Surgical Words
Sometimes, words cut deeper than blades....113 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
Oh goodness me ... you hit the nail on the head (or the heart!) - how did you manage to create such an impactful piece with such a paucity of words?
Beautifully done ... as for the visual and sound effects ... incomparable. :)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Oh goodness me ... you hit the nail on the head (or the heart!) - how did you manage to create such an impactful piece with such a paucity of words?
Beautifully done ... as for the visual and sound effects ... incomparable. :)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks very much, Reach, I really appreciate that!
Just like the initial photo in the body of this piece, a depiction of a human heart, it was written for the contest, sure, but it came from the heart. My Momma always said you write your best when it truly comes from the heart...
Thanks so much again!
Comment from Sagnik Das
Dean, I'm stupefied to learn so .... These loathsome "indispositions" do always tend to leave an indelible mark on the dilapidated state of morale, endeavor however hard the individual might to cast them aside .... they are never at all easy to cope with ( I herein speak from personal experience - to depose you frankly, [ you being a most affable friend ], my very own sister had, some years back, faced one such predicament ; I shudder to recount how she came back home that day, ...... broken .... disconsolate .... ). I can therefore empathize with you, how it feels deep within ....
Hence , despite the apparent terseness, your poem still conveys an immensely powerful message & wins therefore, my fondest appraisal. Well done, my friend .... may the eternal bliss of Our Lord abide with you, & your family till the end of time.
:)
And, well ... before I end, I'd like to wish you wholeheartedly, my very best for this impending contest. May you soar thence, as high as the "Regal Fowl", gliding majestically, amid the unbridled literary welkin.
N.B. - Can't help mentioning this besides :
The sound effects employed, do achieve their aim - the second one in particular, is found psychologically "arresting" - in every way, an "uncanny" incentive to the write that accompanies therewith .... After all, "Beware O world, for here comes now " dark horror's rightful minion " , the great & unparalleled, DEAN KUCH !! " LOL.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Dean, I'm stupefied to learn so .... These loathsome "indispositions" do always tend to leave an indelible mark on the dilapidated state of morale, endeavor however hard the individual might to cast them aside .... they are never at all easy to cope with ( I herein speak from personal experience - to depose you frankly, [ you being a most affable friend ], my very own sister had, some years back, faced one such predicament ; I shudder to recount how she came back home that day, ...... broken .... disconsolate .... ). I can therefore empathize with you, how it feels deep within ....
Hence , despite the apparent terseness, your poem still conveys an immensely powerful message & wins therefore, my fondest appraisal. Well done, my friend .... may the eternal bliss of Our Lord abide with you, & your family till the end of time.
:)
And, well ... before I end, I'd like to wish you wholeheartedly, my very best for this impending contest. May you soar thence, as high as the "Regal Fowl", gliding majestically, amid the unbridled literary welkin.
N.B. - Can't help mentioning this besides :
The sound effects employed, do achieve their aim - the second one in particular, is found psychologically "arresting" - in every way, an "uncanny" incentive to the write that accompanies therewith .... After all, "Beware O world, for here comes now " dark horror's rightful minion " , the great & unparalleled, DEAN KUCH !! " LOL.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Ha ha, you've got me blushing over here my dear friend!
I'm glad you like my '3-D Virtual' style I've adapted for a great deal of my poems and, primarily, my horror fiction prose/stories, Sagnik. It's not for everyone, to be sure, but those who appreciate the creativity that I try to incorporate into the use of sound as a compliment to poetry/prose, really seem to enjoy it, very much.
So, with all of that being said, I will continue to do this type of writing for people who exhibit the appreciation and the enthusiasm for such things. People just like YOU!
Thanks so much, my friend, for everything...
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Dean, my beloved friend,
Please don't thank me thus, I beg. For it was exclusively by the sheer dint of your own extraordinary calibre , both as a writer , as well as an immensely gifted & decent human being, that you managed to win me over so much indeed .... & that's why perhaps, I can so vividly relate with you & your exalted feelings at large. After all, as goes the adage :
"Like minds do like minds ever tend,
A universal law ..... "
Bidding you a very hearty Good Night, I choose to end here for now .... Sleep tight, beloved friend ; Rest Thy weary eyes awhile .... :)
Comment from Eternal Muse
A great senryu. Words indeed can cut deep, with a razor likie precision and leave long lasting scars. You bringit up very well here.
Your presentation is phenomenal.
This may make you smile: my ex-husband asked me what that sound was (blood dripping). This is an eerie sound, and so fitting.
Good luck in the contest with this winning entry.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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A great senryu. Words indeed can cut deep, with a razor likie precision and leave long lasting scars. You bringit up very well here.
Your presentation is phenomenal.
This may make you smile: my ex-husband asked me what that sound was (blood dripping). This is an eerie sound, and so fitting.
Good luck in the contest with this winning entry.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Heh, thanks very much for checking this out for me, yeltel. I do appreciate that, and I am happy you enjoyed the sound FX as well.
Comment from Winslow
Dear Dean,
A truism expressed in so few words. Great sound effects and picture.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Dear Dean,
A truism expressed in so few words. Great sound effects and picture.
Good luck in the contest.
Warm regards,
Winslow
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks very much, Winslow. I appreciate it, my friend!
Comment from JM daSilva
No doubt about that. Words can cut as deep as any scalpel. Actually, I think more marriages get destroyed because of that than anything else.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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No doubt about that. Words can cut as deep as any scalpel. Actually, I think more marriages get destroyed because of that than anything else.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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You are absolutely right, JM. Harmful, vile hurtful words never do anyone any good, in any relationship. I've found it's best that when you feel one crawling up from the depths of you, and attempts to pollute your mouth, it's time to turn around and walk away, before you say something you can never take back!
Thanks for the awesome review, my friend!
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Respect is very important. Once it is gone, I don't think a relationship can last.
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You're 100% right there. That, and trust. My wife always tells me that she puts more emphasis on trust above anything else. If someone does her wrong, it literally take forever for her to trust them again, IF she ever does...
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That too. I just can say something to you. I don't allow people to scream or shout at me, or show disrespect because I know where it'll get. I literally leave them talking to themselves. I just turn my back and walk away and come back twenty minutes later. I don't waste time with arguments that'll get nowhere. If we are discussing to come to an agreement, it's different. lol.
The same way about appointments. I wait fifteen minutes and leave. People have learned. To me that's all about respect and honor and stuff like that. You let people start doing that to you, and they'll always do it. You teach people how to treat you. That's what I think.
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I agree 100% with everything you just said, JM. Oh, and thanks for the sixer on this one too! ;)
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You deserved the six and the art alone with the video. Wow. Great!
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So, you think my '3-D Virtual' style is okay, at least, on some pieces? It sure is making some good headway lately, making a postive impact on a lot of readers...
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Yeah. In some pieces it is great. In my case, I have to turn it down. I told you, my speakers are powerful. lol. But now i know.
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Comment from TAB_that's me
Ok, this is so powerful in just 17 syllables. It speaks volumes. I hate social media (except fanstory - is that social media?) and I hate bullying.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Ok, this is so powerful in just 17 syllables. It speaks volumes. I hate social media (except fanstory - is that social media?) and I hate bullying.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Hah! Surely not, say it ain't so, my dear Teresa! Well, I suppose one could consider FanStory a social media site, of sorts. I chose to think of it as a place where hundreds of talented writers and poets spill their collective guts out on the page, purely for my entertainment, along with everyone else's...
Thanks so much for your wonderful review and insights ., I do appreciate them!
Comment from RodG
Hi Dean,
This message may be way overdue for some of those bullies out there. I hope others listen well to what you're saying.
I really like the metaphor of the abuser being like a surgeon who literally carves his victims with malevolence.
RodG
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Hi Dean,
This message may be way overdue for some of those bullies out there. I hope others listen well to what you're saying.
I really like the metaphor of the abuser being like a surgeon who literally carves his victims with malevolence.
RodG
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thanks very much, Rod, I appreciate that, my friend. The way it affected my daughter at the time it occurred, that's exactly how it felt to me, too...
Thanks again!
Comment from Titan Black
This Haiku is hot too death! The poetic alliteration
And flow was on point. You did a great job at painting
The picture of the metaphor for sharp words that
Cut deeply. But the biggest downfall to words, is that
We can cut our own heads off with them too. keep writing.
And stay connected.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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This Haiku is hot too death! The poetic alliteration
And flow was on point. You did a great job at painting
The picture of the metaphor for sharp words that
Cut deeply. But the biggest downfall to words, is that
We can cut our own heads off with them too. keep writing.
And stay connected.
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Hah, thanks TB my friend, and you are absolutely right. We sure can stick a metaphorical foot in our mouths as big as a mountain through our own words, sometimes. I know I have!
Thanks so much, again, for your insights and review...
Comment from J. Dark
This deserves a six, Dean, so I apologise for not having one. I love the way the message is strong yet incredibly concise. This would be perfect for an anti-bullying campaign. It has a shock factor which makes the reader think. Great work.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :0)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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This deserves a six, Dean, so I apologise for not having one. I love the way the message is strong yet incredibly concise. This would be perfect for an anti-bullying campaign. It has a shock factor which makes the reader think. Great work.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :0)
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much, Julie. I really appreciate your thoughtful, intelligent viewpoint and awesome review!
Stay sharp!
Comment from judiverse
This is great wisdom. I remember hearing "Stocks and stones may break my bones but words can never hurt me." But words definitely can hurt. There are stories of youths committing suicide over something that has been posted on some site. Your word choice is really effective in showing the harm that hurtful words can cause--cut deeply, surgical precision, open wounds. Your format and presentation are impeccable. judi
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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This is great wisdom. I remember hearing "Stocks and stones may break my bones but words can never hurt me." But words definitely can hurt. There are stories of youths committing suicide over something that has been posted on some site. Your word choice is really effective in showing the harm that hurtful words can cause--cut deeply, surgical precision, open wounds. Your format and presentation are impeccable. judi
Comment Written 07-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2013
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You're 100% right, Judi. Sometimes, a strategically placed cruel word can hurt us much, much deeper than a slug in the face. The effects sure last a lot longer!
Thanks for your feed back and wonderful review...
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Hi, Dean. You're so welcome. Hateful words do severe damage to the target's self-esteem, if nothing else. judi
