Blind
Pleiades19 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
You have written a wonderful write here Eric. It is loaded with bubbles which automatically turn me one. Wow .
Blissful dreams our love remains
Baffling me with your deepest pains
Bringing me home to see your heart stains engrained on my waning brain
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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You have written a wonderful write here Eric. It is loaded with bubbles which automatically turn me one. Wow .
Blissful dreams our love remains
Baffling me with your deepest pains
Bringing me home to see your heart stains engrained on my waning brain
Comment Written 14-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2013
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Thanks gungalo...that means a lot coming from you
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Happy Valentine's Day!!!
Comment from ravenblack
what possessed you to begin every line w/B? don't worry, i'm not calling you out on it, it worked. the b sound complements what I picture as the sound of bouncing bursting bubbles. good wit. really like the line, " blasting lasting holes of empty days"
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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what possessed you to begin every line w/B? don't worry, i'm not calling you out on it, it worked. the b sound complements what I picture as the sound of bouncing bursting bubbles. good wit. really like the line, " blasting lasting holes of empty days"
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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In Pleiades poetry every line must start with the first letter of the title
Comment from notdeadyet
This is a beautiful ode to a past love. Very nicely done. The art work is great, too.The image of bubbles and hearts is also very nice. They lend a reality to the piece.
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This is a beautiful ode to a past love. Very nicely done. The art work is great, too.The image of bubbles and hearts is also very nice. They lend a reality to the piece.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
Comment from angelmagnet
you certainly don't lack when it comes to expressing emotion. That's very good when you can make your reader feel the depth of your heart with your words.
In spite of the fact that I like this, I do believe that some of your beginning words seemed contrived by forcing "B".
Thanks for sharing
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reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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you certainly don't lack when it comes to expressing emotion. That's very good when you can make your reader feel the depth of your heart with your words.
In spite of the fact that I like this, I do believe that some of your beginning words seemed contrived by forcing "B".
Thanks for sharing
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Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Thanks much
Comment from lakeport
Blind indeed love is sometimes blind. that's a lovely expressed poem,nice flow. I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Lakeport.
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Blind indeed love is sometimes blind. that's a lovely expressed poem,nice flow. I enjoyed reading it,God bless you. Lakeport.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Are you in lakeport Ca?
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No I used to live there one time, I wish I was back there,its beautiful Country.
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I lived in Santa Rosa For a couple of years...Went to Robinson's Casino quite a bit
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Yes I been to the Robinson's Casino,Lakeport.
Comment from leann213
you did a great job on this poem it rhymed it was alsome it flowed with no problem love the picture you have with it you over all did a wonderful job on this
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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you did a great job on this poem it rhymed it was alsome it flowed with no problem love the picture you have with it you over all did a wonderful job on this
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 13-Feb-2013
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Thanks leann
Comment from Vinita12
Nice work and interesting form (starting each line with the same letter). It sounds like you are talking about love that lasts even in old age, when the body and mind become more frail. It actually sounds like the two lovers are now exchanging pain, which is a unique transformation of simpler romantic love.
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Nice work and interesting form (starting each line with the same letter). It sounds like you are talking about love that lasts even in old age, when the body and mind become more frail. It actually sounds like the two lovers are now exchanging pain, which is a unique transformation of simpler romantic love.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
Comment from country ranch writer
love is blind and you must make it work if you love some one with all you heart and soul.remember what it was like then and then now and love will conquer all.Through tick and thin you will win
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love is blind and you must make it work if you love some one with all you heart and soul.remember what it was like then and then now and love will conquer all.Through tick and thin you will win
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
Comment from Curtis Hatch
Eric,
It is novel the way you start each line with the letter B. It is a beautiful love story that has apparently withstood the test of time. The last two lines refer to pain and my waning brain. It appears that the love is suffering the trials of age. It is a lovely read.
Curtis
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Eric,
It is novel the way you start each line with the letter B. It is a beautiful love story that has apparently withstood the test of time. The last two lines refer to pain and my waning brain. It appears that the love is suffering the trials of age. It is a lovely read.
Curtis
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
Comment from aprivitt
Wow! Great job on the Pleiades poem. I admire people who take on challenges like this. The 5th & 6th lines are my favorite and flow so wonderfully.
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Wow! Great job on the Pleiades poem. I admire people who take on challenges like this. The 5th & 6th lines are my favorite and flow so wonderfully.
Comment Written 13-Feb-2013
