What We Pass By
sonnet164 total reviews
Comment from Cherokee messenger
You will get my contest vote for this one. It was very meaningful and readable. It sounds like it is written for today and not by someone trying to speak like Shakespeare.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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You will get my contest vote for this one. It was very meaningful and readable. It sounds like it is written for today and not by someone trying to speak like Shakespeare.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you so very much, Valerie Jean. I so appreciate your kind encouragement and the generosity of your exceptional rating :-) Brooke
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I am sorry, I guess I cannot cast my vote. I read all the other poems, but I did not realize I had to review them all in order to vote. The are some I just did not care for at all, but cannot bring myself to give them a poor rating since the writing itself was fine, but they just didn't speak to me or I did not think they were genuine. I don't want to hurt their feelings, so I would rather not review them. Good luck to you.
Comment from Carolyn H
Clearly a skilled wordsmith is at work here: finely crafted and evocative, the poem draws attention to the transcendent qualities in the ordinary and taken-for-granted.
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Clearly a skilled wordsmith is at work here: finely crafted and evocative, the poem draws attention to the transcendent qualities in the ordinary and taken-for-granted.
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thank you so very much, Carolyn. I'm so glad you like my sonnet and its message :-) Brooke
Comment from DragonSkulls
Oh, how true this piece is, Brook. Excellent writing for the contest. A few great ones in the bunch this time. I wish you the best of luck in the booth. Have a wonderful day. /Ron
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Oh, how true this piece is, Brook. Excellent writing for the contest. A few great ones in the bunch this time. I wish you the best of luck in the booth. Have a wonderful day. /Ron
Comment Written 16-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2013
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Thanks so much, Ron - yes, it is a strong field :-) Brooke
Comment from Joannforsberg
Love the use of the chambered nautilus in this poem. A perfect item to build into the poem with it's beauty. Then the so much more in what we all pass by.
Excellent, JO
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Love the use of the chambered nautilus in this poem. A perfect item to build into the poem with it's beauty. Then the so much more in what we all pass by.
Excellent, JO
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you so very much, Jo :-) Brooke
Comment from Child of the King
Very nice and your Grandson is so adorable.I love visiting the beach as it is so calming to me even if the waves are noisy and fast. Kudos
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Very nice and your Grandson is so adorable.I love visiting the beach as it is so calming to me even if the waves are noisy and fast. Kudos
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Child of the King :-) Thank you so very much. Brooke
Comment from "STANDING-UNDER"
What a beautiful sonnet Brooke. This is my first attempt at reading Shakespearean Sonnet. I loved the simplicity of structure that afforded me the opportunity to understand what you were saying to the reader. Loved the Photo.
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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What a beautiful sonnet Brooke. This is my first attempt at reading Shakespearean Sonnet. I loved the simplicity of structure that afforded me the opportunity to understand what you were saying to the reader. Loved the Photo.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 14-Mar-2013
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Thank you so very much, Standing Under :-) Brooke
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You're welcome. Teri
Comment from Leineco
What a pretty sonnet...and not a convoluted phrase or alignment to be seen :-) I like the raising of sand (poor little things) to importance. I particularly liked the use of "plot" in Line 14 - nice duality there!
It goes without saying that the form (meter, rhyme scheme and propose/expound/left turn/reassess) are all well met. Good job...I enjoyed the read :-)
One tiny thought though...Line 4 I think needs to be "the oneS who scan (no s) the beach..." to match the they in Line 3
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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What a pretty sonnet...and not a convoluted phrase or alignment to be seen :-) I like the raising of sand (poor little things) to importance. I particularly liked the use of "plot" in Line 14 - nice duality there!
It goes without saying that the form (meter, rhyme scheme and propose/expound/left turn/reassess) are all well met. Good job...I enjoyed the read :-)
One tiny thought though...Line 4 I think needs to be "the oneS who scan (no s) the beach..." to match the they in Line 3
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you so much, Leineco - I don't like it when lines get convoluted - I teach the sonnet and other forms on fan story, and that is one of the main rules I teach! :-) I'll take a look at line 4 :-) Brooke
Comment from vkmack
This is a wonderful sonnet that reflects on the loneliness of the human experience and the necessity of companionship in this journey. The second stanza is especially visual in content, and I found it moving and emotional throughout. I returned repeatedly to "more grains move in to fill the vacant spot," an the imagery is so strong. This sonnet is an intense reflection on our lives as human beings.
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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This is a wonderful sonnet that reflects on the loneliness of the human experience and the necessity of companionship in this journey. The second stanza is especially visual in content, and I found it moving and emotional throughout. I returned repeatedly to "more grains move in to fill the vacant spot," an the imagery is so strong. This sonnet is an intense reflection on our lives as human beings.
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Thank you, vkmack, for your most thoughtful response to this sonnet :-) Brooke
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Brooke,
I missed this poem since I am still in Texas but home tomorrow. You have written an extraordinary sonnet and I love the theme. Each line has been composed with care and I wish you good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Hi Brooke,
I missed this poem since I am still in Texas but home tomorrow. You have written an extraordinary sonnet and I love the theme. Each line has been composed with care and I wish you good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2013
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Chey, thank you so much, my friend, for your kind contest wishes and your thoughtful comments :-) Brooke
Comment from Lylise
This is a well written sonnet with a great presentation. (Of course!) Meter with verse done well. Good story in the content. Good luck in the contest, Brooke.
Lynda
Can't wait for Monday!
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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This is a well written sonnet with a great presentation. (Of course!) Meter with verse done well. Good story in the content. Good luck in the contest, Brooke.
Lynda
Can't wait for Monday!
Comment Written 13-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2013
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Lynda, thank you so very much :-) I am looking forward to class, too :-) Brooke
