Savannah Love
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Comment from AprilShower
Wonder why this Doctor Walker is nosing into Paige's life. Who she associates with should be her own business.
It sounds like he stepped out of another time frame, a time before the Civil War.
Her race should make no difference, she is human just like him. There are still people around who behave in this manner. In fact, some treat people of their own race the same way, too. They are called snobs. This behavior rubs many the wrong way.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Wonder why this Doctor Walker is nosing into Paige's life. Who she associates with should be her own business.
It sounds like he stepped out of another time frame, a time before the Civil War.
Her race should make no difference, she is human just like him. There are still people around who behave in this manner. In fact, some treat people of their own race the same way, too. They are called snobs. This behavior rubs many the wrong way.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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It rubs me the wrong way, too. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gungalo
Aha, he may be spying on Paige. It's awful what he said to Nala. He'll be more trouble than he is worth if this continues. What is Paige gonna do???
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Aha, he may be spying on Paige. It's awful what he said to Nala. He'll be more trouble than he is worth if this continues. What is Paige gonna do???
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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I think Paige can take care of her self, but we will have to wait and see. Thank you for the kind review.
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Oh boy. Here it comes eh girl.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Barbara Wilkey ....
This is another short but interesting chapter in your story which I enjoyed reading. There are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Nala, come sit by me. This is not grammatically correct. I suggest - Nala - come and sit next to me.
* You have - I better get Mr. Cash some tea. I suggest :
I had better get Mr. Cash some tea ....
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Hullo Barbara Wilkey ....
This is another short but interesting chapter in your story which I enjoyed reading. There are just two small changes to recommend ...
* You have - Nala, come sit by me. This is not grammatically correct. I suggest - Nala - come and sit next to me.
* You have - I better get Mr. Cash some tea. I suggest :
I had better get Mr. Cash some tea ....
Now, I look forward to the next chapter.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I will check those areas, but they are dialogue.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where nala tells what the professor said to her the day before and at the house during lunch. nala wonders how he knew about paige's ankle
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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this is very well written, barbara, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where nala tells what the professor said to her the day before and at the house during lunch. nala wonders how he knew about paige's ankle
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from elgone
Good intrigue leading into the next chapter. I'm not sure how they are going to deal with Dr. Walker's racism without putting Nala and her family as risk. I'm sure he's not the only one in town.
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Good intrigue leading into the next chapter. I'm not sure how they are going to deal with Dr. Walker's racism without putting Nala and her family as risk. I'm sure he's not the only one in town.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. I am sure there are many more in town.
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Barbara,
The tension continues to escalate now that Dr. Walker has introduced racism to the group. Nala is frightened, as she should be, while anger is building in Cash, Billy Joe and Paige. The chapter is well-written and a riveting read.
Curtis
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Barbara,
The tension continues to escalate now that Dr. Walker has introduced racism to the group. Nala is frightened, as she should be, while anger is building in Cash, Billy Joe and Paige. The chapter is well-written and a riveting read.
Curtis
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from adewpearl
Exactly, what did he - add comma
Excellent dialogue that conveys well the attitudes of the speakers
You make a good point that it is easy for a liberal white person in a comfortable position to make waves, but it is the poor black person who pays the price of their complaints if things aren't handled right. One can't just go storming into the guy's office and tell him off when he and his friends in high places hold such power over Nala. Brooke
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Exactly, what did he - add comma
Excellent dialogue that conveys well the attitudes of the speakers
You make a good point that it is easy for a liberal white person in a comfortable position to make waves, but it is the poor black person who pays the price of their complaints if things aren't handled right. One can't just go storming into the guy's office and tell him off when he and his friends in high places hold such power over Nala. Brooke
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. Thank you for the catch on the commas. I may never get them down.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
I swear the more I read the more I fall for Cash and Billy Joe. They are definitely the real Good Ole Boys. Love em.
As I said before, I think Walker is stalking Paige and may try something really nasty. Only you know the truth, but I don't trust his sorry rear.
Another great chapter, go mamma!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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I swear the more I read the more I fall for Cash and Billy Joe. They are definitely the real Good Ole Boys. Love em.
As I said before, I think Walker is stalking Paige and may try something really nasty. Only you know the truth, but I don't trust his sorry rear.
Another great chapter, go mamma!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from Sasha
Now I get it. I didn't realize Nala was black. Sadly, there are still many people (not just in the south) that refuse to accept change. They will always live in the past. This must be a real shock for Paige, as it was for me.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Now I get it. I didn't realize Nala was black. Sadly, there are still many people (not just in the south) that refuse to accept change. They will always live in the past. This must be a real shock for Paige, as it was for me.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from mshugh
Well done
Minor suggestions:
Who do we need to pay a visit to - drop the to at the end
Keeping the pace and tempo going beautifully with the dialogue.
Well done
Michael
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Well done
Minor suggestions:
Who do we need to pay a visit to - drop the to at the end
Keeping the pace and tempo going beautifully with the dialogue.
Well done
Michael
Comment Written 17-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the review and I made the correction. Thank you for catchig it.
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A pleasure as always
Michael
