Comment from donaldww

Excellent

After realizing that the individual "echo words" connect syntactically with the line following, the poem reads with a beautiful lyrical undulation, like a boat moored in a gently rocking harbour.

I think you've captured a motion quite unique and lovely in the rhythm of this poem.

Super job!

Cheers,
DW

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Wonderful comment, thank you. Pili

Comment from Val Crisson

Excellent

This a very well constructed free verse (as I see it), and the enjambment of lines works perfectly. The combination of nature and love (or sexual desire) works perfectly. This is a very good piece. "inspiration grows by passionate waves of attraction - action" - great line

 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thank you so very much. Pili

reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thank you so much , great comment. Pili

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, pili pubal, you did a creative job with this echo poem, I've never tried one of those, it seems hard and easy at the same time. I loved the sound of yours.

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 Comment Written 18-Oct-2014

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reply by the author on 18-Oct-2014

Thank you so much , great comment... Pili