Morning Love.
Echo style.73 total reviews
Comment from Poetic Diamond
First let me say I love the imagery portrayed in this poem. Maybe this is a different rhyme format that I'm not familiar with, but the rhyme scheme was very harsh to me. It didn't have a nice, smooth flow, and I read it several times to see if my rhythm was off. Thank you for sharing nonetheless. ~Vikki
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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First let me say I love the imagery portrayed in this poem. Maybe this is a different rhyme format that I'm not familiar with, but the rhyme scheme was very harsh to me. It didn't have a nice, smooth flow, and I read it several times to see if my rhythm was off. Thank you for sharing nonetheless. ~Vikki
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Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much for your review.... Pili
Comment from Ronni
Took me a few readings to discern this as an 'echo' style
poem, and I must say I found it a most intriguing experience, both reading it and learning how to read it.
I love the 'flow and glow' of the theme and time frame
of this 'love' experience. From early morning sun,
nature's beauty and enfolding capture, and your last 4
lines convey both a physically sensual end subtly
spiritual epiphany and ecstasy. Fantastic presentation,
with terrific picture enhancing it so perfectly.
Thanks for sharing...
Best wishes, Ronni
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Took me a few readings to discern this as an 'echo' style
poem, and I must say I found it a most intriguing experience, both reading it and learning how to read it.
I love the 'flow and glow' of the theme and time frame
of this 'love' experience. From early morning sun,
nature's beauty and enfolding capture, and your last 4
lines convey both a physically sensual end subtly
spiritual epiphany and ecstasy. Fantastic presentation,
with terrific picture enhancing it so perfectly.
Thanks for sharing...
Best wishes, Ronni
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much Ronni for a terrific comment. Pili
Comment from DALLAS01
I am not familiar with this form but find it to be very interesting. Is it a known form? Love the last line:
over soft white silk sheets in sweet arrest
rest
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I am not familiar with this form but find it to be very interesting. Is it a known form? Love the last line:
over soft white silk sheets in sweet arrest
rest
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I don't think is well known , years ago I learned from the one who created it, I love it and did a few since. Thank you so much for a meaningful comment. Pili
Comment from adewpearl
interesting pattern of rhyming with the final word of the long line and the one word of the bridge lines
lovely descriptive detail with strong sensory appeal
nice touches of alliteration
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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interesting pattern of rhyming with the final word of the long line and the one word of the bridge lines
lovely descriptive detail with strong sensory appeal
nice touches of alliteration
Brooke
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much , great comment. Pili
Comment from jlsavell
Pili Pubul, I find this work most interesting. I have never heard of an echo poem before, but I can see from your execution how this form can be called echo. I actually had the read it twice to understand its flow and I am so glad I did. Absolutely beautiful. I will have to try it. Thank you for sharing your talent. jlsavell
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Pili Pubul, I find this work most interesting. I have never heard of an echo poem before, but I can see from your execution how this form can be called echo. I actually had the read it twice to understand its flow and I am so glad I did. Absolutely beautiful. I will have to try it. Thank you for sharing your talent. jlsavell
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I am so glad you enjoy it, thank you so much for a meaningful comment. Pili
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you are welcome Pili, it was a pleasure.. jlsavell
Comment from Glasstruth
Very uniquely rhymed, works well with the enjambment, and the alliteration at the end sounds super. You're right for calling it an echo. Beautifully written. Les
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Very uniquely rhymed, works well with the enjambment, and the alliteration at the end sounds super. You're right for calling it an echo. Beautifully written. Les
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much Glasstruth, wonderful comment. Pili
Comment from Caressa_08
I see the echo, perfectly...Thanks, need to try this type of rhyming echo poem sometime...Though, too, think just repeating the word at the end, would be considered, also, an echo.. And see that, too, would make it sort of dull, especially with this type of poem...There is nothing boring about your love poem. I very much liked the read..Appreciate you showing us your creation, Morning Love.
Caressa
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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I see the echo, perfectly...Thanks, need to try this type of rhyming echo poem sometime...Though, too, think just repeating the word at the end, would be considered, also, an echo.. And see that, too, would make it sort of dull, especially with this type of poem...There is nothing boring about your love poem. I very much liked the read..Appreciate you showing us your creation, Morning Love.
Caressa
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Dear Caressa thank you for a great comment. Pili
Comment from heyjude
Pili, I didn't know there was an echo style.
It does seem to emphasize each line. What
a beautiful picture to go along with it.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Pili, I didn't know there was an echo style.
It does seem to emphasize each line. What
a beautiful picture to go along with it.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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So glad you enjoy it, thank you for a great review. Pili
Comment from Ninap2
This is very nicely written. You create such lovely images with your words and your format is unique and adds charm to your poem. I also approve greatly of the picture you chose! Well done, my friend! God bless.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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This is very nicely written. You create such lovely images with your words and your format is unique and adds charm to your poem. I also approve greatly of the picture you chose! Well done, my friend! God bless.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much Nina for a great review. Pili
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Pili I haven;t seen this style of poetry for some time and forgot it existed!!! You have done an excellent job writing this poem. Well done.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Hi Pili I haven;t seen this style of poetry for some time and forgot it existed!!! You have done an excellent job writing this poem. Well done.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much Wendy, great comment. Pili
