The Curse of 'Gator Bayou
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "The Confession Part 1"A young Cajun girl struggles to survive.
15 total reviews
Comment from cterp
I'm getting caught up on the opening chapters of your book, and it is certainly worth it. I understand much better who Marie is now, and will appreciate her much beeter as your novel proceeds.
chris
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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I'm getting caught up on the opening chapters of your book, and it is certainly worth it. I understand much better who Marie is now, and will appreciate her much beeter as your novel proceeds.
chris
Comment Written 07-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2016
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Chris, I am so glad you are reading the other chapters. It really does help to know what has happened in the prior chapters.
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Jo
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Very familiar with the bayous, especially in Louisiana. Action flows smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptive language used. Write on.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Very familiar with the bayous, especially in Louisiana. Action flows smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptive language used. Write on.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thanks Brett for your comments on my work.
Jo
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
The life of Marie and her abused Cajun family was a very moving story to read. The language you used gave me a sense of 'being there' as Marie told of her sad circumstances and her decision to 'take no beatin' tonight and no one in the family was goin' to get hurt.'
The Sheriff did the right thing... case closed.
Well done, thanks for reviving this chapter.
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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The life of Marie and her abused Cajun family was a very moving story to read. The language you used gave me a sense of 'being there' as Marie told of her sad circumstances and her decision to 'take no beatin' tonight and no one in the family was goin' to get hurt.'
The Sheriff did the right thing... case closed.
Well done, thanks for reviving this chapter.
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you Carolyn for your nice review of my work. I was not born in Louisiana but I love the people, customs, food and language. I can't do the language justice but I do try to capture some of its flavor.
Jo
Comment from Curry Hooks
Wow. I really enjoyed this. You went into so much detail depicting the atmosphere that it felt like I was part of the story.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Wow. I really enjoyed this. You went into so much detail depicting the atmosphere that it felt like I was part of the story.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you Curry for reviewing my story. I am glad you liked the details I included.
Jo
Comment from Misrael
Even though this only a story it isn't just a story because there is some truth to every story written. This was a very sad and sobering chapter but also a real attention getter. Good read and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Even though this only a story it isn't just a story because there is some truth to every story written. This was a very sad and sobering chapter but also a real attention getter. Good read and keep on writing.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you Misrael for your kind comments on my writing. I appreciate your opinion.
Jo
Comment from royowen
This is avery happy end to a very sad and poignant story, the dialogue was fascinating and I wasn't sure if there were some spags or not (in the dialogue), but I'm sure you will check! There was a deep family attachment in Marie for her family, and unfortunately there a lot of men like her daddy! The characters are very real, the plot was great, story structure also great, I was engaged from the beginning to the end, well done, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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This is avery happy end to a very sad and poignant story, the dialogue was fascinating and I wasn't sure if there were some spags or not (in the dialogue), but I'm sure you will check! There was a deep family attachment in Marie for her family, and unfortunately there a lot of men like her daddy! The characters are very real, the plot was great, story structure also great, I was engaged from the beginning to the end, well done, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you royowen for your comments on my work. I'm glad you enjoyed the dialogue. I tried very hard to keep it sounding real.
Jo
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Most welcome.
Comment from lancellot
A sad but all too common case. Very good language and emotionally moving. I would suggest breaking up Marie's long block recounting near the end. I don't see why Renee had to break any law, if he believed Marie's story, but it was well told.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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A sad but all too common case. Very good language and emotionally moving. I would suggest breaking up Marie's long block recounting near the end. I don't see why Renee had to break any law, if he believed Marie's story, but it was well told.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you lancellot for your input on my story. I will take another look and see if I can break it up more.
Jo
Comment from Gladness
I like your story, and the cajun you include. It does add to the realness of the whole picture. It is good how the situation points to his wife at this time in the story. It makes the reader want to keep reading.
This looks like a very promising mystery book. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
:) Anita
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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I like your story, and the cajun you include. It does add to the realness of the whole picture. It is good how the situation points to his wife at this time in the story. It makes the reader want to keep reading.
This looks like a very promising mystery book. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
:) Anita
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Thank you Anita for reviewing my story. I am glad you like it. It's my first attempt at novel writing so your encouragement means a lot to me.
Comment from donkeyoatey
I have heard that beautiful lilting patois, and I think you have done a pretty good job working it into the feel of your piece. Thanks so much for choosing my artwork! Donkeyoatey
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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I have heard that beautiful lilting patois, and I think you have done a pretty good job working it into the feel of your piece. Thanks so much for choosing my artwork! Donkeyoatey
Comment Written 16-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Thank you donkeyoatey for your beautiful artistic talent and photography skills. I do love your work. Thanks,too, for reviewing my story.
Comment from judelesemann
This is a good story. I like how you interjected the cajun in the dialogue. The story is interesting and you are doing a great job of developing the story line and the characters. Well done. Be blessed, Jude
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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This is a good story. I like how you interjected the cajun in the dialogue. The story is interesting and you are doing a great job of developing the story line and the characters. Well done. Be blessed, Jude
Comment Written 15-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2013
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Thank you Jude for your kind review of my story and encouraging words.
