Savannah Love
Viewing comments for Chapter 36 "Chapter 9, part 1"Can a fallen confederate soldier encourage love?
71 total reviews
Comment from Jacqueline M Franklin
Hi,
Doesn't Cash know they wouldn't be called secret tunnels if they weren't secret?
This is gittin' good!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Hi,
Doesn't Cash know they wouldn't be called secret tunnels if they weren't secret?
This is gittin' good!
Cheers & Blessings
Keep Smilin'.... Jax (*-*)
Comment Written 20-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2014
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Oh so true. LOL Thank you.
Comment from Sankey
Gets more and more exciting. Very interesting reading. mentioned your book to my wife she said no so sorry about that. No Spags again.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Gets more and more exciting. Very interesting reading. mentioned your book to my wife she said no so sorry about that. No Spags again.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2013
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2013
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Thank you for the kind review and dropping by.
Comment from justmarly
Hi Barbara. Nice to be back at Paige's home. I was out to the doctor yesterday. I had a bit of work here to do and now I have seated to read. Hope I can do a lot today. I think someone is after Paige and it makes it fun. Keep up the good work. MJ
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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Hi Barbara. Nice to be back at Paige's home. I was out to the doctor yesterday. I had a bit of work here to do and now I have seated to read. Hope I can do a lot today. I think someone is after Paige and it makes it fun. Keep up the good work. MJ
Comment Written 20-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2013
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You are simply wonderful.
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Thank you so much. Getting back. MJ
Comment from Sasha
This is moving along at a nice pace. You have built up just enough tension to pique my interest and make me nervous. I do hope Paige is not in any danger.
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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This is moving along at a nice pace. You have built up just enough tension to pique my interest and make me nervous. I do hope Paige is not in any danger.
Comment Written 18-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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I am sorry you had to read this with no many attached. Thank you.
Comment from rama devi
Good chapter section. Flows well, wiht fine dialog and narrative balance. Not any spag except this one suggestion:
"Billy Joe, come with me. I think the downstairs is safe," he glanced at the women, "but we'd better make sure before we check upstairs and the outside."
"Billy Joe, come with me. I think the downstairs is safe." He glanced at the women. "But we'd better make sure before we check upstairs and the outside."
Can't comment on the chapter as a whole until I read more--which I am now on my way to do...
Have a nice spring break, dear B.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Good chapter section. Flows well, wiht fine dialog and narrative balance. Not any spag except this one suggestion:
"Billy Joe, come with me. I think the downstairs is safe," he glanced at the women, "but we'd better make sure before we check upstairs and the outside."
"Billy Joe, come with me. I think the downstairs is safe." He glanced at the women. "But we'd better make sure before we check upstairs and the outside."
Can't comment on the chapter as a whole until I read more--which I am now on my way to do...
Have a nice spring break, dear B.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your support.
Comment from CR Delport
Another interesting chapter that is well written. The story is progressing nicely and remains interesting. No secret tunnels? I am not so sure :)
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Another interesting chapter that is well written. The story is progressing nicely and remains interesting. No secret tunnels? I am not so sure :)
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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I'm not so sure either. We will have to wait and see. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Righteous Riter
This story has a pace that is nice and steady. The writer does a good job peaking the readers interest. The emotions of the character is displayed by the writer as the writer does a good job of bringing this chapter to a close.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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This story has a pace that is nice and steady. The writer does a good job peaking the readers interest. The emotions of the character is displayed by the writer as the writer does a good job of bringing this chapter to a close.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from kashmayank
I have read a few chapters and this is a good story it has a continual flow which adds to the appeal of the work all the best nice job
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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I have read a few chapters and this is a good story it has a continual flow which adds to the appeal of the work all the best nice job
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from JM daSilva
Does Cash have any power to make the dog understand? The scenes were easy to follow. Good job.
I have an editing suggestion for you.
By the time she gets there (,) they're gone."
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Does Cash have any power to make the dog understand? The scenes were easy to follow. Good job.
I have an editing suggestion for you.
By the time she gets there (,) they're gone."
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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I will take a look at that area.
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Ok.
Comment from jaeladarling
This seems like an interesting story. However, you have quite a few simple sentences, and this makes for a monotonous read. We have no insight into the characters' thoughts or emotions outside of the dialogue.
For example, which of these sounds more interesting?
"Martin ran up the stairs."
"Martin ran up the stairs, his mind racing as he tracked the elusive killer."
The first one is functional, but it tells us nothing except that Martin ran up the stairs. The second one gives us all kinds of insight, telling us that not only is Martin running up the stairs, but his mind is going a mile a minute while chasing a killer.
That's the sort of thing you need to check while writing this story. You have a lot of functional sentences, but no descriptive or insightful ones.
Work on that, and you'll have a great story. :)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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This seems like an interesting story. However, you have quite a few simple sentences, and this makes for a monotonous read. We have no insight into the characters' thoughts or emotions outside of the dialogue.
For example, which of these sounds more interesting?
"Martin ran up the stairs."
"Martin ran up the stairs, his mind racing as he tracked the elusive killer."
The first one is functional, but it tells us nothing except that Martin ran up the stairs. The second one gives us all kinds of insight, telling us that not only is Martin running up the stairs, but his mind is going a mile a minute while chasing a killer.
That's the sort of thing you need to check while writing this story. You have a lot of functional sentences, but no descriptive or insightful ones.
Work on that, and you'll have a great story. :)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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I will work in it
