Savannah Love
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Comment from judelesemann
A great story line. I really like the message...one that needs to be told again and again. How sad that we are so inhumane to each other. God created us all equal...man has caused an inequality. God has more wisdom. Good job. Be blessed, Jude
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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A great story line. I really like the message...one that needs to be told again and again. How sad that we are so inhumane to each other. God created us all equal...man has caused an inequality. God has more wisdom. Good job. Be blessed, Jude
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Dr. Walker is the jerk from her school, right? If Nala and Morgan got issues, I'm sure they are justified. The nerve of him to enter someone's home univited. I hope Cash shows up quick.
Well damn, that bastard is stalknig her. Yeah, we need Cash and Billy Joe, quick fast and in a hurry.
Yet again another engrossing chapter. I swear you really are playing to the old wounds. I'm curious to see how you play it out.
Social system my ass. Call it what it is bigotry and elitism. Trust and believe if another flood hits the good ole south, they'll suddenly be brothers under the Lord.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Dr. Walker is the jerk from her school, right? If Nala and Morgan got issues, I'm sure they are justified. The nerve of him to enter someone's home univited. I hope Cash shows up quick.
Well damn, that bastard is stalknig her. Yeah, we need Cash and Billy Joe, quick fast and in a hurry.
Yet again another engrossing chapter. I swear you really are playing to the old wounds. I'm curious to see how you play it out.
Social system my ass. Call it what it is bigotry and elitism. Trust and believe if another flood hits the good ole south, they'll suddenly be brothers under the Lord.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
Hi Barbara - another great post. Oh, us Southerners and our strange ways. You know that I often refer to racism in my work. You wouldn't think it would still be around, but still seems to raise its ugly head. I'm always glad when I get my "reminder" that you've posted. Warm regards, Bill
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Hi Barbara - another great post. Oh, us Southerners and our strange ways. You know that I often refer to racism in my work. You wouldn't think it would still be around, but still seems to raise its ugly head. I'm always glad when I get my "reminder" that you've posted. Warm regards, Bill
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
Okay, I really enjoyed the way you described the pup running around. So precious! Good interaction between Paige and Nala. You handled the dialogue well.
This Dwayne guy isn't a very nice character. Again, you created the mood very well. He came across as quite threatening, and from what I've see of Cash, I don't think Cash is going to like it very much.
Can't wait for the next. I didn't spot any spag, my friend!
Good post.
Av
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Okay, I really enjoyed the way you described the pup running around. So precious! Good interaction between Paige and Nala. You handled the dialogue well.
This Dwayne guy isn't a very nice character. Again, you created the mood very well. He came across as quite threatening, and from what I've see of Cash, I don't think Cash is going to like it very much.
Can't wait for the next. I didn't spot any spag, my friend!
Good post.
Av
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I'm enjoying this story, Barbara -
such a lot going on -
so intriguing and well told. Just as
things are improving, along comes the doctor.
"Come on. ["]I'll feed you." -lose
Grandpappy - one word
Sometimes I've wanted to give you a six, but I'm out of them.. so I'll give one whilst I can.
Margaret
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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I'm enjoying this story, Barbara -
such a lot going on -
so intriguing and well told. Just as
things are improving, along comes the doctor.
"Come on. ["]I'll feed you." -lose
Grandpappy - one word
Sometimes I've wanted to give you a six, but I'm out of them.. so I'll give one whilst I can.
Margaret
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review. What happens with the stray " I had written longer dialogue and had action between them and decided it didn't work, the forgot the extra "
Comment from unimatrix001
I had forgotten about uber-creepy Dwayne. I guess the story needs some sort of conflict besides the ghost.
I [understand,] and I appreciate the thought - wrong tense and it is a compound sentence
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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I had forgotten about uber-creepy Dwayne. I guess the story needs some sort of conflict besides the ghost.
I [understand,] and I appreciate the thought - wrong tense and it is a compound sentence
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
grand pappy (One word??? I'm not sure but that is how I would write it)
Well written and very interesting. I know the south is very different. Your characters are developing nicely. Have a good week~Debbie
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grand pappy (One word??? I'm not sure but that is how I would write it)
Well written and very interesting. I know the south is very different. Your characters are developing nicely. Have a good week~Debbie
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from EMB
Well hell, I'm sure there's a class system just about anywhere. Odd that Paige found this to be odd. (Just how much don't she know about the South, anyway? LOL)
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That's strange. Where he's going? Paige used the arm of the couch to help her stand. She grabbed the back of a chair to keep from putting weight on the ankle. Standing in the doorway, she heard Dr. Walker addressing Nala. I can't make out the words. Whatever it is, it isn't good. (This paragraph moves from third-person to first-person POV. Was this intentional?)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Well hell, I'm sure there's a class system just about anywhere. Odd that Paige found this to be odd. (Just how much don't she know about the South, anyway? LOL)
Note:
That's strange. Where he's going? Paige used the arm of the couch to help her stand. She grabbed the back of a chair to keep from putting weight on the ankle. Standing in the doorway, she heard Dr. Walker addressing Nala. I can't make out the words. Whatever it is, it isn't good. (This paragraph moves from third-person to first-person POV. Was this intentional?)
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I love the depiction of the dog's antics, barbara. They help soften the stiffness between the women. And just when things are going a bit better, along comes the uppity doctor. Great foreshadowing of possible nastiness to come. But he'd better watch out for the protective spirits who have already shown they can move bodies! Very well done, barbara, as always.
Warmest regards, Bev
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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I love the depiction of the dog's antics, barbara. They help soften the stiffness between the women. And just when things are going a bit better, along comes the uppity doctor. Great foreshadowing of possible nastiness to come. But he'd better watch out for the protective spirits who have already shown they can move bodies! Very well done, barbara, as always.
Warmest regards, Bev
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome :0)
Comment from rama devi
As usual, this has authentic sounding dialog, good characterization and fine pacing. The closing situation reminds me of the book (and film) THE HELP. Did you see it?
A good theme thread of equality brought me a smile while reading this. I was close friends with my housekeeper and her daughters while growing up...
Two suggestions:
*Nala left for a moment then returned with a sack lunch.
Nala left for a moment, and then returned with a sack lunch.
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"I understood and I appreciate the thought." Nala took a bite of sandwich.
Suggest keeping the tense usage the same:
"I understand and I appreciate the thought." Nala took a bite of sandwich.
Love, rd
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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As usual, this has authentic sounding dialog, good characterization and fine pacing. The closing situation reminds me of the book (and film) THE HELP. Did you see it?
A good theme thread of equality brought me a smile while reading this. I was close friends with my housekeeper and her daughters while growing up...
Two suggestions:
*Nala left for a moment then returned with a sack lunch.
Nala left for a moment, and then returned with a sack lunch.
*
"I understood and I appreciate the thought." Nala took a bite of sandwich.
Suggest keeping the tense usage the same:
"I understand and I appreciate the thought." Nala took a bite of sandwich.
Love, rd
Comment Written 11-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2013
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I rarely watch movies and have not seen that one. I have made the changes, thank you for the eagle eye.
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It's even better as a book...you might enjoy it. :)
