Morning Love.
Echo style.73 total reviews
Comment from Nosha17
Love is an element of our lives which brings out the best of our emotions, whether it be the love of a person, a dog or a passion for poetry. You have made good use of descriptive language, well chosen words to express your thoughts. Enjoyable read. Faye
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Love is an element of our lives which brings out the best of our emotions, whether it be the love of a person, a dog or a passion for poetry. You have made good use of descriptive language, well chosen words to express your thoughts. Enjoyable read. Faye
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much Faye, glad you enjoy. Pili
Comment from kiwijenny
Oooooo. I love this style..echo style. It's beautiful. I usually write free verse as meter and rules are so confining but I LOVE this...relation elation attraction action abound bound charms arms
Just great
God bless
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Oooooo. I love this style..echo style. It's beautiful. I usually write free verse as meter and rules are so confining but I LOVE this...relation elation attraction action abound bound charms arms
Just great
God bless
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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So glad you enjoy , thank you Kiwi. Pili
Comment from robina1978
Great artwork that complements your poem very well. An other new style that I did not know of. Echo, and all about morning and love.
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Great artwork that complements your poem very well. An other new style that I did not know of. Echo, and all about morning and love.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Wonderful coment, thank you Ine. Have a good day. Pili
Comment from Domino 2
Unusual but effective structure, Pili.
It would be brilliant if you could make all the single word lines read as a continuous downward sentence, but that would be genius. :-)
Excellent word choices in this very expressive and passionate write.
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Unusual but effective structure, Pili.
It would be brilliant if you could make all the single word lines read as a continuous downward sentence, but that would be genius. :-)
Excellent word choices in this very expressive and passionate write.
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the suggestion , I am no genious... LOL. Great review. Pili
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Very few are 'geniuses', Pili - especially those who THINK they are. LOL xx
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LOL. You are so right...
Comment from N.K. Wagner
A gentle depiction of morning intimacies in an unusual and challenging form. I enjoyed this lovely poem, Phili Pubul. :) Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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A gentle depiction of morning intimacies in an unusual and challenging form. I enjoyed this lovely poem, Phili Pubul. :) Nancy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Love your comment, thank you so much. Pili
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Pili
Magnificent presentation which highlights each sensual line of your Echo poem. I haven't heard of this form before, I do like the melodic effect as one embraces the dawn, and a spot of morning glory lol .... I read it that way. Soft, flowing, sensual with the echo enhancing each moment.
I love your lead in line "I feel a kiss of morning sun aware". All my bedrooms in every house have had exposure to the morning sun ... I love to be awoken by its rays. Even more special when one can lay in and enjoy the peace and serenity with a lover/beloved. I love "over soft white silk sheets in sweet arrest/rest" ... a perfect completion.
Sultry, sexy, subtle, your poem creates flowing movement with your use of excellent enjambment. Lovely phrases of love and passion in the presence of such natural beauty. Excellent alliteration and consonance of 's' throughout, especially "soft.silk/sheets/sweet/arrest/rest" and 'b' consonance in "beauty/beings/abound/bound", "kiss/sun", "aware/where" ... the poem abounds in this poetic technique which is the point of the echo effect.
A beautiful piece of work and a pleasure to read. A different, unique form of solid expression. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
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Hi Pili
Magnificent presentation which highlights each sensual line of your Echo poem. I haven't heard of this form before, I do like the melodic effect as one embraces the dawn, and a spot of morning glory lol .... I read it that way. Soft, flowing, sensual with the echo enhancing each moment.
I love your lead in line "I feel a kiss of morning sun aware". All my bedrooms in every house have had exposure to the morning sun ... I love to be awoken by its rays. Even more special when one can lay in and enjoy the peace and serenity with a lover/beloved. I love "over soft white silk sheets in sweet arrest/rest" ... a perfect completion.
Sultry, sexy, subtle, your poem creates flowing movement with your use of excellent enjambment. Lovely phrases of love and passion in the presence of such natural beauty. Excellent alliteration and consonance of 's' throughout, especially "soft.silk/sheets/sweet/arrest/rest" and 'b' consonance in "beauty/beings/abound/bound", "kiss/sun", "aware/where" ... the poem abounds in this poetic technique which is the point of the echo effect.
A beautiful piece of work and a pleasure to read. A different, unique form of solid expression. Well done. Hugs - Lovi xoxox
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Oh Lovi, you humble me, this is such a wonderful and complete review,plus the six bright stars, thank you so very much. Big hug. Pili
Comment from Christine B.
Originality and ease, Pili Pubul--you've got it. You begin with the activation of love's all-around caress and end without ending the rest it provides. Rest. Yes. Ultimate rest is more lovely than any other kind. Wonderful poem.
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Originality and ease, Pili Pubul--you've got it. You begin with the activation of love's all-around caress and end without ending the rest it provides. Rest. Yes. Ultimate rest is more lovely than any other kind. Wonderful poem.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Wonderful review , thank you so very much. Pili
Comment from tbacha58
inspiration grows by passionate waves of attraction
action
over soft white silk sheets in sweet arrest
rest
WOW Pili, before sleeping I read your outstanding poem, it gave me a sense of wanting to dream, to feel as peaceful as your poem was written.
My first six goes to a wonderful warm lady, YOU. Love you Terry xoxo
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inspiration grows by passionate waves of attraction
action
over soft white silk sheets in sweet arrest
rest
WOW Pili, before sleeping I read your outstanding poem, it gave me a sense of wanting to dream, to feel as peaceful as your poem was written.
My first six goes to a wonderful warm lady, YOU. Love you Terry xoxo
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Oh my sweet friend, thank you so very much for your wonderful comments and six stars , I am honored. Big hugs. Pili
Comment from rjuselius
this is an interesting structure you have here:) the poem definitely benefits from the it. i like the way you rhyme and i love your imagery!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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this is an interesting structure you have here:) the poem definitely benefits from the it. i like the way you rhyme and i love your imagery!
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I am so glad you enjoy it. Thank you so much. Pili
Comment from amahra
Nice creative spend on words. Thought you fell short with the word "more". You could have used 'ore' instead of repeating, "more".
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Nice creative spend on words. Thought you fell short with the word "more". You could have used 'ore' instead of repeating, "more".
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Great suggestion that I took, thank you so much, great comment. Pili
