I am Frustration
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Comment from hellspook
The frustration you describe is worse than what I could have imagined :
I am a rumination of nothingness
Leaving you no ability to feel joy or pain
Just confusion marching along
Ouch, how hard can It be to dealt with such a problem when it is both the source and the effect.
On a insight, I would have liked an ending with a way to counter it, a small dose of hope never hurts.
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reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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The frustration you describe is worse than what I could have imagined :
I am a rumination of nothingness
Leaving you no ability to feel joy or pain
Just confusion marching along
Ouch, how hard can It be to dealt with such a problem when it is both the source and the effect.
On a insight, I would have liked an ending with a way to counter it, a small dose of hope never hurts.
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Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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thanks
Comment from barbara.wilkey
That is exactly how frustration starts, from a small seed of self doubt then it builds into something awful. Your did a great job of writing this poem and describing frustration.
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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That is exactly how frustration starts, from a small seed of self doubt then it builds into something awful. Your did a great job of writing this poem and describing frustration.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 24-Mar-2013
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Thank you fo your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from FLutterodt
That is so true because that is how confusion start and works. Yes these are the characteristics of confusion and frustration.
'Leaving you no ability to feel joy or pain
Just confusion marching along
Unable to focus on the present'
Let guard our heart from this destroying demon; frustration
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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That is so true because that is how confusion start and works. Yes these are the characteristics of confusion and frustration.
'Leaving you no ability to feel joy or pain
Just confusion marching along
Unable to focus on the present'
Let guard our heart from this destroying demon; frustration
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from prayingpoet
Your beginning phrase set the tone for a great poem:
"I am frustration
Grown from a small seed of doubt
Good flow and great content.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Your beginning phrase set the tone for a great poem:
"I am frustration
Grown from a small seed of doubt
Good flow and great content.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you for you thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from Walu Feral
I like you and your work my friend. you write so well on subjects that so many people try and fail at. Your work is always meaningful to me on a personal level. Thank you and peace, cheers Fez.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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I like you and your work my friend. you write so well on subjects that so many people try and fail at. Your work is always meaningful to me on a personal level. Thank you and peace, cheers Fez.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you for reviewing and for your kind words~Debbie
Comment from Bellringer
Debbie: excellent overall presentation in terms of your personification of Frustration, and your selection of art/font/colors. Your poetry is at its height in this very insightful poem. Quite thought provoking. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Debbie: excellent overall presentation in terms of your personification of Frustration, and your selection of art/font/colors. Your poetry is at its height in this very insightful poem. Quite thought provoking. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2013
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Thank you so very much, Hector, for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Deb. What a great write this is. I don't know why exactly, but I love the artwoek too. Might I suggest one thing:
" build to a thought which takes over your mind" (since you have everything else in reference to yourself...shouldn't The "your" in this phrase be "me"?
If not, don't mind me. LOL...Take care. Bob
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Hi, Deb. What a great write this is. I don't know why exactly, but I love the artwoek too. Might I suggest one thing:
" build to a thought which takes over your mind" (since you have everything else in reference to yourself...shouldn't The "your" in this phrase be "me"?
If not, don't mind me. LOL...Take care. Bob
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks , Bob. A great suggestion. I know one other person said I used both first and second person. That must be why. Thank you for your kind review and stars :) Debbie
Comment from G.B. Smith
Hello there Debbie
This is a very poignant poem and causes the reader to reflect on so many levels. My thoughts get me in trouble for the same reasons. Very well crafted
Bear
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Hello there Debbie
This is a very poignant poem and causes the reader to reflect on so many levels. My thoughts get me in trouble for the same reasons. Very well crafted
Bear
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, Bear. I have spent the last 2 weeks in a state of frustration~Debbie
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
Unfortunately frustration is part of all our lives, some more than others. Being trapped into a situation not of our choosing can sure up the odds of it becoming a problems. God is so gracious as to gift us with gifts, like writing, to use to chase it away. Good piece with much truth. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Unfortunately frustration is part of all our lives, some more than others. Being trapped into a situation not of our choosing can sure up the odds of it becoming a problems. God is so gracious as to gift us with gifts, like writing, to use to chase it away. Good piece with much truth. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Yes, writing helps so much. I am so glad you joined Fanstory~Debbie
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
This is a great write and presentation. Personification of frustration!!! I never thought of doing that. Now, I can't because you have already written the best one. I'll just have to find something else to write about. I really enjoyed the read and thank you for sharing. Your friend, Bob
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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This is a great write and presentation. Personification of frustration!!! I never thought of doing that. Now, I can't because you have already written the best one. I'll just have to find something else to write about. I really enjoyed the read and thank you for sharing. Your friend, Bob
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, Bob. Seems like most of my last 2 weeks have been spent there, s thought I should write it out. Take care, my friend~Debbie
