He Could have Called
Easter free verse, please read notes!17 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Effective repetition of the He could have called line to bring home your point
good pairing of agony and anguish
a thoughtful poem of faith for Easter :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Effective repetition of the He could have called line to bring home your point
good pairing of agony and anguish
a thoughtful poem of faith for Easter :-) Brooke
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Allison, I've read this through a couple of times now and I don't think you need any help on it. It's got all you need to guide the message of faith to your readers. I thought it was well penned as it is.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Hi Allison, I've read this through a couple of times now and I don't think you need any help on it. It's got all you need to guide the message of faith to your readers. I thought it was well penned as it is.
Thanks for sharing it.
Maureen
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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That's means a lot, thank you!
Comment from djsaxon
You don't need help. The write is terrific. I just wish that I shared your faith. I am agnostic. Working on that. Cheers - DJ
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You don't need help. The write is terrific. I just wish that I shared your faith. I am agnostic. Working on that. Cheers - DJ
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Simple but commendable is the stand of this tribute to the Easter hymn, so live and exploratory and exemplary is the diction and elaboration, nice feeling and appreciation ordered, I liked the presentation and retelling. 47/293
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Simple but commendable is the stand of this tribute to the Easter hymn, so live and exploratory and exemplary is the diction and elaboration, nice feeling and appreciation ordered, I liked the presentation and retelling. 47/293
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thank you!!
Comment from Carole Rosa
Allison, This is a lovely spiritual poem and especially nice for Good Friday. I am not a poet, so I can't give you any advice. I enjoy reading poetry and I don't feel that I could offer any help. In my opinion, it is well written. Carole
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Allison, This is a lovely spiritual poem and especially nice for Good Friday. I am not a poet, so I can't give you any advice. I enjoy reading poetry and I don't feel that I could offer any help. In my opinion, it is well written. Carole
Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the review, I'm glad you liked it!
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
I love that song too. Yes, He could have called ten thousand angels but oh the love in His heart for you and me. I hadn't thought of that song for a long time. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
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I love that song too. Yes, He could have called ten thousand angels but oh the love in His heart for you and me. I hadn't thought of that song for a long time. Good job. God loves you and I do too.
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you!!
Comment from hagen
I think this is lovely. Try removing some of the prepositions. You don't always need them in poetry - it actually makes the other words you choose more effective and interpretative.
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I think this is lovely. Try removing some of the prepositions. You don't always need them in poetry - it actually makes the other words you choose more effective and interpretative.
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Comment Written 29-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the review and for the suggestion!
