From our soul.
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Enclosed in your soul."Mostly romance.
21 total reviews
Comment from Buffaloeagle
Sago; Pili Pubul
Another moving ,Heartfelt poem, Friend.
Your poetry is one of the most outstanding, Ones on this websit,
And I thank you for them all.!
The romantic Imagery speaks from the soul,Wonderful flow throughout.
Say, What part of Florida do you reside in.?
I cover the whole state, And parts of Georgia with the work I do.
Meegweetch..Pili..}>> B.E.>>}
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Sago; Pili Pubul
Another moving ,Heartfelt poem, Friend.
Your poetry is one of the most outstanding, Ones on this websit,
And I thank you for them all.!
The romantic Imagery speaks from the soul,Wonderful flow throughout.
Say, What part of Florida do you reside in.?
I cover the whole state, And parts of Georgia with the work I do.
Meegweetch..Pili..}>> B.E.>>}
Comment Written 07-May-2005
Comment from Moonchild28
Very romantic love poem and well written. Nothing is more treasured than being able to love and trust somone so deeply to heal old wounds. Nothing about this I would change and the ending was perfect.
As the branches
of my arms extend
into an embrace,
lovingly and soft
reaching the radiance
of your love.
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Very romantic love poem and well written. Nothing is more treasured than being able to love and trust somone so deeply to heal old wounds. Nothing about this I would change and the ending was perfect.
As the branches
of my arms extend
into an embrace,
lovingly and soft
reaching the radiance
of your love.
Comment Written 06-May-2005
Comment from Wendyanne
This is a very pretty romantic poem which is enhanced by the beautiful Artwork. "The branches of my arms extend into an embrace." Lovely image. Well done.
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This is a very pretty romantic poem which is enhanced by the beautiful Artwork. "The branches of my arms extend into an embrace." Lovely image. Well done.
Comment Written 06-May-2005
Comment from Cosette
Beautiful sentiments, illustrations, and lay-out as we have all come to expect from your gentle heart. There are, however, punctuation puzzles. I think I would delete the commas after: a life time, are flowing free, wonderous labor.
Also, the last line beginning, "As the branches of my arms..." is not a complete sentence so would not begin with a capital. You might say, "I reach for you as the branches of my arms..." Still, the words are lovely.
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Beautiful sentiments, illustrations, and lay-out as we have all come to expect from your gentle heart. There are, however, punctuation puzzles. I think I would delete the commas after: a life time, are flowing free, wonderous labor.
Also, the last line beginning, "As the branches of my arms..." is not a complete sentence so would not begin with a capital. You might say, "I reach for you as the branches of my arms..." Still, the words are lovely.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-May-2005
Comment from Bryana
Our tears kept inside
through a life time,
are flowing free,
under the soft
whispers of sincere words.
This is just lovely my friend. Thank you for sharing.
Un abrazo, Ana
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Our tears kept inside
through a life time,
are flowing free,
under the soft
whispers of sincere words.
This is just lovely my friend. Thank you for sharing.
Un abrazo, Ana
Comment Written 05-May-2005
Comment from shanakd9
This is a very tender poem, which such a picturesque word picture. It is very descriptive, and warm. I love the way she paints her story, and the story in her poem of trusting and sharing. It is a lovely spiritual story.
I can find nothing about it that I do not like.
Shana Dines
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This is a very tender poem, which such a picturesque word picture. It is very descriptive, and warm. I love the way she paints her story, and the story in her poem of trusting and sharing. It is a lovely spiritual story.
I can find nothing about it that I do not like.
Shana Dines
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from Dawn of Tomorrow
Beautiful read this night, my friend. Just a couple of little things I saw
Old tears kept inside
through a life time, (lifetime)
are flowing free,
under the soft
whispers of sincere words.
My soul revealed
after wondrous labor,
is warmed slowly
by delicious flame, (flames i think)
savoring the sweetness
of your amazing soul.
As the branches
of my arms extend
into an embrace,
lovingly and soft
reaching the radiance
of your love.
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Beautiful read this night, my friend. Just a couple of little things I saw
Old tears kept inside
through a life time, (lifetime)
are flowing free,
under the soft
whispers of sincere words.
My soul revealed
after wondrous labor,
is warmed slowly
by delicious flame, (flames i think)
savoring the sweetness
of your amazing soul.
As the branches
of my arms extend
into an embrace,
lovingly and soft
reaching the radiance
of your love.
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from Lisloh
"Quietly in the overwhelming comfort of trust"
I remember feeling that way once. Thank you for the reminder.
As a poem, I see or hear absolutely nothing wrong here, BRAVO!
As a sentiment, it IS overwhelming! and so eloquently stated.
Things of the Soul.......You have an amazing insight and talent for expressing that insight. Write on my friend. You have much to share and give.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
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"Quietly in the overwhelming comfort of trust"
I remember feeling that way once. Thank you for the reminder.
As a poem, I see or hear absolutely nothing wrong here, BRAVO!
As a sentiment, it IS overwhelming! and so eloquently stated.
Things of the Soul.......You have an amazing insight and talent for expressing that insight. Write on my friend. You have much to share and give.
Take care & be safe
Lisloh
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from Rx kingpen
that was extremely well written. Had the usual sweet one of most of your pieces. Can't ever find fault in your work. Beautiufl as always Pili Pubul, tJ
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that was extremely well written. Had the usual sweet one of most of your pieces. Can't ever find fault in your work. Beautiufl as always Pili Pubul, tJ
Comment Written 04-May-2005
Comment from Gremlinsmom
Pili! I love this. I was drawn in by the title! I love the middle stanza but I wondered should life time be one word? Lifetime? I think maybe it should be unless you separated for a reason I am missing and that could be! :) Beautiful stuff. I really liked it.
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Pili! I love this. I was drawn in by the title! I love the middle stanza but I wondered should life time be one word? Lifetime? I think maybe it should be unless you separated for a reason I am missing and that could be! :) Beautiful stuff. I really liked it.
Comment Written 04-May-2005
