Savannah Love
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Comment from Dawn Munro
As always, well-written, Barbara, and highly believable. The only thing I might see changed is a bit more 'introductory' conversation on the 'phone with Cash's sister, like telling her they needed her boyfriend's services before telling her to ask him to bring a fingerprinting kit. But then, that's just me - I'm long-winded, I guess...LOL.
I loved it, and can't wait for the next chapter. :)
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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As always, well-written, Barbara, and highly believable. The only thing I might see changed is a bit more 'introductory' conversation on the 'phone with Cash's sister, like telling her they needed her boyfriend's services before telling her to ask him to bring a fingerprinting kit. But then, that's just me - I'm long-winded, I guess...LOL.
I loved it, and can't wait for the next chapter. :)
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Karen is Cash's sister-in-law, and his brother died.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Oh dear, oh me, oh my. So far the girls don't know about the messed up room or the hand print, right? Paige will really want to go back home now. Good chapter. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Oh dear, oh me, oh my. So far the girls don't know about the messed up room or the hand print, right? Paige will really want to go back home now. Good chapter. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from donaldww
The plot is animated as more characters show up to help solve the mystery. Hopefully there will be some clues from the fingerprints.
P.I. = Police Inspector?
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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The plot is animated as more characters show up to help solve the mystery. Hopefully there will be some clues from the fingerprints.
P.I. = Police Inspector?
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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P.I. Private Eye. Hmmm, I wonder if I need more of an explanation. Thank you for the kind review.
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One idea that I find useful is a character list in the author notes. This is especially helpful when chapters don't for an interval of time, and I might forget who's who. I find a quick check of the list can bring back the story.
That can also include definitions as the arise. No need to edit each time, just bring it forward and add anything that might be new in the post. It doesn't matter if the definitions relate to previous entries, or characters are no longer part of the story.
Cheers,
DW
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I will consider that. I have shied away from it because there won't be one in the finished novel.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Barbara - as always a great skilled post and the mystery is still increasing. Great dialogue, and inner play in this story. Great job and no issues my end. Smooth read.
Thanks for sharing it - I enjoyed it.
Maureen
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Hi Barbara - as always a great skilled post and the mystery is still increasing. Great dialogue, and inner play in this story. Great job and no issues my end. Smooth read.
Thanks for sharing it - I enjoyed it.
Maureen
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GeraldS
The narrative continues to be engaging. The dialogue sounds okay. But, the portion of the story that is posted here is very small. Again, it's hard to get a good feel for the continuation of the story. Still there's the hand print and expectation of a potential ID to keep the reader interested and reading on into the next section.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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The narrative continues to be engaging. The dialogue sounds okay. But, the portion of the story that is posted here is very small. Again, it's hard to get a good feel for the continuation of the story. Still there's the hand print and expectation of a potential ID to keep the reader interested and reading on into the next section.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I teach first grade and can only post these small segments. It is impossible for me post longer, so my choice is to post small sections or give up writing and posting.
Comment from amahra
I'm just coming back here myself. Glad to see you guys talents haven't waned. I love the dialogue that seems so realistic.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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I'm just coming back here myself. Glad to see you guys talents haven't waned. I love the dialogue that seems so realistic.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Glad you are back.
Comment from Sasha
More unanswered questions. Great chapter. I do hope they can get the name of who the hand print belongs to. Checking to see if there is a safety deposit box is a good idea. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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More unanswered questions. Great chapter. I do hope they can get the name of who the hand print belongs to. Checking to see if there is a safety deposit box is a good idea. I look forward to reading the next chapter.
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and your support.
Comment from AprilShower
It will be interesting to find out who belongs to the handprint. However, what does the print on the jagaur have to do with the break in of her house? Anyone could have leaned against her car anywhere the car parked. You need to show why this would be an important clue, Barbara. Maybe Cash or Billy needs to ask neighbors if they say anyone leaving the house during this time. Then if someone saw someone come from the house and lean against her car, they would then have a clue.
Hope this is helpful.
April
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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It will be interesting to find out who belongs to the handprint. However, what does the print on the jagaur have to do with the break in of her house? Anyone could have leaned against her car anywhere the car parked. You need to show why this would be an important clue, Barbara. Maybe Cash or Billy needs to ask neighbors if they say anyone leaving the house during this time. Then if someone saw someone come from the house and lean against her car, they would then have a clue.
Hope this is helpful.
April
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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From one of the early posts I described the yard and where Paige parked the car. Somebody could have been by the car, but it would be WAY out of anybody's way. Thank you forthe kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I don't think you're drawing this out too long, barbara. You take all the time you need LOL. This is a chapter filled with questions and surprises. I like the air of mystery and tension. Great job! Bev
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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I don't think you're drawing this out too long, barbara. You take all the time you need LOL. This is a chapter filled with questions and surprises. I like the air of mystery and tension. Great job! Bev
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I had one reviewer complain about the shortness, again.
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Oh, phooey on them. Considering what you are offering for their time and efforts, that's just not very classy.
You're welcome, barbara.
Xx Bev
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
This chapter advances the story and the suspense of moment. Intruders in Paige's house trashing the place is a problem, and it raises questions as to her safety. The story flows well, and it is a pleasant read. Mystery surrounds the mansion, and I look forward to the next chapter.
Curtis
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Barbara,
This chapter advances the story and the suspense of moment. Intruders in Paige's house trashing the place is a problem, and it raises questions as to her safety. The story flows well, and it is a pleasant read. Mystery surrounds the mansion, and I look forward to the next chapter.
Curtis
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and encouragement.
