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Comment from Wendyanne
This is a sweet romantic poem which is enhanced by the lovely picture. "Letting our souls intertwine." This is a pretty image. Well done.
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This is a sweet romantic poem which is enhanced by the lovely picture. "Letting our souls intertwine." This is a pretty image. Well done.
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from Ls
Yep. Crepuscule. When one word like dusk or darkening or evening-tide (I think that's a word) will do for mortals such as I, Crepuscule for the more enlightened. Gotta love it. Another of your very well-done pieces of poetry.
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Yep. Crepuscule. When one word like dusk or darkening or evening-tide (I think that's a word) will do for mortals such as I, Crepuscule for the more enlightened. Gotta love it. Another of your very well-done pieces of poetry.
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from sengwriter
Words used here seemed to be eventually very true. If fantasies of your mind dealt with fluent imagination or if factually described of a rare incident of getting your fantasies in realities, in no way it disturbs the theme expressed here so explicitly. Romance of your inner self seems to be rejuvenated again by some positive and prospective fate you call it. Nice you are Pili, when you write something of romance.
The best lines of your one of the bests (it's already proved that so many bests you've already written):-
"By chance we found
each other,
moved by
the hands of time.
Let my eyes
see your face,
reveal yourself
to me, I am waiting,
fate cannot be ignored.
Let's welcome joy
with all doors open, " Thanks for sharing your feelings with the readers of FS.
Gautam
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Words used here seemed to be eventually very true. If fantasies of your mind dealt with fluent imagination or if factually described of a rare incident of getting your fantasies in realities, in no way it disturbs the theme expressed here so explicitly. Romance of your inner self seems to be rejuvenated again by some positive and prospective fate you call it. Nice you are Pili, when you write something of romance.
The best lines of your one of the bests (it's already proved that so many bests you've already written):-
"By chance we found
each other,
moved by
the hands of time.
Let my eyes
see your face,
reveal yourself
to me, I am waiting,
fate cannot be ignored.
Let's welcome joy
with all doors open, " Thanks for sharing your feelings with the readers of FS.
Gautam
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from Shari_K
The pen slide <--- "slides"
Your words do flow freely here and very smoothly as well. I love the inspiration in this one and the feeling of true love and finding by chance that special someone. This was yet another one of your very brilliant, heart-warming poem.
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The pen slide <--- "slides"
Your words do flow freely here and very smoothly as well. I love the inspiration in this one and the feeling of true love and finding by chance that special someone. This was yet another one of your very brilliant, heart-warming poem.
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from Bryana
As I read your poems the more I enjoy them.
I'm so glad you're such a prolific writer my
dear friend, and as always, I hope this poem
is also biographical. It's so romantic!
Have a happy week-end. Un abrazo.
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As I read your poems the more I enjoy them.
I'm so glad you're such a prolific writer my
dear friend, and as always, I hope this poem
is also biographical. It's so romantic!
Have a happy week-end. Un abrazo.
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from mfwilkie
Pili, i think this is your poem. i took out what I thought was weighing it down.
My pen glides,
sensing a presence,
responding to a
powerful call.
Words flow freely
conceived in dreams,
expressing
my deepest longings,
through poetry.
Seperately
we endured
in silence,
living
in a distressing void,
blinded by the distance
of the dark.
By chance,
our souls fused;
moved by
the hands of time.
Fate cannot be ignored.
We welcomed joy
with opened doors.
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Pili, i think this is your poem. i took out what I thought was weighing it down.
My pen glides,
sensing a presence,
responding to a
powerful call.
Words flow freely
conceived in dreams,
expressing
my deepest longings,
through poetry.
Seperately
we endured
in silence,
living
in a distressing void,
blinded by the distance
of the dark.
By chance,
our souls fused;
moved by
the hands of time.
Fate cannot be ignored.
We welcomed joy
with opened doors.
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Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from Lpspider
This was another great piece of writing. Great style and this was generally well done.
The pen slide
sensing a presence, I think you meant-
The pen slides
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This was another great piece of writing. Great style and this was generally well done.
The pen slide
sensing a presence, I think you meant-
The pen slides
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from Eternity_of_Sins
An interesting read with great word use and a flowing style. I'm unsure, though, whether the word "slide" in the first line shouldn't be "slides", but I could merely be reading the poem incorrectly. Again, a perfect example of free-form poetry at its best.
Eternity
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An interesting read with great word use and a flowing style. I'm unsure, though, whether the word "slide" in the first line shouldn't be "slides", but I could merely be reading the poem incorrectly. Again, a perfect example of free-form poetry at its best.
Eternity
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from lycoperdon
Ok I think there is a typo in this poem but I am not sure . Is this supose to be
"into one, so long ego" Or is it suppose to be " into one, so long ago"? This would make a diffrents in how the poem is read dont you think?
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Ok I think there is a typo in this poem but I am not sure . Is this supose to be
"into one, so long ego" Or is it suppose to be " into one, so long ago"? This would make a diffrents in how the poem is read dont you think?
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from Diny
Words flowing free
conceived by fate,
revealed in
my dreams,
expressing
the deep longing,
through poetry.
You do this so well now you are giving us lessons too!
great maybe one day I too will be ranked as high as you... I will continue to read and learn You know I love your free verse
Write on
Diny
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Words flowing free
conceived by fate,
revealed in
my dreams,
expressing
the deep longing,
through poetry.
You do this so well now you are giving us lessons too!
great maybe one day I too will be ranked as high as you... I will continue to read and learn You know I love your free verse
Write on
Diny
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Comment Written 07-May-2005
