Comment from MelissaBickel

Excellent

I wish I had six for the sheer use of words in this piece. What an image I've creating.. LOL...Perhaps he's been to Mars while driving a spacy car....or took a chunk of cheese, from the moon as he pleased.

I so enjoy reading your contributions to this site!

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013

Thanks, Melissa.

It is a relief to be able to write a bouncy piece of nonsense sometimes. Thanks for the kind words.

How goes the kyrielle sonnet?

Steve

reply by MelissaBickel on 15-Mar-2013

Steve I'm struggling lol.. I suck at form I think I've redone it four times now. Sigh

Comment from GarthL

Excellent

That does have a very nice sing-songy rhythm to it Steve. And a fun read it is too! Ironing piles vanishing and trousers properly creased would be good and peace in the Middle East would be a Godsend or an aliensend. Well conceived and conveyed, very creative and very enjoyable thank you. StaySafe, Garth

 Comment Written 11-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013

Thanks, Garth

Steve

reply by GarthL on 14-Mar-2013

CHEERS!!!

Comment from rhymelord

Excellent

Dear Steve,
I did, enjoy that is. The combination of nonsense writing with some real problems is worthy of Carroll, except that you are more up to date.
Regards
Reg

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013

Thanks, Reg.

Carroll was a genius, so that's a big compliment. The Hunting of the Snark may be the funniest thing ever written.

Steve

Comment from Joannforsberg

Excellent

flibbertegibbet potato crisp! wow, that is so creative!

Love your writing style here. Always a pleasure to read your creative use of words.

Blessings, JO

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013

Thanks, Jo - I was struggling to find a rhyme for will o' th wisp but didn't want to dump it.

Steve

Comment from Cornelius2000

Excellent

Nice rhythm, nice meter, nice rhyming, what's not to like! Reading it out loud is good fun. I'm constantly amazed that there are appropriate pictures to illustrate all these poems and stories. Nice work.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013

I always say good luck to anyone trying to read my pieces aloud - I certainly struggle to do it well myself!

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from Hollyhock

Excellent

I did enjoy! It's a light-hearted, bouncy look at the daily problems we face. Surely, surely thee is SOMEONE who can sort things out, but not, it would appear your little green alien.
It is gently satirical aligning the ironing pile with problems in the Middle East, but hey, that's the way life is. The ironing pile is very immediate, while the other is mainly on the air-waves.
Excellent, amusing read.

 Comment Written 10-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013

Thanks, Andrea - perhaps the little green chap could get all those lambs safely born!
Hope all goes well.

Steve

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

I wondered who to blame for all those things that never get done - now I know! It would be nice to have some innate object or things that we could put all the trouble down to. Giddy

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013

Hey, I never said little green guy caused all the trouble - just that he's never around to help us sort it out!

Thanks for the review.

Steve

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

Hahahahahaha! G'day Steve I love your work mate it is always a blast. I would love to peep inside your head for 5 mins just to have a beer and watch your thoughts. I reckon it'd make a ripper poem! Cheers mate, Fez.

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013

Mate, I reckon it'd be real dangerous in there - risky as a night in a hot tub with a couple of over-enthusiastic concubines...

Steve

Comment from Indie Skreet

Excellent

Sharyn told me to look you up if I want a funny read and to learn about rhythm, 'cos I sometimes lack in that department! Since she is my favourite Fanstorian aunt, thought I would take her advice and glad I did. This is a rhythmic gem and highly entertaining :) Best Indie

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013

And you must always do what your aunt advises, there's a good girl.
I've peeked at a few of your pieces - yep, you rely more on naughty humour and rhyme and don't seem too worried about perfect meter - there is a place for both, I guess.
Not sure if it's something that can be easily taught or caught, but you're welcome to see what you can get out of my work.

Steve

reply by Indie Skreet on 10-Mar-2013

I am sure you are right, but a gal can only try. Many thanks, Indie :)

Comment from Phyllis Stewart

Excellent

Bravo! I lovvvvvve it! Sure wish I had a six left for you. This is really superb writing. You have graet talent! I haven't been reviewing for too long and will be sure to catch more of your work from now on!

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Mar-2013

Thank you, Phyllis.

Are you being modest? i thought I saw you as reviewer of the month....

Steve

reply by Phyllis Stewart on 10-Mar-2013

Oh, Steve, it's just a misunderstanding. I meant it's been TOO LONG since I've done much reviewing. Yes, I won the prize last April. Just have not had time LATELY to read much on FS. I see now how my wording could be taken the other way, also. :)