Comment from Thesis

Exceptional

Delightfully humorous. Your take on the horror business is spot on. It's sad that we have to amuse ourselves with other people's suffering. The genre has evolved unto itself, perhaps it will just kill itself off, LOL.

Liking serial killers, hmmm, let's see...you might need some therapy.

Thanks for a fun read. - John

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Yes I do need therapy, I love Dateline too about abductions and murders. I"m a real sick-o. =} I haven't tried to kill anyone yet so that's a good sign, not that I wouldn't like to sometimes. You have a good evening John and thanks again.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend there are so many that do like the blood and gore of horror how there minds work I will never know this is well written reads very well and I liked the closing well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Haven't seen you for a while, was getting worried about you. Glad you're back. Thank you so much Jill, hope all is well.

Comment from Writingfundimension

Excellent

Hiya, Rox. This poem is totally delightful. I could not agree more with your wise words here. Why do we have to keep making the baddies so much more 'sophisticated'. Simple is good. Your talent for wry humor and very effective rhyming made this a really fun poem to read. Hugs, Bev

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Thanks so much Bev. Have a good evening, or maybe it's afternoon for you. =}

Comment from charlyann

Excellent

This poem is great, clever and witty. The message is right up my alley. I don't get horror, of any kind. It freaks me out. The last scary movie I saw was over 40 years ago...The Birds haha...that was enough for me..Kids over the last couple of decades have had this horrific stuff coming at them from every direction...terrible...nice poem

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013

Thanks so much. I don't really think any or this stuff is good for you, and dose it make us better people? No =} Have a good evening.

Comment from isurp

Excellent

I really enjoyed this poem starting with the awesome artwork. Yours? I liked the Rodney King cameo, "Why can't we all just get along?' and I also enjoyed the line: "Is your boss one too?" Very clever.

A few suggestions: If this for a children's book, you may consider changing 'boss' to teacher or friend or something more age appropriate. Also, in the couplet ending with disgusting and guessing, consider using 'mistrusting' or 'crusting'. The kids I've read my poetry to ALWAYS pick up on unsatisfying rhymes. One more thing; in the sixth couplet the first lines have 19 syllables followed by 11 in the second. I like the content in those lines but it makes it a bit awkward to read.

Sorry to be so nitpicky in this review but I feel that the subject matter in this poem is so timely that if you reworked it a little it would be amazing. Keep up the good work. Write on! -Steve

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013

I got the artwork off the internet, I just searched zombies, they're really big now too. =} Thanks for the tip, I went back and rework some things, don't know if I made it better or not, hopefully so. Thanks for taking the time to read it thru and give advise, it's much appreciated Steve.

reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013

Oh yeah I wanted to say that I was surprised you got the Rodney King reference. No one seems to know who he is anymore.

reply by isurp on 30-Jan-2013

Hey Roxanna,
Sorry to bug you again but I liked the flow much better in your rewrite! I'm still hung up on the guessing rhyme. If I may be so bold, consider something like: They're so gross and really quite distressing. The worst part is, they always keep you guessing. Hope this helps. -Steve

reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013

Okay I used your suggestion just in time to get no more reviews. =] Thanks for taking so much time to help out. =}

Comment from eowyn0003

Exceptional

I just love this. I'm not sure about the rhythm, but it is so cleaver, I had to give it a Six. And it is so true. I love a good book or movie about a serial killer also. Is that wrong?

Shalom,
Lura

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013

Wow thanks so much!

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

Hahahahahahaha! I really enjoyed this well written witty piece. I am with you, I hate scary movies and i like to laugh. Cheers Fez.

 Comment Written 30-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013

Glad I could help out. =} Thanks so much.

Comment from angelmagnet

Excellent

ha ha Ha. Isn't that a question that we ask ourselves every day. Is that wrong we say as we mutter some unearthly phrase or repeat a misdeed hastily performed. Good reading. Fun to say

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 Comment Written 30-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013

Thanks so much.

Comment from Kingsland

Excellent

This was cleverly written. I also found a lot of humor in its phrases. You have a very good sense of humor, as it shows vividly in this piece of poetic art. This was a very enjoyable piece of humorous delight... John

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 Comment Written 30-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 30-Jan-2013

Thanks so much John. I'm much better at humor then the serious stuff. =} Have a good evening.