Morning Love.
Echo style.73 total reviews
Comment from Louise Michelle
Hi Pili,
I think this is the first time I've come across a poem written in this style and I find it refreshing. It speaks of happiness and love. Nicely written.
Hugs,
Lou
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Hi Pili,
I think this is the first time I've come across a poem written in this style and I find it refreshing. It speaks of happiness and love. Nicely written.
Hugs,
Lou
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much Lou, glad you enjoy it. Pili
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Amazing how you intertwined the lines from one line to the next. I liked that effect. I read it several times to get the full meaning and sound in my mind. You did a great job expressing your thoughts about this special time. No changes are needed. Good job and thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed this new (to me) format.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Amazing how you intertwined the lines from one line to the next. I liked that effect. I read it several times to get the full meaning and sound in my mind. You did a great job expressing your thoughts about this special time. No changes are needed. Good job and thanks for sharing. I really enjoyed this new (to me) format.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I am so glad you enjoy it, thank you so much Jannypan. Pili
Comment from Leigh Ann
Excellent imagery
creative writing in using the last syllable of each previous line to end the line.
Flows well and great picture to go with it.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Excellent imagery
creative writing in using the last syllable of each previous line to end the line.
Flows well and great picture to go with it.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much for a great comment Leigh. Pili
Comment from Ekim777
After we get over the cunning, uncanny style where words echo into the air we breathe, we suddenly sense that this poem illustrates the tangible beginning of an experience and maybe a tentative love affair or is it a subtle rapport with all of nature. A very sensual piece. -Ekim777
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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After we get over the cunning, uncanny style where words echo into the air we breathe, we suddenly sense that this poem illustrates the tangible beginning of an experience and maybe a tentative love affair or is it a subtle rapport with all of nature. A very sensual piece. -Ekim777
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much Ekim , terrific comment. Pili
Comment from flamingstar
This one has an interesting effect with the echoing words that create the following line. The only one I felt was a bit awkward was the phrase "asserting a relation." Love the next-to-last line.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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This one has an interesting effect with the echoing words that create the following line. The only one I felt was a bit awkward was the phrase "asserting a relation." Love the next-to-last line.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so very much for a great comment. Pili
Comment from LIJ Red
Echoes of the the poem about the widow who lived in Athlon alone. Anyway the echo concept is obvious and you follow it closely. Excellent.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Echoes of the the poem about the widow who lived in Athlon alone. Anyway the echo concept is obvious and you follow it closely. Excellent.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much LIJ for a great comment. Pili
Comment from Matoshka
I've read this many times and have not seen this style. I feel the graceful morning love and the love that is shared with another. Blessings
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I've read this many times and have not seen this style. I feel the graceful morning love and the love that is shared with another. Blessings
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so very much Matoshka for a great comment . Pili
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So very welcome, Pili...Blessings
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Smiles...
Comment from Kingsland
This is a very creative way of writing a piece of poetry. I liked the one word lines and then a description of the one word in the next line. This was an excellent piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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This is a very creative way of writing a piece of poetry. I liked the one word lines and then a description of the one word in the next line. This was an excellent piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much John for your great comment. Pili
Comment from thee-name
Inventive way to make your poem rhyme. A dreamy poem.
I FEEL A KISS OF MORNING SUN AWARE WHERE
ALL MY DREAMS HAVE GONE TO EXPRESS PRESS
MESSAGES OF NATURE'S BEAUTY AND CHARMS ARMS
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Inventive way to make your poem rhyme. A dreamy poem.
I FEEL A KISS OF MORNING SUN AWARE WHERE
ALL MY DREAMS HAVE GONE TO EXPRESS PRESS
MESSAGES OF NATURE'S BEAUTY AND CHARMS ARMS
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and shiny six star. Smiles. Pili
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THANK YOU!
Comment from Dean Kuch
Very nice, Pili, and it certainly sets the scene of romantic bliss quite well with your eloquent word choices and imagery. A unique rhyme scheme helps seal the deal for this lovely poem of amore.
Well done! :)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Very nice, Pili, and it certainly sets the scene of romantic bliss quite well with your eloquent word choices and imagery. A unique rhyme scheme helps seal the deal for this lovely poem of amore.
Well done! :)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much Dean , great review. Pilil
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Not a problem.
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