Comment from Black Wren

Excellent

Your images are also wonderfully and skillfully created with your words.
You have done a terrific job with this poem.
Well done!

 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from fly4hi

Excellent

Sure beats hugging a pillow. You make it seem
so simple and romantic with your wording
and imagery. Nicely done. fly

 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from Balladeer

Excellent

Well Pili as usual you have expressed

you deepest emotions and thoughts

quite succinctly. It amazes me that

women go through so many phazes

and changes on how they feel and

when they feel it. Love is a mystery for sure.

Skye

 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

COOL!
very beautifully, sensually hopelessly romantic!

thia says it all......
"In total silence
we connected,
losing all sense of time,"

nicely done
thanx for sharing :-)

 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from 24chas

Excellent

This was such a lovely poem, Pili. I love the passion that courses beneath the words and the gentleness of the flow. Great job.

 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from Bryana

Excellent

Exhausted
A was surrendering
to the lure of sleep,
when I discover
your eyes.
Looking at me
with soulful
adoration.

I loved it! I can't think of a more beautiful
way to fall asleep than someone looking
at you in soulful adoration.
Have a good day my friend. Un abrazo.

 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from Seancuig

Excellent

Very soft, sweet and intimate.

You have captured this moment beautifully and I cannot but admire the poem, the sentiment and the whole way you present it.

Thanks

 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from Marillion

Good

In intimate comfort,
we both fall sleep. (asleep)

In total silence
we connected,
loosing all sense of time, (losing)

Very nice work, Pili. Just the above nits to fix, but this is an enchanting poem, my friend.



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 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from ladykay

Excellent

Hi Pili...

"In total silence
we connected,
loosing all sense of time,"

A sleepy time love poem! You do a good job with something so simple too.

I am looking, I am looking...For sleep! Just in case you thought different!

ladykay

 Comment Written 11-May-2005

Comment from clhutchinson

Excellent

Another beautifully written verse with a tender and gentle flow that is deeply expressed and felt.The wording is well selected and the ending brings more serenity.

 Comment Written 11-May-2005