From Joana
too soon to write her memoirs68 total reviews
Comment from misscookie
Wow!
this is very deep poem. your words are filled with love pain and sadness.
this is what I call a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go hmmmmm.
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Wow!
this is very deep poem. your words are filled with love pain and sadness.
this is what I call a food for thought poem.... meaning after you read it you go hmmmmm.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi uptowngirlrichef1981
A very good poetic description of advancing illness, which I hope is not biographic.
The rhythm of the poem is good and the imagery clear in the lines. Very well done.
Patrick
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Hi uptowngirlrichef1981
A very good poetic description of advancing illness, which I hope is not biographic.
The rhythm of the poem is good and the imagery clear in the lines. Very well done.
Patrick
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from Righteous Riter
This is a very touching piece to me. The story is told well and the message is clear. I can feel the pain and sorrow in this piece as this piece flows well. This piece held my attention from beginning to end. Nice job.
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This is a very touching piece to me. The story is told well and the message is clear. I can feel the pain and sorrow in this piece as this piece flows well. This piece held my attention from beginning to end. Nice job.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from cephira
This is so powerful and emotional! Woah. I don't know what else to say. The images you put in my head are so raw and heartbreaking. Very well done. Thanks for sharing this one.
Cephira
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This is so powerful and emotional! Woah. I don't know what else to say. The images you put in my head are so raw and heartbreaking. Very well done. Thanks for sharing this one.
Cephira
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from DthomasNY
"some tiny part of your spirit gentled by my touches"- such a strong line, and I know the feeling.
And I don't think that less enchanting day will come! Thanks for sharing.
Dom.
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"some tiny part of your spirit gentled by my touches"- such a strong line, and I know the feeling.
And I don't think that less enchanting day will come! Thanks for sharing.
Dom.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from kashmayank
The work is excellent in pieces but then it looses it flow at some places ,if you can work on it then it will be a great read
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The work is excellent in pieces but then it looses it flow at some places ,if you can work on it then it will be a great read
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
This was an amazing piece of writing. The image in the dream which was very erotic but then the reality of being alone with the physical pain and discomfort. Great ending- with some strong vocabulary choices and wonderful metaphors.Great work! Holly
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This was an amazing piece of writing. The image in the dream which was very erotic but then the reality of being alone with the physical pain and discomfort. Great ending- with some strong vocabulary choices and wonderful metaphors.Great work! Holly
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from Rondeno
Hi, honey!
What a powerful, harrowing poem this is. he is your lover and your muse, but you fear (or even know) that the relationship is doomed. Wow.
Mike xxx
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Hi, honey!
What a powerful, harrowing poem this is. he is your lover and your muse, but you fear (or even know) that the relationship is doomed. Wow.
Mike xxx
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Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
