Emergency Room
Poem about what is seen too many times in the ER17 total reviews
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
The little eyes that have no 'twinkle' are the saddest eyes in the world. I bet you do see a lot of heartache. I can know you by your words. Have a blessed day, Carolyn
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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The little eyes that have no 'twinkle' are the saddest eyes in the world. I bet you do see a lot of heartache. I can know you by your words. Have a blessed day, Carolyn
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you Carolyn for reading my sad poem.
Comment from visionary1234
Bravo for you, being vigilant. Some people should not be allowed the privilege of having children! Thank you for sharing your Story-in-a-Poem and good luck in the contest! :)Sharyn
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Bravo for you, being vigilant. Some people should not be allowed the privilege of having children! Thank you for sharing your Story-in-a-Poem and good luck in the contest! :)Sharyn
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you Sharyn for reading and reviewing my sad poem.
Comment from Allison78
That is just heartbreaking. You have to be a special person to have that job. This really moved me and tugged at my heart. I hate that children are hurt by their own parents. Very well written.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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That is just heartbreaking. You have to be a special person to have that job. This really moved me and tugged at my heart. I hate that children are hurt by their own parents. Very well written.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from Sarah_Goldwell
This is an excellent but very sad little poem. The rhyme and meter is faultless unlike the parent standing with his child. A few saved is better than none at all. Keep up the good work in both your professions x
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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This is an excellent but very sad little poem. The rhyme and meter is faultless unlike the parent standing with his child. A few saved is better than none at all. Keep up the good work in both your professions x
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you Sarah for your kind review.
Comment from pickelhead
This incident should be investigated for it sure smells like child abuse.
Drunken parents cause more child abuse than, I think, any other cause.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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This incident should be investigated for it sure smells like child abuse.
Drunken parents cause more child abuse than, I think, any other cause.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Yes, you are right...it was reported. Thank you for the review, George.
Comment from linda day
Very powerful. So tragic to know this happens everyday. You worded this peice brilliantly. The subject matter is tragically real. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Very powerful. So tragic to know this happens everyday. You worded this peice brilliantly. The subject matter is tragically real. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you linda for reviewing my poem and your kind comments.
Comment from Righteous Riter
The rhyme scheme is effective as the rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the harmony brings it all together. My attention is captured from the beginning and held to the end. Good job.
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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The rhyme scheme is effective as the rhyming is good. This piece flows well as the harmony brings it all together. My attention is captured from the beginning and held to the end. Good job.
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Comment Written 08-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2013
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Thank you Rigteous Riter for your kind review of my poem. This happened to me yesterday and I thought about it all the way home.
