Spider Grandmother
a mystical reunion65 total reviews
Comment from gazzagodbod
Oo spider grandma loved how this creepy piece ran so much menace from so few words well done my friend and all the best in the contest gazzagodbod
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Oo spider grandma loved how this creepy piece ran so much menace from so few words well done my friend and all the best in the contest gazzagodbod
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Hiya, gazza. Thanks for the great review. Glad you liked my creepy piece and thanks for the good luck wishes. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from God's Writer
Yes this is well written my friend full of imagery and feeling a very unique contest entry well done and good luck I enjoyed .... HP
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Yes this is well written my friend full of imagery and feeling a very unique contest entry well done and good luck I enjoyed .... HP
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much, Erick. I'm glad you enjoyed the read and appreciate your good luck wishes. Lots of excellent entries in this contest. Warmest regards, Bev
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Would you please read my two part Japanese riddle. I would love to have your review and also know what you think.
Comment from EMB
LOL Yeah, I was thinking the entire time of reading this that you needed more than fifty-five words, Bev. Then you proved me right with your author notes, explaining what had initially made me scratch my head bald. :)
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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LOL Yeah, I was thinking the entire time of reading this that you needed more than fifty-five words, Bev. Then you proved me right with your author notes, explaining what had initially made me scratch my head bald. :)
Comment Written 21-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thank you for reading.
Comment from Bellringer
Bev, a very creative write that provides a snapshot of what may be a larger story. I found the word "irredeemably" interesting (as it means, at least to me, unredeemable)--does it forebode good or bad? Your author's notes were very helpful in understanding the story. Blessings, Hector
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Bev, a very creative write that provides a snapshot of what may be a larger story. I found the word "irredeemably" interesting (as it means, at least to me, unredeemable)--does it forebode good or bad? Your author's notes were very helpful in understanding the story. Blessings, Hector
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2013
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Thank you much, Hector. I appreciate the great review and helpful insights. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from words
You chose such beautiful artwork for your mystical poem.
It set the mood up perfectly and was a great counterpoint to the harsh opening:
Starvation split Lansa's awareness... night and day cleaved to one orbit.
Always a pleasure to read and review you.
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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You chose such beautiful artwork for your mystical poem.
It set the mood up perfectly and was a great counterpoint to the harsh opening:
Starvation split Lansa's awareness... night and day cleaved to one orbit.
Always a pleasure to read and review you.
Hugs, d
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for reading, d. I appreciate the generous review and words of support. Hugs, Bev
Comment from juliaSjames
Excellent write, Bev. Either Lansa dies or the vision means that his mortal life is claimed by Spirit and he is transformed into a shaman.
Very evocative, nuanced write of initiation. Great poetic touches that add to the mystique - "cave's black heart"; "rainbow-circled moon". Love the way you show the possible effects of a hallucinogenic drug or maybe just prolonged fasting.
A plot, dramatic conflict and resolution. Brilliant!
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Excellent write, Bev. Either Lansa dies or the vision means that his mortal life is claimed by Spirit and he is transformed into a shaman.
Very evocative, nuanced write of initiation. Great poetic touches that add to the mystique - "cave's black heart"; "rainbow-circled moon". Love the way you show the possible effects of a hallucinogenic drug or maybe just prolonged fasting.
A plot, dramatic conflict and resolution. Brilliant!
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, JJ. I really appreciate your truly wonderful review! Always good to hear from you. Hugs, Bev
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Always welcome, my friend. I would say this looks like a winner - but the judges have me doubting my judgement these days.
peace and blessings, julia
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You and me both, jj. Namaste, Bev
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Writingfundimension
Interesting bit of flash fiction twined round the legend. It worked well, telling the story simply.
Nicely done.
Patrick
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Hi Writingfundimension
Interesting bit of flash fiction twined round the legend. It worked well, telling the story simply.
Nicely done.
Patrick
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, Patrick. I appreciate the support! Bev
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Bev, this is a powerful post especially if you know the Hopi - well penned and a great submission.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Hi Bev, this is a powerful post especially if you know the Hopi - well penned and a great submission.
Thanks for sharing it and good luck.
Maureen
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thanks, my lovely friend. I really appreciate your generous and encouraging review. I'll definitely need the good luck wishes LOL. Xxx Bev
Comment from Pen&Ink
Hello Bev,
This is a keeper! Great weaving of cultural aspects. Makes one realize that these cave drawings are much more than merely ancient equivalents of modern-day grafitti.
Ray
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Hello Bev,
This is a keeper! Great weaving of cultural aspects. Makes one realize that these cave drawings are much more than merely ancient equivalents of modern-day grafitti.
Ray
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Hi, Ray. I'm glad you were able to nail where I was going with this. Your generous review along with the wonderfully encouraging words are so very much appreciated. :0) Bev
Comment from Mrs Jones
This is a very interesting story. Well written in 55 words. I would not have understood if you did not tell us who spider grandmother was. Awesome picture. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Rose
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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This is a very interesting story. Well written in 55 words. I would not have understood if you did not tell us who spider grandmother was. Awesome picture. Good luck in the contest.
Cheers
Rose
Comment Written 20-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, Rose. I appreciate your great review. Warm regards, Bev
