Seance
Skeptics Beware58 total reviews
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, amahra, you did a great job writing this 55 word story about the spirits that are better left to sleep, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in teh contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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this is very well written, amahra, you did a great job writing this 55 word story about the spirits that are better left to sleep, i enjoyed reading it, good luck in teh contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you sweetwoodjax. Appreciate it.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Yikes! Atypical chills ran down my spine at that closing sentence! This is quite the shocking little story, and I thoroughly enjoyed the goosebump experience. :)
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Yikes! Atypical chills ran down my spine at that closing sentence! This is quite the shocking little story, and I thoroughly enjoyed the goosebump experience. :)
Nicely done. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you for stopping by and reviewing. I'm glad you liked the goosebumps. Smile
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It was my pleasure. :)
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
This kind of thing is dangerous to fool around with. Demons are real. You can open yourself up to all kinds of unpleasant experiences. Well-done. God loves you and so do I.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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This kind of thing is dangerous to fool around with. Demons are real. You can open yourself up to all kinds of unpleasant experiences. Well-done. God loves you and so do I.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Yes, I know. You'd be surprised how much I edited this little story so I wouldn't spoil it with my own Spiritual take on it. I wanted to leave it open to the reader. But if you read my author notes..."dangerously so," nails it. Thank you for your review. And God bless you.
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I got it. I knew we were on the same wave length. It's nothing to play around with. God loves you and I do too.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
short and sharp - well done, amahra.
I won't attend a seance - I did as
a young woman once, and what happened
was quite frightening - and the
consequences for the person distressing.
some are surely fixed, but still I won't mess with what
I don't understand.
good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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short and sharp - well done, amahra.
I won't attend a seance - I did as
a young woman once, and what happened
was quite frightening - and the
consequences for the person distressing.
some are surely fixed, but still I won't mess with what
I don't understand.
good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you Margaret. I believe some are fake and so are not. Oh...by the way, I named one of my characters in my new story, Margaret; she's a love interest to my main character.
Comment from words
I like your short, short story.
You convey the scene descriptively in just a few words.
I would imagine the "experts" bemusement will change, if he can not find the
"trick".
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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I like your short, short story.
You convey the scene descriptively in just a few words.
I would imagine the "experts" bemusement will change, if he can not find the
"trick".
Hugs, d
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Your short contest entry leaves a lot of questions about what is real and what is not in your readers minds. You did a very good job with is post. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Your short contest entry leaves a lot of questions about what is real and what is not in your readers minds. You did a very good job with is post. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you. It's a lot to say with so few words. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Healthyheartpoet
The artwork that you have presented is apt for the content of this outstanding work. S©ances are mystical and difficult to know if they are fake or real, the fact that the plant expert is bemused, adds to the mystery, each one has to decide for themselves.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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The artwork that you have presented is apt for the content of this outstanding work. S©ances are mystical and difficult to know if they are fake or real, the fact that the plant expert is bemused, adds to the mystery, each one has to decide for themselves.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your fine comments.
Comment from JM daSilva
Great writing. The ones I have investigated were not real because of one reason: language barrier. If you say you're a German doctor, you should speak German. Family is easier to simulate, but for a linguist, the medium can't say things that don't fit the family pattern. Some mediums are cleverer, if you come from Atlantis and speak Atlantian, how can an expert verify it?
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Great writing. The ones I have investigated were not real because of one reason: language barrier. If you say you're a German doctor, you should speak German. Family is easier to simulate, but for a linguist, the medium can't say things that don't fit the family pattern. Some mediums are cleverer, if you come from Atlantis and speak Atlantian, how can an expert verify it?
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you for that bit of information. Your comments are well received.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Norbanus
Take a chance on a Seance
The spirits might approve
and if they don't then those who won't
will think they're in the groove
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Take a chance on a Seance
The spirits might approve
and if they don't then those who won't
will think they're in the groove
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Ok, very nice. Thank you.
Comment from Dan Diego
This is my second review of a 55 word contest entry this morning and the competition is heating up. In the interest of full disclosure, I have entered the contest as well.
There's a lot to like about this supernatural story. I think you've teased the story really well by calling it "Seance," and the sub-title is clever and inviting.
The artwork is well chosen and apt for the writing theme. You have presented this writing in a large bold font which is beneficial for our older readers and does not detract from the story.
The writing is error-free and I saw no spelling, grammar or punctuation errors. It is a scene to tease the skeptics.
The strength of the writing, for me, was the narrator left the story decision up to the reader. I got to decided what is meant by "bemused," based on my own degree of belief or skepticism. And I believe ...
I believe this story will do well in the contest.
Good luck, good writing and I hope to see you around the site.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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This is my second review of a 55 word contest entry this morning and the competition is heating up. In the interest of full disclosure, I have entered the contest as well.
There's a lot to like about this supernatural story. I think you've teased the story really well by calling it "Seance," and the sub-title is clever and inviting.
The artwork is well chosen and apt for the writing theme. You have presented this writing in a large bold font which is beneficial for our older readers and does not detract from the story.
The writing is error-free and I saw no spelling, grammar or punctuation errors. It is a scene to tease the skeptics.
The strength of the writing, for me, was the narrator left the story decision up to the reader. I got to decided what is meant by "bemused," based on my own degree of belief or skepticism. And I believe ...
I believe this story will do well in the contest.
Good luck, good writing and I hope to see you around the site.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you Dan for this very thorough analysis of my writing. I'm looking forward to reading you.
