My Favorite Wife Part Two
A Story About Domestic Violence.18 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Outstanding! I enjoyed every line as you shared thoughts and feelings along with your story. And I can picture some things just like this happening, and more regularly than most of imagine. LOL. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Outstanding! I enjoyed every line as you shared thoughts and feelings along with your story. And I can picture some things just like this happening, and more regularly than most of imagine. LOL. Thanks for sharing. Wish I had a six.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thanks again much appreciated
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your last line made me smile and your story is very entertaining, if you are going to commit a crime and get away with it then you have to bear forensics in mind, murder and mayhem make for good reading, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Your last line made me smile and your story is very entertaining, if you are going to commit a crime and get away with it then you have to bear forensics in mind, murder and mayhem make for good reading, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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thank you for this wonderful review
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
What a story! I loved the way you mixed the daily prosaic served up with a twist of humour into the horror (my salad dressing is amazing). The six star rating is for the combination of the two posts. kay
seemed preoccupied > seemed more preoccupied
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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What a story! I loved the way you mixed the daily prosaic served up with a twist of humour into the horror (my salad dressing is amazing). The six star rating is for the combination of the two posts. kay
seemed preoccupied > seemed more preoccupied
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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thank you for the wonderful review and 6 starsT
Comment from jacquelyn popp
This was an enjoyable read for me. It was interesting that it kept me reading to see what would happen next. Well done. This is the first time that I have read any of your work, but look forward to reading more of it.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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This was an enjoyable read for me. It was interesting that it kept me reading to see what would happen next. Well done. This is the first time that I have read any of your work, but look forward to reading more of it.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you for this wonderful review, it made my day.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
Another enjoyable read to continue on from - My Favorite Wife. This was an interesting read. The past pace of the story kept me entertained. I'm glad I popped back in for the second half :-)
Just a couple of edits - as shown in ( ).
My sister(-) in(-) law said,
I once saw her crochet a link bracelet with a pi(e)ce of
Somehow I was disappointed. Michelle and George were like (our) distant cousins.
she'd shared vows, children and a 401K with. - what's a 401K?
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Another enjoyable read to continue on from - My Favorite Wife. This was an interesting read. The past pace of the story kept me entertained. I'm glad I popped back in for the second half :-)
Just a couple of edits - as shown in ( ).
My sister(-) in(-) law said,
I once saw her crochet a link bracelet with a pi(e)ce of
Somehow I was disappointed. Michelle and George were like (our) distant cousins.
she'd shared vows, children and a 401K with. - what's a 401K?
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Good morning, many blessings to you for the lovely review, I fixed the errors.
Comment from Dr. Nad
WoW, I don't recall reading any of your work before.
I have missed out!
I love the way you transport your reader through your narrative of terror and intrigue placing a guilty smile on the corner of our lips. I began my routine of cursory viewing your entry in the Bonus Reviewing section, with the hopes of winning a member cent pump. Shortly after entering that rabbit hole seeking the prize, I came to a screeching halt. I didn't want to take the time but YOU FORCED me to start over and unpack every word in order to discover the delightful nuances you had planted along the way.
There were three spots I am pointing out that I believe you will want to tweak. There are a few spots where punctuation could be debated, (we won't).
1.) "like (distant our) cousins" 2.) began to "criticized" 3.) enough of (" " ) and plunged.
This was deliciously delightful. THANKS
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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WoW, I don't recall reading any of your work before.
I have missed out!
I love the way you transport your reader through your narrative of terror and intrigue placing a guilty smile on the corner of our lips. I began my routine of cursory viewing your entry in the Bonus Reviewing section, with the hopes of winning a member cent pump. Shortly after entering that rabbit hole seeking the prize, I came to a screeching halt. I didn't want to take the time but YOU FORCED me to start over and unpack every word in order to discover the delightful nuances you had planted along the way.
There were three spots I am pointing out that I believe you will want to tweak. There are a few spots where punctuation could be debated, (we won't).
1.) "like (distant our) cousins" 2.) began to "criticized" 3.) enough of (" " ) and plunged.
This was deliciously delightful. THANKS
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Good morning, and this review really boosted my self esteem, I will see to the changes and you have inspired me to resurrect a few more stories, many blessings.
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I am glad I inspired you to write more stories!
You inspired to read Part I
Comment from TDLRasmar
Wow, My Fav Wife killing me softly, huh. Here a knife, there a knife, everywhere a knife, knife. You wrote a nice tale of a vengeful wife. A couple things -
You wrote " I swalloed then asked, "Did she... kill him.? Is that supposed to be 'swallowed'?
Also, you wrote "Michelle and George were like distant our cousins." Is that Michelle and George were distant cousins or Michelle and George were our distant cousins?
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Wow, My Fav Wife killing me softly, huh. Here a knife, there a knife, everywhere a knife, knife. You wrote a nice tale of a vengeful wife. A couple things -
You wrote " I swalloed then asked, "Did she... kill him.? Is that supposed to be 'swallowed'?
Also, you wrote "Michelle and George were like distant our cousins." Is that Michelle and George were distant cousins or Michelle and George were our distant cousins?
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you for this wonderful review, and I will see to the edit.
Comment from Erik McGinley
LMAO :D
This was really very funny!
I loved the way you built the plot up in a way that had me wondering from one point to the next what was going to happen and the last paragraph was a neat way to bring the story to a close.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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LMAO :D
This was really very funny!
I loved the way you built the plot up in a way that had me wondering from one point to the next what was going to happen and the last paragraph was a neat way to bring the story to a close.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2013
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Thank you, did you read the part one? My 20 yr old son didnt think t was good, but it does need tweeking,
Comment from me_tudor
Lol! This was great. I really enjoyed finding out what had happened and I'm buying Michele's story. I had a brother-in-law who used to do crazy crap like that. Great story!
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Lol! This was great. I really enjoyed finding out what had happened and I'm buying Michele's story. I had a brother-in-law who used to do crazy crap like that. Great story!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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Thanks for the review, Blessyou
Comment from Deniz22
"I felt terrible and almost cried myself. This was better than the entire last season of Deadly Sins."
You are a funny lady! This line cracks me up! So compassionate but still using the TV drama as a plumb line. Very good.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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"I felt terrible and almost cried myself. This was better than the entire last season of Deadly Sins."
You are a funny lady! This line cracks me up! So compassionate but still using the TV drama as a plumb line. Very good.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2013
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If you really want to laugh read Witch watcher conclusion, it is a short broken up into 4 parts, I wrote it in the mans voice, It is about a pervert who was filming a group of naked women and got caught, the beginning was written by cristian powers and I saw the ending and continued it, Thanks for the compliments
