Do Stars Still Shine?
an octogram170 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Lovely thoughts on putting little ones to bed. I don't think they always work though. Cute picture and a nice Octogram poem.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Lovely thoughts on putting little ones to bed. I don't think they always work though. Cute picture and a nice Octogram poem.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thanks so very much for your thoughtful review, Pearl. I have a course on women poets coming up. I would love to have you join us :-) Brooke
Comment from justjo66
Oh, so precious a picture. Babies and truly God's gift
to us. Your poem is a lovely lullaby for baby Sawyer. Yes, the stars do still shine and they shine on your precious child. Lovely poem, I enjoyed it very much.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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Oh, so precious a picture. Babies and truly God's gift
to us. Your poem is a lovely lullaby for baby Sawyer. Yes, the stars do still shine and they shine on your precious child. Lovely poem, I enjoyed it very much.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2013
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justjo, thanks so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from judiverse
What a wonderful philosophical thought, and coming from a baby! It's like the go-round over whether a tree falling in the forest will still make a sound if there's no one around to hear it. The baby's thoughts are on whether things will still be there once he goes off to sleep. Maybe that's why some kids have a hard time going to sleep. I love the big question, "Do stars still shine?" Great thought, and excellent rhyme and attention to meter, of course. judi
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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What a wonderful philosophical thought, and coming from a baby! It's like the go-round over whether a tree falling in the forest will still make a sound if there's no one around to hear it. The baby's thoughts are on whether things will still be there once he goes off to sleep. Maybe that's why some kids have a hard time going to sleep. I love the big question, "Do stars still shine?" Great thought, and excellent rhyme and attention to meter, of course. judi
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Judi, thank you so very much for your thoughtful reading of this poem. I have a course on women poets coming up soon. I hope you consider joining us! Brooke :-)
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Hi, Brooke. You're so welcome. Your course sounds interesting. Women poets are of great interest to me, but I have to think of my budget. judi
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ah, budgets, the bane of my existence :-)
Comment from C M. Somerton
You captured little Sawyer innocence and curiosity beautifully. Very sweet. The picture of him and the colours you chose set the mood perfectly and the words themselves flow almost lyrically.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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You captured little Sawyer innocence and curiosity beautifully. Very sweet. The picture of him and the colours you chose set the mood perfectly and the words themselves flow almost lyrically.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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CM, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from October21
Beautiful thoughts in this brilliant poem. I guess after all the evil and suffering that we sometimes discover in the world, we begin to wonder whether or not hope can still work it's way to us. Loved the question about the stars shining and the blanket being made of love:-)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Beautiful thoughts in this brilliant poem. I guess after all the evil and suffering that we sometimes discover in the world, we begin to wonder whether or not hope can still work it's way to us. Loved the question about the stars shining and the blanket being made of love:-)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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October, thank you so much :-) Brooke
Comment from Terror2s
I don't know. That's not what he is thinking in that picture.
When Mama tucks me into bed,
I don't want to be a sleepyhead.
I'd rather see the stars shine bright,
Why would I want to sleep tonight?
I'd miss mama's hands; her soft, kind voice,
But she doesn't give me a bedtime choice,
Those sparkling stars shine so bright,
I'd like to grab one on this night.
Sorry, I couldn't resist, but your version is surely better. He looks rather wide-eyed; your version is the hope of every parent though.
Abby
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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I don't know. That's not what he is thinking in that picture.
When Mama tucks me into bed,
I don't want to be a sleepyhead.
I'd rather see the stars shine bright,
Why would I want to sleep tonight?
I'd miss mama's hands; her soft, kind voice,
But she doesn't give me a bedtime choice,
Those sparkling stars shine so bright,
I'd like to grab one on this night.
Sorry, I couldn't resist, but your version is surely better. He looks rather wide-eyed; your version is the hope of every parent though.
Abby
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Abby, thanks so much. In the photo he has just woken up :-) I very much appreciate your poetic response to my poem. I have a course on women poets coming up in a couple of weeks. I would love to have you sign up!! :-) Brooke
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What days do you think you will be teaching this time? Spring is a tough season for me to commit because there are more tennis tournaments for my son, but I can see if it will work. The high school team will also have their schedule out next week. Abby
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The course is scheduled to run Monday and Wednesday. It will have a daytime and a nighttime section to accommodate different time zones. I sure hope you can make it :-)
Comment from Kingsland
Yes they do... This was a delightful piece of poetic art to have read. This made me smile, as most of your poetic pieces do. This was a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read and responded to... John
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Yes they do... This was a delightful piece of poetic art to have read. This made me smile, as most of your poetic pieces do. This was a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read and responded to... John
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you so very much, John :-) Brooke
Comment from Auroraboreal800
Oh my goodness! This is SO BEAUTIFUL! It's just like a baby's talk, so sweet and tender. I LOVE IT!! Thanks for sharing Adew!
WONDERFUL JOB, GREAT POEM!!
:)
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Oh my goodness! This is SO BEAUTIFUL! It's just like a baby's talk, so sweet and tender. I LOVE IT!! Thanks for sharing Adew!
WONDERFUL JOB, GREAT POEM!!
:)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Aurora, thank you so very much :-) Brooke
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Brooke,
I love the octogram, and this one is extra special. Kids don't like bedtime. That has been my experience. I can remember reading bedtime stories, and being the first one to fall asleep! Many children fight sleep... they haven't had a rough day at work, or taking care of bills, or getting the car fixed, or other responsibilities. Life is playtime for them. Besides, they already had an afternoon nap!
There's only one change I'd like to see in this poem, and I really love fairies. Even at 62, I watch for them whenever I'm in the woods. We called them pixies when I was little. But I'd like to read "angels" in your poem.
"When Mama's tucked me into bed,
do stars still shine?
Do angels hover overhead
with one assigned
to make the night, so dark and deep,
a place where I can fall asleep
and feel her loving arms 'round mine
as stars still shine?"
There's a Bible verse that is one of my favourites.
"The angel of the Lord encampeth round about those who fear him, and delivereth them." Psalm 34:7
This is a wonderful poem, of course, as is.
your fan,
Kimbob
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Hi Brooke,
I love the octogram, and this one is extra special. Kids don't like bedtime. That has been my experience. I can remember reading bedtime stories, and being the first one to fall asleep! Many children fight sleep... they haven't had a rough day at work, or taking care of bills, or getting the car fixed, or other responsibilities. Life is playtime for them. Besides, they already had an afternoon nap!
There's only one change I'd like to see in this poem, and I really love fairies. Even at 62, I watch for them whenever I'm in the woods. We called them pixies when I was little. But I'd like to read "angels" in your poem.
"When Mama's tucked me into bed,
do stars still shine?
Do angels hover overhead
with one assigned
to make the night, so dark and deep,
a place where I can fall asleep
and feel her loving arms 'round mine
as stars still shine?"
There's a Bible verse that is one of my favourites.
"The angel of the Lord encampeth round about those who fear him, and delivereth them." Psalm 34:7
This is a wonderful poem, of course, as is.
your fan,
Kimbob
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
Comment from God's Writer
A beautiful poem Brooke. It made me feel warm inside when the cold winds have blown through me lately. yOUR POEM LIKE A WARM HUG AND A SWEET KISS. tHANK UOU, i NEEDED THE FRESH AIR.
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A beautiful poem Brooke. It made me feel warm inside when the cold winds have blown through me lately. yOUR POEM LIKE A WARM HUG AND A SWEET KISS. tHANK UOU, i NEEDED THE FRESH AIR.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2013
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Thank you, Erick, for your thoughtful review :-) Brooke
