Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Iyaope Moon"Murder Mystery
52 total reviews
Comment from samandlancelot
Hi Bev,
Your chapter had plenty of action, family feuds, perhaps a love interest beginning, and interesting characters. Intessting storyline and excellent chapter!
The uncle's (uncles) never questioned each other's honesty until that damned casino opened."
Patricia
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Hi Bev,
Your chapter had plenty of action, family feuds, perhaps a love interest beginning, and interesting characters. Intessting storyline and excellent chapter!
The uncle's (uncles) never questioned each other's honesty until that damned casino opened."
Patricia
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Hi, Patricia. Thank you much for reading my chapter and for your generous review. I appreciate your catching that SPAG! Always something I'm missing LOL. Your support means a lot to me. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from TonyD
You know just when to stop the narrative so that I must read the next installment. Very interesting story indeed. I particularly like the injection of native America words like idukala and igmu that spice up the story.
Great work,
Tony
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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You know just when to stop the narrative so that I must read the next installment. Very interesting story indeed. I particularly like the injection of native America words like idukala and igmu that spice up the story.
Great work,
Tony
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Hi, Tony. Thank you for the kind compliment and generous review. I really appreciate your taking time to read. Your support is most encouraging. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Righteous Riter
The writer does a good job of getting the readers attention from the start by having a missing person. The writer then ups the intensity by offering a reward that makes anything possible from that point on. The writer raises the curiosity of the reader when a body is found. The transition between events is smooth. This story is well balanced as the pace is consistent. The writer does a good job of bring this chapter to an end and setting up for the next chapter. Nice work.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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The writer does a good job of getting the readers attention from the start by having a missing person. The writer then ups the intensity by offering a reward that makes anything possible from that point on. The writer raises the curiosity of the reader when a body is found. The transition between events is smooth. This story is well balanced as the pace is consistent. The writer does a good job of bring this chapter to an end and setting up for the next chapter. Nice work.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Thank you much for your generous and thorough review. I really appreciate the time you took to read and comment. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from CR Delport
Another very interesting and well written chapter. The story flows nicely and you keep wondering "what's next". Cant wait for the next chapter. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Another very interesting and well written chapter. The story flows nicely and you keep wondering "what's next". Cant wait for the next chapter. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much, CR. I plan another chapter later this week.
I really appreciate your interest and generous review. Thank you for taking to read and comment.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from God's Writer
A very interesting fast paced story. You kept me with bated breath as I read line upon line. I enjoyed reading this story from beginning till end.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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A very interesting fast paced story. You kept me with bated breath as I read line upon line. I enjoyed reading this story from beginning till end.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Thank you, Erick. I appreciate your kind words and generosity. Hope you have a great week! Hugs, Bev
Comment from Norbanus
You have an interesting yarn spinning here and this segment moves the story along well. Ty's introspection while observing Lynn Bree expands the tension more in one line than a reader might expect in half a page.
A bit of wordiness sneaking in her and there but all in all a damn good novel.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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You have an interesting yarn spinning here and this segment moves the story along well. Ty's introspection while observing Lynn Bree expands the tension more in one line than a reader might expect in half a page.
A bit of wordiness sneaking in her and there but all in all a damn good novel.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much, Norbanus. I really appreciate the great reveiw, very helpful and encouraging. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from chasennov
'Lyaope Moon.' A well resourced chapter. This chapter was well written and has a good rounding of the body and leans strongly to the narrative. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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'Lyaope Moon.' A well resourced chapter. This chapter was well written and has a good rounding of the body and leans strongly to the narrative. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2013
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Thank you much, chasennov. I appreciate your insights and generosity. Warm regards, Bev
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You're very welcome, Bev.
Comment from Gungalo
Oh but if they think Jana won't find out, they are out of their ever-loving minds. She'll get one whiff of this new happening and she will know. Sigh.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Oh but if they think Jana won't find out, they are out of their ever-loving minds. She'll get one whiff of this new happening and she will know. Sigh.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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You are so right, Gunaglo. Thanks for your astute summing up of the situation - I really appreciate hearing from you. Xx Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
Wow what vivid and bursting imagery you used alongside your chapter Writingfundimension. That combined with your striking and easy to read formatting it made for one hell of a read. Something I will indeed be pleased to read again.. Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Wow what vivid and bursting imagery you used alongside your chapter Writingfundimension. That combined with your striking and easy to read formatting it made for one hell of a read. Something I will indeed be pleased to read again.. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Hi, Christopher. Thank you so much! You have definitely made my evening. I much appreciate you taking time out to read my chapter. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from JW
This is a well written chapter and it does a great job of progressing the overall storyline. No spags were found. And it easily would hold a reader's interest. Good job.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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This is a well written chapter and it does a great job of progressing the overall storyline. No spags were found. And it easily would hold a reader's interest. Good job.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 24-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2013
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Jonathin, thanks so much for your particularly uplifting review. I was feeling I might have missed the mark with this chapter, but your words have alleviated my concerns. Thank you! Warmest regards, Bev
