My Favorite Wife
A Story About Domestic Violence.19 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, like as with most things in my life, I read your story out of order. But I saw the second chapter first, and figured the first chapter must have been posted a long time before. Then today, I went looking for chapter one, and here it is. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Well, like as with most things in my life, I read your story out of order. But I saw the second chapter first, and figured the first chapter must have been posted a long time before. Then today, I went looking for chapter one, and here it is. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the wonderful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think I have read the second half before reading the first half here but I liked how you broke off your story just as the juicy part is about to unfold, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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I think I have read the second half before reading the first half here but I liked how you broke off your story just as the juicy part is about to unfold, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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thank you for this wonderful review
Comment from Dr. Nad
Just excellent and NOT Exceptional????????????????? I read every review of your dynamic duo of, "My favorite wife". Now they are both exceptional!
According to nearly all of your reviewers your creativity and style are extremely compelling and infectious.
Let me reiterate what others have told you. "You have a tribe clamoring for your stories!"
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Just excellent and NOT Exceptional????????????????? I read every review of your dynamic duo of, "My favorite wife". Now they are both exceptional!
According to nearly all of your reviewers your creativity and style are extremely compelling and infectious.
Let me reiterate what others have told you. "You have a tribe clamoring for your stories!"
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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thank you, this made my day
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I'm glad it did!
You're most assuredly welcome.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
What a place to end this post! Where? In the back, in the heart in the thigh? How badly? Why? It's a good job you posted the two parts back to back, and an even better one that somehow I managed to set about reading them in the right order (I so very nearly didn't). You could have posted them as one you know, and given us another treat, as well... anyway off to find part 2. kay
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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What a place to end this post! Where? In the back, in the heart in the thigh? How badly? Why? It's a good job you posted the two parts back to back, and an even better one that somehow I managed to set about reading them in the right order (I so very nearly didn't). You could have posted them as one you know, and given us another treat, as well... anyway off to find part 2. kay
Comment Written 01-Feb-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you again, many blessings
Comment from jacquelyn popp
I goofed. I read part 2 before this first part as I was just reading different stories in the list. Anyhow both part 1 and part 2 were interesting and very enjoyable to read. Good story, and rich in theme and imagery. The first and second part flowed well together when I read them. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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I goofed. I read part 2 before this first part as I was just reading different stories in the list. Anyhow both part 1 and part 2 were interesting and very enjoyable to read. Good story, and rich in theme and imagery. The first and second part flowed well together when I read them. Well done. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2023
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Thank you for the wonderful review
Comment from Ricky1024
Interesting ending and we'll presented.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Interesting ending and we'll presented.
Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
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Complete Synopsis:
The Adjective and Objective Contents were both Excellent and Exceptional while Descriptive Measures aligned Perfectly.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read an older story written a while back.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good story. It is interesting - talk on women who murder - and intriguing - Michelle stabbing George. I like that I was engaged with this read from the start. I shall have to head back in later to see what happens in the continuation ;-)
Slight edit:
In between chewing, my sister(-)in(-) law
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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This is a good story. It is interesting - talk on women who murder - and intriguing - Michelle stabbing George. I like that I was engaged with this read from the start. I shall have to head back in later to see what happens in the continuation ;-)
Slight edit:
In between chewing, my sister(-)in(-) law
Comment Written 31-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Good morning, many blessings to you for this lovely review of my story.
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I guess we all like to see drama and crime shows to remember that our boring lives are blessedly free of such drama and crime, for the most part. I thought this was a good start with a cliff-hanger sentence at the end. The first paragraph has already been pointed out in some places by reviewers, so I will just put my version here:
I am obsessed with watching shows titled "Deadly Vows," "Women with Knives," and "Beauties that Kill." These life-like reenactments are fact- based with tasteful background music added for intense drama, especially during the blood-spattering scenes.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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I guess we all like to see drama and crime shows to remember that our boring lives are blessedly free of such drama and crime, for the most part. I thought this was a good start with a cliff-hanger sentence at the end. The first paragraph has already been pointed out in some places by reviewers, so I will just put my version here:
I am obsessed with watching shows titled "Deadly Vows," "Women with Knives," and "Beauties that Kill." These life-like reenactments are fact- based with tasteful background music added for intense drama, especially during the blood-spattering scenes.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you for the edit and the wonderful review, I made the changes.
Comment from kahpot
What a wonderful read, though sad it really got me in, (if I may) in your second line "tasteful back round music..." should this be (background...) an excellent story on this subject, I look forward to reading more****kahpot
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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What a wonderful read, though sad it really got me in, (if I may) in your second line "tasteful back round music..." should this be (background...) an excellent story on this subject, I look forward to reading more****kahpot
Comment Written 30-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2023
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Thank you and I will fix that.
Comment from christianpowers
Hi Joan,
Very entertaining, great cliff-hanger at the end, and overall great writing.
Here's some suggested edits...
>>> back ground music <<< background is one word.
>>? effect and intense drama <<< pick one modifier and stick it like a gymnastic landing. Whenever I find myself describing something with more than one word I realize, from experience, I haven't found the right word yet. Good luck with that. lol
>>>... took the plunge from business woman, or carpooling mom, to stuffing a decapitated corpse in a Louie Vittion suitcase. <<< This was funny... I think I actually 'guffawed' for the first time in my life.
>>> Yet, I am always surprised that he does not feel the need to remain in my good graces, lest I decide to reenact some of the scenes at home. <<< I think you mean 'some of the scenes on the television'... You really should change that.
>>> Little did I know I was about to hear a real life domestic drama story, that hit very close to home. <<< I'm just pointing out that you ended the very next sentence with a distracting 'word repetition'... which, if you take my advice in the previous suggestion, you'll fix automatically. However, I'm not condoning the gratuitous use of this cliche. 'Too close to home', 'too close for cumfort', 'too legit to quit' all roll off the tongue, but are lazy, and cheapen your prose.
Now, I'm guessing this is a true account, but still not certain. You haven't told the reader your name. You've got very little dialogue, so this narrative form comes off more as a real-life essay than a fictional account. But, if you actually end up dismembering your spouse in the next installment I'll refrain from dialing 9-1-1, and chaulk it up to fiction.
If, however, that really happens, I'd love to harbor you as a fugitive. I have some very intense fantasies that include adventures with a beautiful woman running running from the law. lol Ever since 'Psycho', and that peep-hole scene just before the murder, my imaginative and impressionable four-year old perverted mind, developed all kinds of scenarios that did not include a butcher knife at all. The possibilities of sharing a naked girl's life on the run were mesmerizing. (Oh, and it being Janet Leah didn't hurt. LOL)
You don't happen to resemble Janet Leah, do you?
Great stuff so far. I'll read the next installment right now.
Christian
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Hi Joan,
Very entertaining, great cliff-hanger at the end, and overall great writing.
Here's some suggested edits...
>>> back ground music <<< background is one word.
>>? effect and intense drama <<< pick one modifier and stick it like a gymnastic landing. Whenever I find myself describing something with more than one word I realize, from experience, I haven't found the right word yet. Good luck with that. lol
>>>... took the plunge from business woman, or carpooling mom, to stuffing a decapitated corpse in a Louie Vittion suitcase. <<< This was funny... I think I actually 'guffawed' for the first time in my life.
>>> Yet, I am always surprised that he does not feel the need to remain in my good graces, lest I decide to reenact some of the scenes at home. <<< I think you mean 'some of the scenes on the television'... You really should change that.
>>> Little did I know I was about to hear a real life domestic drama story, that hit very close to home. <<< I'm just pointing out that you ended the very next sentence with a distracting 'word repetition'... which, if you take my advice in the previous suggestion, you'll fix automatically. However, I'm not condoning the gratuitous use of this cliche. 'Too close to home', 'too close for cumfort', 'too legit to quit' all roll off the tongue, but are lazy, and cheapen your prose.
Now, I'm guessing this is a true account, but still not certain. You haven't told the reader your name. You've got very little dialogue, so this narrative form comes off more as a real-life essay than a fictional account. But, if you actually end up dismembering your spouse in the next installment I'll refrain from dialing 9-1-1, and chaulk it up to fiction.
If, however, that really happens, I'd love to harbor you as a fugitive. I have some very intense fantasies that include adventures with a beautiful woman running running from the law. lol Ever since 'Psycho', and that peep-hole scene just before the murder, my imaginative and impressionable four-year old perverted mind, developed all kinds of scenarios that did not include a butcher knife at all. The possibilities of sharing a naked girl's life on the run were mesmerizing. (Oh, and it being Janet Leah didn't hurt. LOL)
You don't happen to resemble Janet Leah, do you?
Great stuff so far. I'll read the next installment right now.
Christian
Comment Written 24-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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No, but I've been told I look like a young Susan Lucci, I will fix the edits later thanks again
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Hmmmm, a young Susan Lucci, vulnerable and desperate as she runs from the law... Okay, I can deal with that. I just need to drill a hole in my bathroom wall. Errr, you got any blond hair dye? lol
Have a great day, and definitely write a part three. This is good stuff. I'm going to pull out my dvd of 'Psycho'. You've inspired me. lol
Christian
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Just don't go putting on any dresses
