Comment from Bryana

Excellent

Come gently
to my dreams,
enter once again
sweet stranger
and best friend,
in my waiting soul.

This is so beautiful. I hope is biographical.
I'm such a romantic and would like to have
my friends find romance as well.

Thank you amiga for sharing your beautiful poems.

 Comment Written 06-May-2005

Comment from Buffaloeagle

Excellent

Sago; Pili Pubul

'Wow' Truly wonderful, You write such beautiful poetry friend.
I found no error's in the vision of your words of expressions.
Feelings of Purity in your soul.!

Always a pleasure reading your work,Pili.

Meegweetch..}>> B.E.>>}

 Comment Written 05-May-2005

Comment from Waterbird

Excellent

I wish I could give you 20 stars, Pili.
This work, as far as I can see, is
perfect. No punctuation errors at all.
Bravo, lady. The imagery is spectacular,
the writing is clean and tight, the voice
is soft and lucid, and the message it
brings is beautiful. Fantastic!

 Comment Written 05-May-2005

Comment from Lpspider

Excellent

Hey, great job here. Not your best, but good. Great job overall here.

Lpspider


Let's leave
this world behind,
I feel so near
the light that
comes from you, ---one suggestion here---

Let's leave
this world behind.
I feel so...

--or--

Let's leave
this world behind;
I feel so...

 Comment Written 03-May-2005

Comment from Louanne

Excellent

Beautiful work with this
free verse. It was a great
read making me feel so
calm and lovely and
sensuous. How wonderful
to be able to create such
joy for yourself all in a
dream. And by the way,
I hope your dreams do come true!

 Comment Written 03-May-2005

Comment from Balladeer

Excellent

Well Pili you describe the feelings

of being lost in someones eyes

and swwimming in the deeps of

their soul. Finding love is always

harder than describing it but I

hope you find yours as your

description is something to be desired

Skye

 Comment Written 03-May-2005

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

nice dream :-)

"Let's leave
this world behind,
Climbing together
to the highest mountain,
on the breeze of your flight. "

thanx for sharing :-)

 Comment Written 03-May-2005

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Outstanding writing here. "the magic of our souls" and "calming our thirst in the same fountain" many good lines in this work. I love the way you handle imagery in your work. Bob

 Comment Written 03-May-2005

Comment from Cosette

Good

Lovely thoughts and wonderful imagery. There are a good many punctuation errors that need correcting and honestly, it kind of throws me the way some thoughts are complete sentences and other lines are not. A nice read. I liked that line, "...richness of our uniqueness."

 Comment Written 03-May-2005

Comment from gman03

Excellent

Having someone special with whom you can bond your relationship can be a great feeling. Climbing the mountain gives a sense of accomplishment, where you can breathe air that is fresh and crisp and clean. Leaving the world behind is a wonderful way to energize weary spirits. Such is the sense of freedom inspired by your words in this poem.

I found it refreshing Pili and would suggest nothing for change.

 Comment Written 03-May-2005