Comment from Gladness

Excellent

Looks like Saturday is my make up day again. This is a well done chapter, easy to read and interesting. Just this one line you might want to reword:

"Marie smoothed the white silk fabric with the red rose colored trim down." (perhaps, "smoothed down the...)

I do hope we are not going into bedroom scenes. I am enjoying the story, but will skip if it gets intimate.

Anita

 Comment Written 09-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Mar-2013

Thanks for catching my goof. Yes, smooths down sounds better. And no, I will not ever get too graphic with my sex scenes. I don't think they add anything to the story and like I said I try not to over step my own Christian values. You will not read me taking the Lord's name in vain either. Maybe, a few cuss words now and then for realism but not unnecessary sex, violence or language.

Comment from BethShelby

Excellent

This sounds as though she is beautiful and Ms Gigi has high hopes for her. At this stage, she most have told he what will be expected from her. I am assuming she still has a choice about becoming one of the girls. It would be pretty hard to leave after all this attention.

 Comment Written 03-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013

Thank you for reviewing my story Beth. Yes, I have gone back and forth thinking about where I want this to go. My husband says yes "have her become one of the girls." My thought is to have her say "no." Just you'll just have to keep reading to find out. :o)

Comment from Siouxsun

Excellent

Interesting as always, as is the big secret.Looks like Maria's roll is going to take a turn.
*it shore is.-sure not shore
Good lead into the next chapter.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013

Thanks Siouxsun for your kind review. I am glad you are enjoying my story. I probably should have typed 'sure is."

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

I truly enjoyed my first read of your wonderful work. (I plan to go back and read previous chapters to get a bit of background on Marie) Your very colorful story, visually written and well penned, kept my complete interest from beginning to end. :-) Carolyn

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013

Thank you Carolyn for reviewing my work. I am glad you liked it. It's my first novel so your encouraging words are greatly appreciated.

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

That was a real coming out party and must have been close to a true experience for many of those ladies, although I doubt if many of them waited for their eighteenth birthday.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013

So true. Thank you for reviewing my story. I am glad you are continuing to follow along.

Comment from tandemharrow

Excellent

This is lovely. It takes one into a different time and, therefore, a place that was different. It was naughty, it was saucy, it was gentle and, even then, the playful eyes could turn hard like garnets. Under the affection one cannot but feel the hardness of business instinct and there is no missing another hard truth; these women were as human as any housewife hanging out laundry in the backyard. They had families to feed. It is skillfully written chapter. I have never been to New Orleans, but cannot miss imagining the sun and jazz exuding from behind colonnaded frontages.

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013

Thank you tandmharrow for your kind review and keen perception of this time and my characters. I am glad you enjoyed the read.

Comment from Jmmercer

Excellent

i love New Orleans and everything that goes with it so it's no surprise I loved this piece. I did find a dialogue error (when Miss M leans down to whisper into Marie's ear the "N" should be capitalized), but that's a simple fix. Also love the author's historical notes to put everything in perspective. Nice job. =)

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013

Thank you Jmmercer for reviewing my story and for catching my goof. I will correct.