Savannah Love
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Comment from Selina Stambi
Wow this is getting to be most exciting!
Looking forward to the next read...
Some thoughts ...
Shined it on the wall - I would use 'shone' ,but I guess shined is American English
After Cash set Paige the bed ... not quite sure what you mean here
Mary Pat tilted her head (not titled)
after church Sunday (did you mean after church on Sunday?) - church lower case c
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Wow this is getting to be most exciting!
Looking forward to the next read...
Some thoughts ...
Shined it on the wall - I would use 'shone' ,but I guess shined is American English
After Cash set Paige the bed ... not quite sure what you mean here
Mary Pat tilted her head (not titled)
after church Sunday (did you mean after church on Sunday?) - church lower case c
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you for catching those for me. I appreciate the review.
Comment from elgone
Some good suspense here at the end. Is the intruder a person or a ghost? I can sympathize with Paige's plight about moving to the South. I've run into some of the same old crap. The odd thing is that I lived for two years in Austin when I was in college in a predominantly poor black area of town - because I could afford the rent. It wasn't until I moved to Florida (into a very white town) that I really noticed anything.
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took you (to) Sunday dinner
serious girl friend - girlfriend, unless you are stressing here that she means a friend who is a girl
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Some good suspense here at the end. Is the intruder a person or a ghost? I can sympathize with Paige's plight about moving to the South. I've run into some of the same old crap. The odd thing is that I lived for two years in Austin when I was in college in a predominantly poor black area of town - because I could afford the rent. It wasn't until I moved to Florida (into a very white town) that I really noticed anything.
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took you (to) Sunday dinner
serious girl friend - girlfriend, unless you are stressing here that she means a friend who is a girl
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the catching those. I appreciate hearing from you and the kind review.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
The suspense is definitely getting higher with each chapter with Billy Joe finding the secret passage behind the kitchen cupboard leading to the wardrobe in Paige's room. With Cash and Billy Joe outside looking around, Mary Pat hears what she perceives to be someone in the house. She gets her gun.
After Cash set Paige (on) the bed,
"The man who took you (to) Sunday dinner to meet his mama.
The chapter is well-written and reads smoothly.
Curtis
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Barbara,
The suspense is definitely getting higher with each chapter with Billy Joe finding the secret passage behind the kitchen cupboard leading to the wardrobe in Paige's room. With Cash and Billy Joe outside looking around, Mary Pat hears what she perceives to be someone in the house. She gets her gun.
After Cash set Paige (on) the bed,
"The man who took you (to) Sunday dinner to meet his mama.
The chapter is well-written and reads smoothly.
Curtis
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the help and eagle eye. I appreciate the review.
Comment from judiverse
A secret staircase! Just what this old house needs. I'm sure many old houses had them, and possibly tunnels. Reminds me of the early Nancy Drew, "The Secret Staircase" in which there was a tunnel connecting two houses. There is a lot of suspense and tension building in this. Love the humor of Mary Pat's observation that a certain southern boy would miss her if she moved back north, and Paige says she'll take the dog with her. Morgan does come in handy, as he alerts Paige and Mary Pat to an intruder in the house. Excellent chapter. Hope you're enjoying spring break. judi
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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A secret staircase! Just what this old house needs. I'm sure many old houses had them, and possibly tunnels. Reminds me of the early Nancy Drew, "The Secret Staircase" in which there was a tunnel connecting two houses. There is a lot of suspense and tension building in this. Love the humor of Mary Pat's observation that a certain southern boy would miss her if she moved back north, and Paige says she'll take the dog with her. Morgan does come in handy, as he alerts Paige and Mary Pat to an intruder in the house. Excellent chapter. Hope you're enjoying spring break. judi
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Spring break is going way too fast. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're so welcome. I know those spring breaks can go fast. judi
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This has such suspense and mystery - secret
doors and passages - just great. Plenty of excitement
in this story with good natural dialogue throughout.
Marvellous that you found such an appropriate picture.
The man who took you (for or to) Sunday dinner to meet his mama.
Margaret
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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This has such suspense and mystery - secret
doors and passages - just great. Plenty of excitement
in this story with good natural dialogue throughout.
Marvellous that you found such an appropriate picture.
The man who took you (for or to) Sunday dinner to meet his mama.
Margaret
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the eagle eye. I have fixed it. I appreciate your review.
Comment from lakeport
Savannah love indeed there is some suspense going on in the house, I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Hugs! lakeport....
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Savannah love indeed there is some suspense going on in the house, I enjoyed reading the story. God bless you. Hugs! lakeport....
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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your welcome.Hugs!lakeport.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the guys discover a secret staircase and someone is in the house or so it seems.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where the guys discover a secret staircase and someone is in the house or so it seems.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from adewpearl
I think the swelling's gone down - add the apostrophe
Good dialogue throughout
You continue to sustain a sense of suspense and mystery with the unaccounted for noises and secret staircase, etc
another good cliffhanger ending
Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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I think the swelling's gone down - add the apostrophe
Good dialogue throughout
You continue to sustain a sense of suspense and mystery with the unaccounted for noises and secret staircase, etc
another good cliffhanger ending
Brooke
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you for catching that and your kind review.
Comment from c_lucas
A little excitement as the prowler has a death-wish to invade the premieses with Cash and Billy Joe there, plus Mary Pat and Cash have weapons. Paige has done her best to keep Morgan out of the fight. Very well written.
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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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A little excitement as the prowler has a death-wish to invade the premieses with Cash and Billy Joe there, plus Mary Pat and Cash have weapons. Paige has done her best to keep Morgan out of the fight. Very well written.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
