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All alone she is drowning in her sorrows
2 total reviews
Comment from
Zinnia48
I know how challenging this genre is, so here are a couple of gentle comments. I'm a great fan of alliteration, so I'm fond of the first line. I like the image of the last line, but it's a little awkward. I wonder if you dropped the "A" and figured out another way to say that she's drowning. Thanks for sharing your poem and good luck! caroline
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
Thank you for your advice :) this really seems like a great website
Comment from
roseellen
This is lovely but I feel that you cannot drown a river, although you can (Flood) it or even (deepen) it or (Burst) its banks.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2013
Thank you for your advice :)
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