Savannah Love
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb,
Good you are making your story more and more eventfully with each chapter
Cash and is even getting on edge and the idea of a hiiden stair case is really mysterious
Gert
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Hello Barb,
Good you are making your story more and more eventfully with each chapter
Cash and is even getting on edge and the idea of a hiiden stair case is really mysterious
Gert
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I am not sure what it will take for Cash to believe. LOL
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You are welcome
Gert
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Barbara,
I will be home tomorrow and hope I can catch up, just like you. This is a great chapter and one I enjoyed reading. However, I find it a little scary for everyone in the house. I think this whole thing has given Cash pause but doubt he will admit it as not to scare Paige. Now I am worried about a secret staircase and wonder what they will find there. Well done....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Hi Barbara,
I will be home tomorrow and hope I can catch up, just like you. This is a great chapter and one I enjoyed reading. However, I find it a little scary for everyone in the house. I think this whole thing has given Cash pause but doubt he will admit it as not to scare Paige. Now I am worried about a secret staircase and wonder what they will find there. Well done....blessings, chey
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I just took a minutes to write down all the things I need to clear up in this novel, so I don't miss anything. I have tangled a huge web.
Comment from Gungalo
Ooooh a secret staircase. I wouldn't be surprised if there were a tunnel too. This is all a bunch of nonsense. If you ask me, someone is doing it to her and I think I know who.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Ooooh a secret staircase. I wouldn't be surprised if there were a tunnel too. This is all a bunch of nonsense. If you ask me, someone is doing it to her and I think I know who.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Hmmm, we will have to wait and see. I am wondering if there aren't the beings involved. Thank you for the kind review.
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Well that was ny first guess. LOL
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Well that was my first guess. LOL
Comment from Bender8982
Great job, i am very pleased by the wordage of your work. it has a great emotion to it as well. you have done a wonderful job here and should be happy with your work. keep it coming :) i want to see more.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Great job, i am very pleased by the wordage of your work. it has a great emotion to it as well. you have done a wonderful job here and should be happy with your work. keep it coming :) i want to see more.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Another great chapter. You are wise to keep the postings concise.
I like the smell of mystery in the midst of potential romance.
Hapyy Spring Break!
Spags:
your wife's pea shooter can do. (no question mark)
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Another great chapter. You are wise to keep the postings concise.
I like the smell of mystery in the midst of potential romance.
Hapyy Spring Break!
Spags:
your wife's pea shooter can do. (no question mark)
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the eagle eye. I appreciate the review.
Comment from Shadow Pahn
Hi barbara,
I haven't read the previous chapters and i usually don't get into reviewing pieces that are already well under way, but because this was so nice and short, i read it just to see if it would entice me.
I would probably read on, but i'll have to delve into the start first to get to know the characters a bit better
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Hi barbara,
I haven't read the previous chapters and i usually don't get into reviewing pieces that are already well under way, but because this was so nice and short, i read it just to see if it would entice me.
I would probably read on, but i'll have to delve into the start first to get to know the characters a bit better
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from unimatrix001
Oooo... Secret passage ways in the spooky house. Good tension builder.
Nothing seem[ed] out of order. - minor tense error
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Oooo... Secret passage ways in the spooky house. Good tension builder.
Nothing seem[ed] out of order. - minor tense error
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I thought I already fixed that. I must have forgotten to save.
Comment from Norbanus
Excellent interaction between the character, Barbara.
Here are a couple of spots to check:
and they scanned the room before entering. Nothing seems(seemed) out of order.
It don't(doesn't) make sense
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Excellent interaction between the character, Barbara.
Here are a couple of spots to check:
and they scanned the room before entering. Nothing seems(seemed) out of order.
It don't(doesn't) make sense
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I have fixed the seemed but I will keep the don't because it fits the character of the person doing the thinking. He wouldn't think with proper grammar. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from garrymc5
Mostly good. A few things:
Morgan put his front paws on the arm of the couch and barked. Paige petted his head. "What's wrong?" ---You have made the dog the subject. Suggest we see it from Paige's or Cash's viewpoint. OR omit, and start with the door knock. It get things moving faster.
From there, the story gets going...
You can omit It don't make sense. It's impied, and adds nothing.
The ending: There's no secret tunnels." Cash started up the stairs. "Where does it lead?" seems like a contradiction, and only confuses. There is a 'hook' that needs reshaping, if you want it to work.
Overall need to tighten up, get all expressions right, and leave the reader wanting more.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
Mostly good. A few things:
Morgan put his front paws on the arm of the couch and barked. Paige petted his head. "What's wrong?" ---You have made the dog the subject. Suggest we see it from Paige's or Cash's viewpoint. OR omit, and start with the door knock. It get things moving faster.
From there, the story gets going...
You can omit It don't make sense. It's impied, and adds nothing.
The ending: There's no secret tunnels." Cash started up the stairs. "Where does it lead?" seems like a contradiction, and only confuses. There is a 'hook' that needs reshaping, if you want it to work.
Overall need to tighten up, get all expressions right, and leave the reader wanting more.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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I have made all the corrections except deleting the puppy. I have way too many fans who love the pup's input. I would probably be tarred and feathered. Thank you for your eagle eye and help.
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I see. Fair enough, but maybe the pup can be included a little further down, or use it as the hook.
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I will see what I can do about rearranging the pup. Many of my reviews comment on the pup. Go figure.
Comment from TonyCr
This is excellent it's well written, the plot is strong, the characters are well fleshed out and there is a sense of anticipation at the end of the chapter.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
This is excellent it's well written, the plot is strong, the characters are well fleshed out and there is a sense of anticipation at the end of the chapter.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.