From Joana
too soon to write her memoirs68 total reviews
Comment from Mai Mai
This is an interesting piece. At first I thought it to be a love poem (although to a certain extent it is), then I thought whoa, where is this going, then I saw. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
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This is an interesting piece. At first I thought it to be a love poem (although to a certain extent it is), then I thought whoa, where is this going, then I saw. Good work and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
My life and you caught it with all the glory and grace I would expect of a professional. Click my heels three times. Perfectly placed. this flows with style and keeps flowing to the last lines that are the crux of this poem and of life. You are the best
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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My life and you caught it with all the glory and grace I would expect of a professional. Click my heels three times. Perfectly placed. this flows with style and keeps flowing to the last lines that are the crux of this poem and of life. You are the best
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 19-Mar-2013
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Good morning my friend Barb,
Thank you for embracing "When the end draws near" , for your beautifully-expressed, illuminating candid and most generous impressions..
I am so pleased that you were not deterred by the length.
I don't usually craft such long poems.
I also appreciate that you mentioned the " click my heels 3 times" line.
That happens to be my 2nd favorite line as well.
The lines I am partial to are the couple of ones dealing with my muse and how I am able to create sonnets and stanzas from the warm oil of my muses magic
Forgive me for writing that about my favorites.
You as the reader don't need me waxing immodestly!
It has already become a joy learning about one another by sharing our writings.
Have a great week!
Until next time,
Lots of hugs for you my friend
Jill
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Dont ever apologize for what you write and your favorites. How does one friend get to know another unless it is through what we write and our feelings. "wax" on dear friend
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You are incredibly kind Barb
Thank you
Jill
Comment from mizzkris20
Your poem has a lot of passion. What I imagine when reading this is that it may be about someone reminiscing on the past, how good things use to be. Very good
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Your poem has a lot of passion. What I imagine when reading this is that it may be about someone reminiscing on the past, how good things use to be. Very good
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from Kevin C
This is such a heartfelt and sad poem. There is a beauty of love as it is unending. Your images in words are stunning. You capture old age and illness in a way that captures the reader's heart. This is beautifully written!I wish I had a six to give.
Kevin
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This is such a heartfelt and sad poem. There is a beauty of love as it is unending. Your images in words are stunning. You capture old age and illness in a way that captures the reader's heart. This is beautifully written!I wish I had a six to give.
Kevin
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from seewhatimwritingnow
Ah..I love this. I see an aging or ill woman- dreaming of how things used to be- asking that if it all comes to an end, to take away her senses so she doesn't know- and that when the time comes that he can, or won't see the beauty in her, to just walk away. Very deep writing here. Loved it! Betty
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Ah..I love this. I see an aging or ill woman- dreaming of how things used to be- asking that if it all comes to an end, to take away her senses so she doesn't know- and that when the time comes that he can, or won't see the beauty in her, to just walk away. Very deep writing here. Loved it! Betty
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
That's quite the reoccurring dream!
Many, many things going on in it, and many, many images created for the reader. You have aptly conveyed a deep sadness within the story of your poem.
Second last stanza "I will ask g-d to" .... a little typo there I think.
Quite a different poem, but I enjoyed it. Well done!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
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That's quite the reoccurring dream!
Many, many things going on in it, and many, many images created for the reader. You have aptly conveyed a deep sadness within the story of your poem.
Second last stanza "I will ask g-d to" .... a little typo there I think.
Quite a different poem, but I enjoyed it. Well done!
bichonfrisegirl aka Connie
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from Perp Ihebom
There is a lot of passion in this piece of love poetry.
I think you are describing the strength of a relationship and the unimaginable void that its end would create. very deep and well written. kudos
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There is a lot of passion in this piece of love poetry.
I think you are describing the strength of a relationship and the unimaginable void that its end would create. very deep and well written. kudos
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Jill,
Your poem is beautifully written with much passion and compassion. It is one of life's most difficult times when a loved one is near death. It is especially hard if it is the result of a long drawn-out disease. There is one thing I can say for certain...it is always painful.
The color scheme and graphics enhance the presentation.
Curtis
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Jill,
Your poem is beautifully written with much passion and compassion. It is one of life's most difficult times when a loved one is near death. It is especially hard if it is the result of a long drawn-out disease. There is one thing I can say for certain...it is always painful.
The color scheme and graphics enhance the presentation.
Curtis
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from muezza56
this was a very moving poem. dreams are such a great source of inspiration, even nightmares open the eyes for new ideas, this poet has also chosen a really nice accompanying pic
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this was a very moving poem. dreams are such a great source of inspiration, even nightmares open the eyes for new ideas, this poet has also chosen a really nice accompanying pic
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
Comment from ravenblack
awesome. so many great moments in this poem. grest take on not going gentle into that good night. a masterstroke - conjuring images of a primitive warrior followed by the devastating marks of illness. if this is autobiographical, my heart goes out to you.
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awesome. so many great moments in this poem. grest take on not going gentle into that good night. a masterstroke - conjuring images of a primitive warrior followed by the devastating marks of illness. if this is autobiographical, my heart goes out to you.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
