Seance
Skeptics Beware58 total reviews
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is a nice response to the fifty five word story challenge. It has also thrown some light on the activities of seers and seance. very well done
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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This is a nice response to the fifty five word story challenge. It has also thrown some light on the activities of seers and seance. very well done
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your review. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from J. Dark
This 55 word contest entry is captivating. Your subject is interesting and entertaining. Your description of the medium is superb and I liked the way the mention of the planted expert which hints at scepticism. Great work and I wish you luck for the contest.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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This 55 word contest entry is captivating. Your subject is interesting and entertaining. Your description of the medium is superb and I liked the way the mention of the planted expert which hints at scepticism. Great work and I wish you luck for the contest.
Kindest of regards,
Julie :-)
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thank you for this fine review. I'm so glad you liked it.
Comment from humpwhistle
I like your topic for this 55-worder. It's original.
'like a rabid dog' is an overworked cliche, and adds nothing to your story. I suspect those four words could be put to better use. Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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I like your topic for this 55-worder. It's original.
'like a rabid dog' is an overworked cliche, and adds nothing to your story. I suspect those four words could be put to better use. Just a thought.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 15-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much for your advice and review. I really do appreciate it. How would you fill in the blank? "foaming at the mouth, like a-------."
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Actually, I wouldn't use a simile there at all. Foaming at the mouth is sufficient. I'd use those extra words to reinforce somewhere else in the story. I know, it's complicated.
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No. It's not complicated. I'll give it some thought. A simile invokes an image that people are already familiar with. But I will give it serious thought. Thanks for the advice. I really appreciate it.
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Normally, I'd agree with you about the value of simile, but you only have 55 words to work with here. Do what you think is best.
I have an entry in this dog race too, so beware my advice! Lee
Comment from Carole Rosa
Amahra, I received a very nice review from you, so I decided to stop by your profile to take a peek at your work. I don't believe in a Seance or fortune tellers, but I do think it's fun to go to a party, every once in awhile, where the fortune teller gives me a message that this is my week to meet Mr. Right. The artwork is perfect for your 55 word story. Good luck in the contest. Carole
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Amahra, I received a very nice review from you, so I decided to stop by your profile to take a peek at your work. I don't believe in a Seance or fortune tellers, but I do think it's fun to go to a party, every once in awhile, where the fortune teller gives me a message that this is my week to meet Mr. Right. The artwork is perfect for your 55 word story. Good luck in the contest. Carole
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Oh thank you so much for stopping by. And thank you for your review.
Comment from angelmagnet
An artful tale well told within the confines of the contest. The author says much and asks even more... Clever. Good read. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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An artful tale well told within the confines of the contest. The author says much and asks even more... Clever. Good read. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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And thank you for stopping by and reading. Bless you my dear.
Comment from adewpearl
I personally believe they are always fake, but fake or real, you certainly create a strong visual of this seance.
It is so easy and dramatic to visualize the whites of her eyes as she foams at the mouth and the thumping comes from the walls. Brooke
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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I personally believe they are always fake, but fake or real, you certainly create a strong visual of this seance.
It is so easy and dramatic to visualize the whites of her eyes as she foams at the mouth and the thumping comes from the walls. Brooke
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you Brooke. It's my first story using just 55 words. It was quite a challenge but I really enjoyed it. I really believe being a poet helped since we have to write so much in small stanzas.
Comment from RJFunston
Hello again,
I just read this and again you show your talent. This is another example why I love reading and why I've fell in love with poetry. Most people (like me) would go '55 words, I can't write something meaningful in 55 words'. They would be surprise to see what can happen. Words are like magic. You believe what you see because your mind tells you to. With words, you write what the mind tells you, then the people that read it believe you are magic.
Great job.
Robert
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Hello again,
I just read this and again you show your talent. This is another example why I love reading and why I've fell in love with poetry. Most people (like me) would go '55 words, I can't write something meaningful in 55 words'. They would be surprise to see what can happen. Words are like magic. You believe what you see because your mind tells you to. With words, you write what the mind tells you, then the people that read it believe you are magic.
Great job.
Robert
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Hey, Thank you Robert. I am so grateful to you for such kind words. I am really glad you liked it. Wow! magic Mmmm
Comment from katz meow
Really enjoyed this little story - you tell a lot in the short 55 words restriction. I've been to a seance and believe in the powers that be. Great job at meeting this challenge and writing quit coherently and interestingly. Good luck in the contest. I've also entered it and know how difficult it can be.
ps: this was a 55 word review...katz
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Really enjoyed this little story - you tell a lot in the short 55 words restriction. I've been to a seance and believe in the powers that be. Great job at meeting this challenge and writing quit coherently and interestingly. Good luck in the contest. I've also entered it and know how difficult it can be.
ps: this was a 55 word review...katz
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Lol you are so cute. Thank you katz for this fine review. I'm go glad you enjoyed my little story. Wow, you're the second person who's told me they've been to one. Brrrrrr. lol
Comment from forestport12
This is a really good entry for the contest. Funny, I'd been thinking about a medium who is talking to a dead person at a house for a short one. But I really think this might be a good one for the contest. I like how you used the white eyes and foaming with such few words available to put the reader in the moment. Not an easy thing to do on short order.
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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This is a really good entry for the contest. Funny, I'd been thinking about a medium who is talking to a dead person at a house for a short one. But I really think this might be a good one for the contest. I like how you used the white eyes and foaming with such few words available to put the reader in the moment. Not an easy thing to do on short order.
Comment Written 12-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 12-Mar-2013
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Wow! are you encouraging me or what. lol Thank you so much for your find words. I'm not a brilliant writer, like so many on here, yourself included. My secret is editing, editing, editing. You are looking at an entirely different story than the one I posted on Sunday. But your six star has told me that I finally nailed it. Thank you for not reading the first one. lol Bless you.
Comment from johnsonbarbara
Wow! Powerful for so few words. I've never believed in mediums and such; but I've known people who do and they truly do believe. They claim they can prove, but could never show me. Intriguing premise.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Wow! Powerful for so few words. I've never believed in mediums and such; but I've known people who do and they truly do believe. They claim they can prove, but could never show me. Intriguing premise.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013
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Thank you for stopping by and reading my poem. I'm very pleased that you liked it.
