Letter to a Young Lady
Thoughts on Growing Up17 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ah, such good advice, so clearly written, with heart and love; this is an wonderful letter, Debbie. All children in that situation could benefit from it, and you share it in a way that makes it a compelling read. "It is a one-way street. Once the door is open, it will not be closed again." Excellent!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Ah, such good advice, so clearly written, with heart and love; this is an wonderful letter, Debbie. All children in that situation could benefit from it, and you share it in a way that makes it a compelling read. "It is a one-way street. Once the door is open, it will not be closed again." Excellent!
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thanks, Dawn. This is a piece for my therapeutic writing group about my childhood~Debbie
Comment from Thesis
Great letter to a child put in a situation that might steal her childhood because the parent is unable to function. It's sad and unfair to expect the child to become the adult.
You share good advice here.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Great letter to a child put in a situation that might steal her childhood because the parent is unable to function. It's sad and unfair to expect the child to become the adult.
You share good advice here.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
Comment from JM daSilva
Great advice as always and great writing. I always love your advice.
I have some editing suggestions for you.
Your father taking ill and needing to be gone, ********no comma, it breaks the flow******in no way gives your mother the right to lock herself in her room, ******no comma, breaks the flow again******expecting you to raise your sister, clean the house and cook the meals. She is
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Great advice as always and great writing. I always love your advice.
I have some editing suggestions for you.
Your father taking ill and needing to be gone, ********no comma, it breaks the flow******in no way gives your mother the right to lock herself in her room, ******no comma, breaks the flow again******expecting you to raise your sister, clean the house and cook the meals. She is
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thanks so much. I did do some editing and took out some of the commas. Have a great day~Debbie
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You're welcome. You too.
Comment from chasennov
I may not have written a similar letter to yours, but then we are all different, aren't we? A couple of small mistakes, but they're of minor importance, main issue here is that you got the message out. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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I may not have written a similar letter to yours, but then we are all different, aren't we? A couple of small mistakes, but they're of minor importance, main issue here is that you got the message out. Well done.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you for your kind and thoughtful review~Debbie
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You're very welcom.
Comment from TervLass
That this letter comes from a wealth of experience goes without saying. What lifts it to an exceptional level is the insight captured and expressed so succinctly.
I had to read it several times for I feel the message is so much more than ever should be spoken to an elementary school-age child. Nevertheless, life's reality can push children to deal with matters well beyond their years, and I am ill-fitted to judge the life experience of another.
Well crafted. Well spoken.
Heartbreaking.
Sage advice.
Helen (TervLass)
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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That this letter comes from a wealth of experience goes without saying. What lifts it to an exceptional level is the insight captured and expressed so succinctly.
I had to read it several times for I feel the message is so much more than ever should be spoken to an elementary school-age child. Nevertheless, life's reality can push children to deal with matters well beyond their years, and I am ill-fitted to judge the life experience of another.
Well crafted. Well spoken.
Heartbreaking.
Sage advice.
Helen (TervLass)
Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Thank you again, Helen. Your review and stars are greatly appreciated~Debbie
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie,
another creative writing essay?
I thought the letter gave you good advise.
I know it would of helped to keep you grounded in averse conditions,
I really think this write could be of advantage and an inspiration to others in the same situation.
Well done Debbie.
Kindest wishes.
James xx
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Hi Debbie,
another creative writing essay?
I thought the letter gave you good advise.
I know it would of helped to keep you grounded in averse conditions,
I really think this write could be of advantage and an inspiration to others in the same situation.
Well done Debbie.
Kindest wishes.
James xx
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This is an exercise from mt therapeutic writing class. Thank you very much, James~Debbie xx
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Hi Debbie, lots of good points raised in this self-improvement
work for a "young lady." Some wisdom from one who knows and penned well.
A releasing work?? If so very well done in letting it all go.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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Hi Debbie, lots of good points raised in this self-improvement
work for a "young lady." Some wisdom from one who knows and penned well.
A releasing work?? If so very well done in letting it all go.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
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Comment Written 02-Feb-2013
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2013
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This is an exercise from mt therapeutic writing class. Thank you~Debbie
