The Curse of 'Gator Bayou
Viewing comments for Chapter 16 "Chapter 16 Home to Houma"A young Cajun girl struggles to survive.
9 total reviews
Comment from Gladness
Well, the story has taken a sweet turn to the romantic. I like it. I enjoyed the read, did not find any nits or mixed up italics. Just a good story, thanks, :) Anita
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Well, the story has taken a sweet turn to the romantic. I like it. I enjoyed the read, did not find any nits or mixed up italics. Just a good story, thanks, :) Anita
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 18-Mar-2013
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Thanks Anita for your kind review
Comment from BethShelby
I enjoying to story. I thought maybe Renee and Marie would get together but it appears to be Nell who will take Evangeline's place. I'm glad to know Marie is healing at least physically. Hurry back so we don't get behind with the story.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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I enjoying to story. I thought maybe Renee and Marie would get together but it appears to be Nell who will take Evangeline's place. I'm glad to know Marie is healing at least physically. Hurry back so we don't get behind with the story.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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My 83yo mom is visiting me from out of town but I will be back in a few days
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
I am glad that Renee will be getting his life back together. I do wish that Gator would be out of the way permanently. I hate to think of what he is plotting for Marie and Renee. And now that Renee loves Nell what will happen to her. Great as usual, Carolyn
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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I am glad that Renee will be getting his life back together. I do wish that Gator would be out of the way permanently. I hate to think of what he is plotting for Marie and Renee. And now that Renee loves Nell what will happen to her. Great as usual, Carolyn
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thank you Carolyn for continuing to read and review my story. Well, I got chapter 17 written. LOL. My 83 yo mother visited me for 5 days on my vacation and was having so much fun couldn't break away and get it written. Finally. today. Be kind. :O) It needs work. :o)
Comment from donkeyoatey
Not only is the story continuing, we are becoming more involved, and CARE about the characters. I like the deep sout feel you are able to get into your story..I AM a southern boy! LOL! carry on, I want to read the rest! Once more, thanks for using my swamp shot! donkeyoatey
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Not only is the story continuing, we are becoming more involved, and CARE about the characters. I like the deep sout feel you are able to get into your story..I AM a southern boy! LOL! carry on, I want to read the rest! Once more, thanks for using my swamp shot! donkeyoatey
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thank you donkeyoatey for your great pictures and for reading my story. You probably can give me some pointers. ;O) I'm from Mississippi but love Louisiana. :o)
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Us "southern boys" are different for sure..will help any way I possibly can..but I CAN'T write! LOL! Donkeyoatey
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You don't have to write, just keep taking those great pictures.
Comment from Val Crisson
I missed your last few chapters, but I think I get the drift of this. Great chapter with a lot emotion and suspense there for a while. Once again, I'm really enjoying this story when I get a chance to read it. I may have to catch up. So glad, Rennee finally found someone who really loves him.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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I missed your last few chapters, but I think I get the drift of this. Great chapter with a lot emotion and suspense there for a while. Once again, I'm really enjoying this story when I get a chance to read it. I may have to catch up. So glad, Rennee finally found someone who really loves him.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thanks Val. I am glad you are reading and enjoying my story.
Comment from Misrael
Someone like Gigi deserves what she gets and deserves the same kind of treatment that that jerk gave to Marie.They both deserve what they get. Good read and keep on writing. P.S. This is a very interesting story. keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Someone like Gigi deserves what she gets and deserves the same kind of treatment that that jerk gave to Marie.They both deserve what they get. Good read and keep on writing. P.S. This is a very interesting story. keep up the good work.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thank you Misrael. I am glad you are enjoying my story.
Comment from vapros
Five stars for Chapter 16, pal. New Orleans and Terrebonne Parish - yats and coonasses. Your characters made for a very entertaining chapter. I'm hoping Marie will take a turn for the better, and you must not let Nell go back to Texas. As usual, the dialogue is good. Be well.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Five stars for Chapter 16, pal. New Orleans and Terrebonne Parish - yats and coonasses. Your characters made for a very entertaining chapter. I'm hoping Marie will take a turn for the better, and you must not let Nell go back to Texas. As usual, the dialogue is good. Be well.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thanks varos. Oh, why not let Nell go back to Texas? No...she's done fallen for a Louisiana boy...those Texas men are dead meat to her, now. :O) Just something about those coonasses. LOL I love 'em. OOps, better not let my Texas born hubby read this one. :o)
Comment from Shadow Pahn
Hi Jo,
This is a well written piece, but there is something going on with the italics. Because you use it as thoughts (Which is a great technique) the format errors make it confusing! (Probably the site's fault, not you) I think there are a few italics where they aren't supposed to be.
One example: She slept with a loaded rifle under her bed.
It starts not italicized and then goes italicized mid sentence!
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Hi Jo,
This is a well written piece, but there is something going on with the italics. Because you use it as thoughts (Which is a great technique) the format errors make it confusing! (Probably the site's fault, not you) I think there are a few italics where they aren't supposed to be.
One example: She slept with a loaded rifle under her bed.
It starts not italicized and then goes italicized mid sentence!
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Yes, I sent this from work to my home email then copied it to fanstory and I thought the italics were messing up. Thank you for letting me know. I'll try to fix.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of gradually heightening the readers curiosity. The writer does a good job of tapping into the readers mind and leading the reader where the reader needs to go. The writer does a good job of bringing this chapter to a passionate ending and setting up for the next chapter. Good job.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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The writer does a good job of gradually heightening the readers curiosity. The writer does a good job of tapping into the readers mind and leading the reader where the reader needs to go. The writer does a good job of bringing this chapter to a passionate ending and setting up for the next chapter. Good job.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you Righteous Riter for continuing to review my work so kindly.
