ears*
Don't tell me you have time to burn...LOL
I have none.
I'm thinking about retiring.
To bed. In a bit. If I can be bothered...or NOT.
I'm bushed, caring for all these people and now I'm too tired for poetry.
Not to worry, and yes your writing could be better.
LOL
But mine could be better.
Everyones could be better! LOL
You ninny.
I catch up chapters soon...sooooo tired...power sleep coming up.
I'll probably still be in the chair at 6am tomorrow morning.
haha
Pee
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hey girl,
I sighed heavily on this one - been there, done that got the t-shirt, shrunk it and smashed me own dreams:D
This seems to pull me into a deeper reflection of my life - which on occasion feels like a slippery slide down Everest on my backside.
Excellent work Closet,
Now I need chocolate -
Maureen
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Hey girl,
I sighed heavily on this one - been there, done that got the t-shirt, shrunk it and smashed me own dreams:D
This seems to pull me into a deeper reflection of my life - which on occasion feels like a slippery slide down Everest on my backside.
Excellent work Closet,
Now I need chocolate -
Maureen
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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LOL I like that analogy. EVEREST Only on your backside? I'm fuckin livin with it. LOL Thanks for your support honey...cheers P xx ps..gimme that chocolate - fight ya for it!!!!!
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oh...backside is a British term for your butt,:D
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I know what your backside is ninny! LMAO
I meant I am living with the slippery slope...Everest! LOL
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LMAO - well get in line - cause I am already going down it.
xx
Comment from MelissaBickel
Marriage is an investment, it pitches and evens out along the way...Still it's hard to find the balance at times..
Arghhhh I say...then I swat him like a fly LOL... (haven't really)
I think that is why I find time to let silence shroud me. I know you've kids and can't, but still a moment or two would let you put the bat down hehehehe.
Your sonnet read great.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Marriage is an investment, it pitches and evens out along the way...Still it's hard to find the balance at times..
Arghhhh I say...then I swat him like a fly LOL... (haven't really)
I think that is why I find time to let silence shroud me. I know you've kids and can't, but still a moment or two would let you put the bat down hehehehe.
Your sonnet read great.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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LOL Oh I been pitchin' up hill for awhile now Mel...LOL
Thanks for your support. He is not a thorough shit! LOL I wouldn't still BE here...but I did tell him not so long ago I am NOT doing the f**king nit picking for another 23 years.
It's never quite as bad as I make out...I go for poetic value...haha
Cheers P
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Comment from Black_Oxygen
Well Done ~ Phillippa
The beauty of your writing is always amazing. The rhymes
are not forced and it flows smoothly. The reader-friendly
language makes it easy to comprehend. The attached photo
is a befitting accent that enhances the message. Thank
You for your creation.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Well Done ~ Phillippa
The beauty of your writing is always amazing. The rhymes
are not forced and it flows smoothly. The reader-friendly
language makes it easy to comprehend. The attached photo
is a befitting accent that enhances the message. Thank
You for your creation.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Hey there Ron...thanks so much for a beautiful review. You always know just the right thing to say.
Cheers P
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Comment from adewpearl
solid use of alternate-line rhyming
and good steady iambic meter
excellent alliteration in phrases like buffer any brunt - good assonance in that too
I think it is a rare person who takes taunts well
excellent flow in roundabout of vitriolic spin
love the strong verbs in the alliterative spit and spew
great defiant attitude in your closing
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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solid use of alternate-line rhyming
and good steady iambic meter
excellent alliteration in phrases like buffer any brunt - good assonance in that too
I think it is a rare person who takes taunts well
excellent flow in roundabout of vitriolic spin
love the strong verbs in the alliterative spit and spew
great defiant attitude in your closing
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Ahh yes, always the defiant attitude, no matter what shit is thrown. Thanks Brooke
Cheers P
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PS I've been told I'm rare on many occasions...(Mars rare! LMAO)A
Comment from Indie Skreet
well hello my thin-skinned friend and yes, I too suffer from this, but few people know this :) I had to read this a few times - not only for the reason that you changed the pattern of rhyme in the second and fifth stanza. At first I thought it didn't work, but actually I think it does. You have written a great self-exploratory poem here and I love the 'potential epidermisuicide' - brilliant. Well you know as far as I'm concerned you can't put a foot wrong, so great to see you writing new stuff - I want more! lotsaluv Indie xx
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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well hello my thin-skinned friend and yes, I too suffer from this, but few people know this :) I had to read this a few times - not only for the reason that you changed the pattern of rhyme in the second and fifth stanza. At first I thought it didn't work, but actually I think it does. You have written a great self-exploratory poem here and I love the 'potential epidermisuicide' - brilliant. Well you know as far as I'm concerned you can't put a foot wrong, so great to see you writing new stuff - I want more! lotsaluv Indie xx
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Hi darlin...thanks for a beaut review and I did feel a little uncomfortable changing the pattern from abab to abba & baab...I think with those odd two stanzas the former felt stronger than the latter...still I was on the homestretch by then and I'd of course bloody well boxed meself in..haha. I do appreciate your honesty mate. Always appreciate a good ear. Thanks again for stopping by, be in to see you soon. Lub Pee xx
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well, it is great to try something different ... especially when it works. Always look forward to seeing 'you' hun xx
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Indeed... see YOU soon Indie-Go x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, closetpoetjestery, you did an excelletnt job writing this sonnet-esque poem about the words that can break the skin. i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, closetpoetjestery, you did an excelletnt job writing this sonnet-esque poem about the words that can break the skin. i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Jaxy...thanks so much...love your delightful review about my bruise. cpjestery xx
Comment from reconciled
Twenty three years...your doing something remarkably well...-smile- And I'm glad ....I think love becomes a choice after the ...newness wanes... loyalty...is honorable in Gods eyes and mans....Exceptional write...of coarse....out a bullets sorry love Michael
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Twenty three years...your doing something remarkably well...-smile- And I'm glad ....I think love becomes a choice after the ...newness wanes... loyalty...is honorable in Gods eyes and mans....Exceptional write...of coarse....out a bullets sorry love Michael
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Oh he'd agree with you there *wink* LOL Thanks for a sweet review, you're da bomb...what no bullets? LOL Cheers P x
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sixes....-wink-
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Oh. LOL
I thought that was a little violent! LOL
I actually thought you meant you were out of wise cracks...that's what I'd call a bullet...but I like your meaning better.
X P
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no....they wont give me real bullets....-frown-
Comment from strandregs
I hope I didn't inspire this lovely poem :)
I was wa... about my addiction and other's fs oxygen tank.
yes I feel like a tank ran over me when I wake up after 4 hours sleep and the day wobbles around me in waves kicking me awake in it's cruel way.
Isn't it 'wonderful' how we produce great stuff when people
really upset us?
:) Z.xx.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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I hope I didn't inspire this lovely poem :)
I was wa... about my addiction and other's fs oxygen tank.
yes I feel like a tank ran over me when I wake up after 4 hours sleep and the day wobbles around me in waves kicking me awake in it's cruel way.
Isn't it 'wonderful' how we produce great stuff when people
really upset us?
:) Z.xx.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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LOL Of course you did...
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NOT!...scared you dint I? LMAO...No I've had this one stashed awhile friend, it just wasn't finished. Glad I got rid of it finally...now just gotta grow them scales! LOL Cheers P x
Comment from cvcopac
I got hung up on "Epidermisuicide" but then realized how key the word is to that stanza. "Your gonna wash that man right out of your hair/skin." Renewal strikes with a vengence. Everyone's got a breaking point besides the union's about encouragement and support, not constant critiscim. Sounds like it's time to find another song and fuck it you'll just throw away the violin too. Masterful verse, P. Kenny
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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I got hung up on "Epidermisuicide" but then realized how key the word is to that stanza. "Your gonna wash that man right out of your hair/skin." Renewal strikes with a vengence. Everyone's got a breaking point besides the union's about encouragement and support, not constant critiscim. Sounds like it's time to find another song and fuck it you'll just throw away the violin too. Masterful verse, P. Kenny
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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LOL I actually thought in the end "epidermiHOMICIDE" was probably more appropriate instead but the word DOES tie in and I thank you for your persistence. I know some people don't like made up words...haha...if it works for me, I'll accomodate it. I do like your advice and often think I'm better than where I am...then I realise I must be a fucking handful to put up with and of course the violin goes back in the case for a few days.
Well, I fuckin smashed it this time K! LOL Loved your review and your sass and your SIXER yay! Masterful review.
Hugs
P xx
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How can anyone write without making up words? We all have to meet the middle but we don't have to tolerate abuse. Love. Kenny
