From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Enclosed in your soul."Mostly romance.
21 total reviews
Comment from Lpspider
This was another great piece of writing. In this poem you display you ability to create a great piece with great detail; that's what I liked the most in this piece, the description. Well done.
No ciritms or suggestions. Great job.
Lpspider
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This was another great piece of writing. In this poem you display you ability to create a great piece with great detail; that's what I liked the most in this piece, the description. Well done.
No ciritms or suggestions. Great job.
Lpspider
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from mfwilkie
A lovely piece that only you can write, Pili.
Some thoughts on the opening stanza.
I rest
within your soul,
quietly,
in the
overwhelming comfort
of trust.
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A lovely piece that only you can write, Pili.
Some thoughts on the opening stanza.
I rest
within your soul,
quietly,
in the
overwhelming comfort
of trust.
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from Balladeer
Well Pili it sounds like you
have found your Mender (soul mate).
You write of a passion and peaceful
contentment blended together.
Sounds lucky and wonderful for you!
Skye
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Well Pili it sounds like you
have found your Mender (soul mate).
You write of a passion and peaceful
contentment blended together.
Sounds lucky and wonderful for you!
Skye
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from Black Wren
Beautiful and wonderful.
I love your descriptions of finally opening up and revealing all the pain that a lifetime accumulated within your soul.
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Beautiful and wonderful.
I love your descriptions of finally opening up and revealing all the pain that a lifetime accumulated within your soul.
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from ladykay
Hi Torysue...
"Old tears kept inside
through a life time,
are flowing free,
under the soft
whispers of sincere words."
These words justflow to form a wonderful poem. One feels the what the poet is sayoing and the identification is complete with the embrace!
ladykay
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Hi Torysue...
"Old tears kept inside
through a life time,
are flowing free,
under the soft
whispers of sincere words."
These words justflow to form a wonderful poem. One feels the what the poet is sayoing and the identification is complete with the embrace!
ladykay
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from clhutchinson
How a true love can open the floodwaters and bring out what id held back for so long. And a deep trust is vital for this to become. A gentle flowing poem with deep emotion, clear in detail stanza to stanza without regret. Your words and thoughts always amaze me.
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How a true love can open the floodwaters and bring out what id held back for so long. And a deep trust is vital for this to become. A gentle flowing poem with deep emotion, clear in detail stanza to stanza without regret. Your words and thoughts always amaze me.
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from shelley kaye
this was great
one of you best
could totally understand and relate
loved this part....
Old tears kept inside
through a life time,
are flowing free, "
thanx for sharing :-)
and thanx for putting this at 12 points..... now i have 11111 points ROFL ;-)
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this was great
one of you best
could totally understand and relate
loved this part....
Old tears kept inside
through a life time,
are flowing free, "
thanx for sharing :-)
and thanx for putting this at 12 points..... now i have 11111 points ROFL ;-)
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from Diny
You know I must just be extra mushy today...
I do not know if you are married dating or single
I do know whomever you do share this side of you with is a lucky person
you write very romantic words my friend
what an honor to that special someone to inspire these!
Write on
love on
your spirit is beautiful
diny
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You know I must just be extra mushy today...
I do not know if you are married dating or single
I do know whomever you do share this side of you with is a lucky person
you write very romantic words my friend
what an honor to that special someone to inspire these!
Write on
love on
your spirit is beautiful
diny
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from 24chas
My soul revealed
after wondrous labor,
is warmed slowly
by delicious flame,
savoring the sweetness
of your amazing soul.
The whole poem was amazing, but the above was just beautiful, Pili. Great work.
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My soul revealed
after wondrous labor,
is warmed slowly
by delicious flame,
savoring the sweetness
of your amazing soul.
The whole poem was amazing, but the above was just beautiful, Pili. Great work.
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from sengwriter
As open as the roaring sea, as clear as crystal. The songs of your soul has been now spread into the sky of his mind. Your tears drop here and the spirit regained by you thereafter shines as bright sun shine after a brisk shower and 'cause of this a rainbow appears touching two souls apart reigning on the horizon of dreams and fantasies. Nicely written and a very much catchy too. Gautam.
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As open as the roaring sea, as clear as crystal. The songs of your soul has been now spread into the sky of his mind. Your tears drop here and the spirit regained by you thereafter shines as bright sun shine after a brisk shower and 'cause of this a rainbow appears touching two souls apart reigning on the horizon of dreams and fantasies. Nicely written and a very much catchy too. Gautam.
Comment Written 04-May-2005
