From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Intimacy."Mostly romance.
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Comment from Stacy L. Kersten
I found this to be a very romantic sort of love poem. But it wasn't sappy or dripping in sentiment...it was almost like looking through a window at two lovers entertwined. Almost like I'm invading their privacy.
This piece seems personal, and it's very pretty. I like how you keep it short and sweet yet are still able to get the point across.
Thanks for sharing.
I found this to be a very romantic sort of love poem. But it wasn't sappy or dripping in sentiment...it was almost like looking through a window at two lovers entertwined. Almost like I'm invading their privacy.
This piece seems personal, and it's very pretty. I like how you keep it short and sweet yet are still able to get the point across.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 11-May-2005
Comment from Hetty
Hi Pili,
I have seen this illustration on someone else's work today and it is just as enjoyable reading your work that goes with it, as it was the other poet's.
This is lovely, full of beautiful sentiments.
No nits,
Hetty
Hi Pili,
I have seen this illustration on someone else's work today and it is just as enjoyable reading your work that goes with it, as it was the other poet's.
This is lovely, full of beautiful sentiments.
No nits,
Hetty
Comment Written 11-May-2005
Comment from sengwriter
A real romantic moment you've painted through your poem 'Intimacy'. Your words are so selected that it appears as if you didn't choose them, words are generated from your soul only and quickly jotted down to give it a shape of your loving moments. A pure and serene moment of intimacy appeared in your poem that it has to have the destiny of your choice automatically. Many a romantic heart will get a subtle guidance of this slow and steady transition of a spontaneous love of these two souls. Gautam
A real romantic moment you've painted through your poem 'Intimacy'. Your words are so selected that it appears as if you didn't choose them, words are generated from your soul only and quickly jotted down to give it a shape of your loving moments. A pure and serene moment of intimacy appeared in your poem that it has to have the destiny of your choice automatically. Many a romantic heart will get a subtle guidance of this slow and steady transition of a spontaneous love of these two souls. Gautam
Comment Written 11-May-2005
Comment from Deanna More
Ah! A bit of Romance,captured, poetically!
This poem vividly paints a Picture of Intimacy that enables the reader
to catch captivating glimpses of the lustful seduction between
two united souls, that are intertwined, so affectionately!
Great imagery,so well written! Good title!
Favorite line? Final line! " In intimate comfort,we fall asleep!
Excellent conclusion!
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Only suggestion - Re: Line 3. Change the words "need to" to "lure of "......
ie; " surrendering to the lure of sleep."
Sounds more rhymical.
Also, it will compliment the "L" in the word " looking " that starts Line 6.
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Ah! A bit of Romance,captured, poetically!
This poem vividly paints a Picture of Intimacy that enables the reader
to catch captivating glimpses of the lustful seduction between
two united souls, that are intertwined, so affectionately!
Great imagery,so well written! Good title!
Favorite line? Final line! " In intimate comfort,we fall asleep!
Excellent conclusion!
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Only suggestion - Re: Line 3. Change the words "need to" to "lure of "......
ie; " surrendering to the lure of sleep."
Sounds more rhymical.
Also, it will compliment the "L" in the word " looking " that starts Line 6.
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Comment Written 11-May-2005
Comment from TR Stagner
I think it's perfect. And what more, why didn't I think of that? Oh I really wish I had. Good work, and definitely keep it up.
TR
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I think it's perfect. And what more, why didn't I think of that? Oh I really wish I had. Good work, and definitely keep it up.
TR
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-May-2005