Spider Grandmother
a mystical reunion65 total reviews
Comment from barbara.wilkey
wow!! This is a strong entry for the 55 word contest. You not only told a great story, in a few words, but you also educated me. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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wow!! This is a strong entry for the 55 word contest. You not only told a great story, in a few words, but you also educated me. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much, barbara. What an awesome review. And I appreciate your good luck wishes. Xx Bev
Comment from aakemp
You have a well-executed story here. But I'm somewhat puzzled: Was Spider Grandmother waiting at the cave entrance, since you say that Lansa crawled to meet "A rainbow-circled moon suddenly filled the cave's entrance." If so, why wouldn't he have encountered it coming into the cave?
Sorry to sound so picky; it's just that little things like that jar my reading and make me stop and wonder.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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You have a well-executed story here. But I'm somewhat puzzled: Was Spider Grandmother waiting at the cave entrance, since you say that Lansa crawled to meet "A rainbow-circled moon suddenly filled the cave's entrance." If so, why wouldn't he have encountered it coming into the cave?
Sorry to sound so picky; it's just that little things like that jar my reading and make me stop and wonder.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hello, aakemp. The mystical being waited within the moon/craft that hovered outside the entrance of the cave. I've long felt that many cave paintings are depictions of sky creatures who once visited our planet. Hope that helps.
Thanks for the read. You are most generous considering the story was 'jarring' for you.
Warm regards, Bev
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Thank you for clarifying that bit. Actually, it wasn't the whole story that was jarring, just that ending, but since you had so little room in which to work, I felt that should have no significant impact on my overall rating.
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That's not always the way folks work on this site, so I am appreciative of your fairness. And you made a very good point to boot!
:0) Bev
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hi Bev, dear,
Even if I there were no author notes and I had no idea what the write was really about ... it would have still been compelling because of the vivid imagery and the ambiance you created with such few words.
So very well done, my friend. All the very best in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi Bev, dear,
Even if I there were no author notes and I had no idea what the write was really about ... it would have still been compelling because of the vivid imagery and the ambiance you created with such few words.
So very well done, my friend. All the very best in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, my friend. You generosity and support mean so much! I'll need the good luck wishes. Some fantastic entries in this contest. Hugs, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
Man often thinks he has found something new, when in fact he has found a new revision of something old. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Man often thinks he has found something new, when in fact he has found a new revision of something old. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi, charlie. Yes, we cannot escape our beginnings can we. Thanks for reading and reviewing, charlie. I really appreciate your support. Bev
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you're welcome
Comment from Connie C
One of the things I like about your writing, Bev, is that I often learn something new. Here, your author's notes once again teach me something I didn't know. Your story provides such an eery, mystical background, which I love. You are so good at this sort of thing in your novel. I hope you win this contest. What a challenge to write a story in exactly 55 words, and you've succeeded!
Hugs,
Connie
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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One of the things I like about your writing, Bev, is that I often learn something new. Here, your author's notes once again teach me something I didn't know. Your story provides such an eery, mystical background, which I love. You are so good at this sort of thing in your novel. I hope you win this contest. What a challenge to write a story in exactly 55 words, and you've succeeded!
Hugs,
Connie
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Connie, thank you so much for your awesomely generous review. You are such a wonderful champion/friend. I can't tell you how much that means to me.
I'm so happy that you found this piece 'eerie. As you can guess, that's music to my ears!
Love ya,
Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
Oh wow how cool that you entered this contest as well :) so pleased to still have a six left for you and indeed you deserve it for this read and you did it in so few words. Nice work and thanks for sharing.. Best of luck to you in the contest..
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Oh wow how cool that you entered this contest as well :) so pleased to still have a six left for you and indeed you deserve it for this read and you did it in so few words. Nice work and thanks for sharing.. Best of luck to you in the contest..
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi, Christopher. Thank you so much for taking time to read my contest entry. I am totally floored by your generosity and kind words. What a gracious person you are! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from J. Dark
This is a brilliantly interesting and intriguing 55 word story which delivers it's story extremely well with clever description. I love the unusual setting and the mystical element to it. "A rainbow-circled moon" - what fantastic imagery. Well done, this is an excellent contender for the 55 word writing contest.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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This is a brilliantly interesting and intriguing 55 word story which delivers it's story extremely well with clever description. I love the unusual setting and the mystical element to it. "A rainbow-circled moon" - what fantastic imagery. Well done, this is an excellent contender for the 55 word writing contest.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Hi, Julie. Thank you so much for your awesome review. I'm glad you felt the mystical element in the story. I am totally fascinated with the idea that cave paintings, in some cases, could be depictions of ancient astronauts. Loved the review. You're a real pal!
Hugs, Bev
Comment from Carole Rosa
Bev, I've never heard of a "spider grandmother", so I can't relate to that part of your 55 word story. However, the story appears to be well written. The photo art is gorgeous and the story accomplishes the 55 word count, so I would say that you did an excellent job. Good luck in the contest. Carole
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Bev, I've never heard of a "spider grandmother", so I can't relate to that part of your 55 word story. However, the story appears to be well written. The photo art is gorgeous and the story accomplishes the 55 word count, so I would say that you did an excellent job. Good luck in the contest. Carole
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Carole, thank you much for taking time to read and review my entry. Your generosity and support are much appreciated! Thanks, also, for the good luck wishes. Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this 55 word story about the one who sought the arms of the spider grandmother. i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this 55 word story about the one who sought the arms of the spider grandmother. i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much, sweet. I appreciate your supportive words and generous review. Thanks, also, for the good luck wishes.
Kindest regards, Bev
Comment from Gungalo
This is wonderful girl and quite the 55-word story to boot. I found it to be intriguing and full of mystery but if I were a Hopi I'm sure I wouldn't.
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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This is wonderful girl and quite the 55-word story to boot. I found it to be intriguing and full of mystery but if I were a Hopi I'm sure I wouldn't.
Comment Written 19-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much, G. I am very honored that you found this piece intriguing enough to warrant the lovely stars. I really appreciate your time and support. Warmest regards, Bev
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Smile Bev!!!
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Thanks to you, I am! XXX
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That's real good girl!!!!
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