He Could have Called
Easter free verse, please read notes!17 total reviews
Comment from Doc Holiday
Jesus knew what He had to do and did it well. He did it for us! Sure he could have called the angels or His Father to lift His cup. But He didn't1 Your poem gives us the story behind the reasons we celebrate and pay respect to Good Friday.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
Jesus knew what He had to do and did it well. He did it for us! Sure he could have called the angels or His Father to lift His cup. But He didn't1 Your poem gives us the story behind the reasons we celebrate and pay respect to Good Friday.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Bobbi22
Excellent poem that reminds us that as the Son of God, Jesus could have called upon His Father to release Him from His pain. But He endured the suffering for all of us until His last breath. Very well written.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
Excellent poem that reminds us that as the Son of God, Jesus could have called upon His Father to release Him from His pain. But He endured the suffering for all of us until His last breath. Very well written.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Thank you!!
Comment from J.R Dickinson
You've written this with such beautiful splendor to honor Jesus. You should be proud of this; I didn't see any mistakes, so keep up the good work.
-J.R
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
You've written this with such beautiful splendor to honor Jesus. You should be proud of this; I didn't see any mistakes, so keep up the good work.
-J.R
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Thank you, that means a lot!
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flowed well. The author wrote a detailed account of the scene. I really liked the last line. One suggestion I have is either change the background color or the color of the font. I think this poem would stand out more. Thank you, harmony13
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
Excellent Poem! The poem flowed well. The author wrote a detailed account of the scene. I really liked the last line. One suggestion I have is either change the background color or the color of the font. I think this poem would stand out more. Thank you, harmony13
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the review and the suggestion!
Comment from Dave Russell
That was always one of my favorite hymns as well...so telling of a sacrifice freely and completely given. I like the flow, no changes that I can see, though, it may be interesting to see it single spaced
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
That was always one of my favorite hymns as well...so telling of a sacrifice freely and completely given. I like the flow, no changes that I can see, though, it may be interesting to see it single spaced
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the review and the suggestion!
Comment from Harlequin
A well written poem of a wonderful story. As a practicing CHristian, I;ve found it tasteful, touching and easy to connect with. Thanks for sharing. :)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
A well written poem of a wonderful story. As a practicing CHristian, I;ve found it tasteful, touching and easy to connect with. Thanks for sharing. :)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Thank you!!
Comment from 9999pool
As requested, I will try my best to make it read better:
"He could have called"
He could have called
To ten thousand angels
Before his death fall
But He stayed despite the danger
Shedding His holy blood for you and me
So that our sins can be forgiven
For the whole world to see
And feel eternal bliss in heaven
He stayed on and spoke to His father
"Forgive those who are here gathered
I can lead them no further
Let my death make the world better"
He could have called
To ten thousand angels awaiting
But he chose to fall
His love divine and everlasting
In resurrection he arose as foreseen
Ten thousand angel waiting beside Him
He prayed for our Satanic sins
A hope for mankind on a miracle beam
(end of poem... abab..rhyming)
Hope this poem is what you want to say.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
As requested, I will try my best to make it read better:
"He could have called"
He could have called
To ten thousand angels
Before his death fall
But He stayed despite the danger
Shedding His holy blood for you and me
So that our sins can be forgiven
For the whole world to see
And feel eternal bliss in heaven
He stayed on and spoke to His father
"Forgive those who are here gathered
I can lead them no further
Let my death make the world better"
He could have called
To ten thousand angels awaiting
But he chose to fall
His love divine and everlasting
In resurrection he arose as foreseen
Ten thousand angel waiting beside Him
He prayed for our Satanic sins
A hope for mankind on a miracle beam
(end of poem... abab..rhyming)
Hope this poem is what you want to say.
Cheerio, Ritchie.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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I appreciate your time and effort but this would no longer be my poem.
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Consider my poem as a gift to help you relate to the hymn together with yours. Smiles.
Cheerio, Rithcie.
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Agreed!! :)
Comment from steevie
I didn't see anything wrong with your poem, except that Jesus actually died upon a torture stake and not a cross, which the vast majority of Christians believe.
well done
steve
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
I didn't see anything wrong with your poem, except that Jesus actually died upon a torture stake and not a cross, which the vast majority of Christians believe.
well done
steve
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the review!
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you're welcome, sweetie
smiles
steve
Comment from Righteous Riter
The message here is heart touching because Jesus could have escaped the cross but this would have left us all doomed. He was sorrowful in the spirit but in the end He said, "not my but your will be done." I am grateful for this act of love.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
The message here is heart touching because Jesus could have escaped the cross but this would have left us all doomed. He was sorrowful in the spirit but in the end He said, "not my but your will be done." I am grateful for this act of love.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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I am too!
Comment from words
My first comment is you should capitalize all of the pronouns He/Him as they refer to God.
Second, I would not double space this ... double spacing interrupts the flow making one come to a complete stop at the end of each line.
The repeating lines work well and the message is clear.
Well done.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
My first comment is you should capitalize all of the pronouns He/Him as they refer to God.
Second, I would not double space this ... double spacing interrupts the flow making one come to a complete stop at the end of each line.
The repeating lines work well and the message is clear.
Well done.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 30-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the review and the suggestions! I have capitalized all the He's and Him's. I understand what you are saying about the double spacing, it's just seems too crowded to my eyes single spaced.