My Right To Write At Night
So annoying when you can't sleep!39 total reviews
Comment from Joannforsberg
In one of the points of my life where the "dark night of the soul" does not disappear at daylight. Coming here with such a sense of defeat and reading the poems and stories here give me hope for a better day to appear.
I have not strength to be the reviewer I should be. Yet, I want you to know I appreciate reading your words, for the array of emotions take me to a place that allows me to escape my life each day.
Blessings and truly I enjoy your writing, JO
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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In one of the points of my life where the "dark night of the soul" does not disappear at daylight. Coming here with such a sense of defeat and reading the poems and stories here give me hope for a better day to appear.
I have not strength to be the reviewer I should be. Yet, I want you to know I appreciate reading your words, for the array of emotions take me to a place that allows me to escape my life each day.
Blessings and truly I enjoy your writing, JO
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your review.
Alexis x
Comment from Norbanus
It must be nice to have the knack
to write your muse's share.
I sit and try and can't get back
unless another's is there.
I need an inspiration to
conjure up a verse.
When I see one as those you do
I dream up something worse.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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It must be nice to have the knack
to write your muse's share.
I sit and try and can't get back
unless another's is there.
I need an inspiration to
conjure up a verse.
When I see one as those you do
I dream up something worse.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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That's excellent! Wouldn't it be fun if we all had to review in rhymed verse for the day? Nah, maybe not! He he.
Alexis x
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Give it a try, alexis. Sometimes it's fun.
Comment from gypsycaravan
Oh, how I wish I had a sixth star for your poem. It hums like music and is so true for fan-storians. Seriously, it is flawless and reads like a porsche-flows beautifully. The thoughts within it are so delightful. I applaud you. Bravo.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Oh, how I wish I had a sixth star for your poem. It hums like music and is so true for fan-storians. Seriously, it is flawless and reads like a porsche-flows beautifully. The thoughts within it are so delightful. I applaud you. Bravo.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Woh! What a wonderful thing to say. Don't worry about the six - give me a review like this any day. Thank you!
Alexis x
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming couplets including the good proximate rhyme of awash/toss
good consonance of W sounds in words awash I wondered
great humor - love the effect of the late night tea on you LOL
good alliteration in the now spends nights passage
love the reaction you imagine your kids would be having
good alliteration in cyber space/spent
and in tables turned
love the humor throughout, especially in the final stanza :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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solid rhyming couplets including the good proximate rhyme of awash/toss
good consonance of W sounds in words awash I wondered
great humor - love the effect of the late night tea on you LOL
good alliteration in the now spends nights passage
love the reaction you imagine your kids would be having
good alliteration in cyber space/spent
and in tables turned
love the humor throughout, especially in the final stanza :-) Brooke
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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I'm delighted to know you enjoyed it, Brooke. Thank you so much for such a great review. I really appreciated it.
Alexis x
Comment from Curly Girly
You have an amusing sense of humour. There has to be a good man out there for you!
Now -- my advice -- Stop the poetry for a while. Please give us another chapter of your story! I'm waiting on the edge of my chair -- just hoping to get it soon.
:)
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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You have an amusing sense of humour. There has to be a good man out there for you!
Now -- my advice -- Stop the poetry for a while. Please give us another chapter of your story! I'm waiting on the edge of my chair -- just hoping to get it soon.
:)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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I'm going through a bit of a comedy phase at the moment which could be why poor Laura is still waiting to get off that ship. I'd probably have her doing something eccentrically ridiculous if my muse was let loose on her at the moment! Okay - I'll get back on her case this weekend!
Alexis x
Comment from jshep
Hi Alexis. I imagine there is not a writer on site that has not experienced this dilemma. I love the title. The rhyme is great and it is a very snappy poem that has great humor, especially when you bring up the kids and what they might think. LOL I do have a couple of suggestions just to maybe make the flow a bit better, but then that might be a matter of opinion. :) Fun poem and enjoyed reading. Joyce
As I lay in bed the other night, my mind with words awash
I wondered should I write them down? Or in my bed I'll toss
An hour passed by, and I finally grasped the meaning of addiction
(An hour passed, and finally, I grasped the meaning of addiction)
As I stumbled through the darkness to my laptop in the kitchen
That mission done I did return, but sleep was not forthcoming
Two cups of tea had passed through me to activate my plumbing!
So up I got and wrote some more. God, please give me a break!
It's only poetry, I thought. Who cares, for goodness sake?
At half past three I realised my actions were such (sheer) madness
and if my kids could see me now, their hearts would fill with sadness
'She's lost the plot!' I wouldn't doubt are words I'd hear them say
She now spends nights before a screen, and sleeps for half the day!
Such irony, I've got to say, for when they were in their teens(they were just teens)
Their nights were spent in cyber space, their lessons spent in dreams
So, sorry Kids, it's my time now, the tables have been turned
My right to write whenever (whene'er) I like is well and truly earned!
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Hi Alexis. I imagine there is not a writer on site that has not experienced this dilemma. I love the title. The rhyme is great and it is a very snappy poem that has great humor, especially when you bring up the kids and what they might think. LOL I do have a couple of suggestions just to maybe make the flow a bit better, but then that might be a matter of opinion. :) Fun poem and enjoyed reading. Joyce
As I lay in bed the other night, my mind with words awash
I wondered should I write them down? Or in my bed I'll toss
An hour passed by, and I finally grasped the meaning of addiction
(An hour passed, and finally, I grasped the meaning of addiction)
As I stumbled through the darkness to my laptop in the kitchen
That mission done I did return, but sleep was not forthcoming
Two cups of tea had passed through me to activate my plumbing!
So up I got and wrote some more. God, please give me a break!
It's only poetry, I thought. Who cares, for goodness sake?
At half past three I realised my actions were such (sheer) madness
and if my kids could see me now, their hearts would fill with sadness
'She's lost the plot!' I wouldn't doubt are words I'd hear them say
She now spends nights before a screen, and sleeps for half the day!
Such irony, I've got to say, for when they were in their teens(they were just teens)
Their nights were spent in cyber space, their lessons spent in dreams
So, sorry Kids, it's my time now, the tables have been turned
My right to write whenever (whene'er) I like is well and truly earned!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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All fantastic suggestions, nearly every one used. Thank you so much! This is what Fan Story is all about - great constructive criticism backed up by encouragement.
Alexis x
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
LOL You tell em, alexis! That could have been ME you were writing about. We can't let those ideas and poems get away from us- mine often float right out of my head before I can catch them. :) So, I too get up in the night and write. You're right- it's OUR time now! Just LOVED this! OH- and know what you mean about the tea and plumbing- lol with me, it's coffee. Betty
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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LOL You tell em, alexis! That could have been ME you were writing about. We can't let those ideas and poems get away from us- mine often float right out of my head before I can catch them. :) So, I too get up in the night and write. You're right- it's OUR time now! Just LOVED this! OH- and know what you mean about the tea and plumbing- lol with me, it's coffee. Betty
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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There do indeed seem to be a few of us, if the reviews are anything to go by. We've all been rumbled! Coffee? Now, that would keep me awake all night! Thank you so much for the lovely review.
Alexis x
Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid
Aloha Alexisleech,
Thank you for this great poem about that muse keeping us up late into the morning hours. It has happened to me many times also. I love the flow and rhyming in this fun poem. It deserves a "6" Star Rating and you deserve to write whenever you feel like it. Write on girlfriend.
Aloha, Ginger Hawaiian Mermaid
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Aloha Alexisleech,
Thank you for this great poem about that muse keeping us up late into the morning hours. It has happened to me many times also. I love the flow and rhyming in this fun poem. It deserves a "6" Star Rating and you deserve to write whenever you feel like it. Write on girlfriend.
Aloha, Ginger Hawaiian Mermaid
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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And thank you most sincerely for the fabulous review and very complimentary six. Really appreciated!
Alexis x
Comment from prayingpoet
Very true for writers...they have the right to write when they choose! I enjoyed reading from start to end. I don't have many of these days, just now and then.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Very true for writers...they have the right to write when they choose! I enjoyed reading from start to end. I don't have many of these days, just now and then.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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To would seem that there are a few of us out there, if the reviews are anything to go by. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Alexis x
Comment from Donald O. Cassidy
Well put!, alexisleech. I'n not expert enough at poetry to name this rhyming scheme and pace, but it's catchy.
I think it deals with reality, those inspirations taht come to us writers at one time or another.
One phrase in one of your stanzas is new to me, and I like it: after bouts of intermittent beating away at the laptop, you write,"...to activate my plumbing." That's a fresh way of saying you needed a bathroom break. Cute.
Don
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Well put!, alexisleech. I'n not expert enough at poetry to name this rhyming scheme and pace, but it's catchy.
I think it deals with reality, those inspirations taht come to us writers at one time or another.
One phrase in one of your stanzas is new to me, and I like it: after bouts of intermittent beating away at the laptop, you write,"...to activate my plumbing." That's a fresh way of saying you needed a bathroom break. Cute.
Don
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. This one was written 'the morning after,' so to speak, after a very frustrating night! Thank you so much for your review.
Alexis x
