A Twin Thing
Katrina misreads the Doctor's intentions.21 total reviews
Comment from Mai Mai
As usual, this is brilliant. I have to try my hand at flash fiction, maybe it could help me to trim some of my stories.
This piece was interesting as well as funny (you have a great sense of humor). As always, great work and good luck.
Mai Mai
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As usual, this is brilliant. I have to try my hand at flash fiction, maybe it could help me to trim some of my stories.
This piece was interesting as well as funny (you have a great sense of humor). As always, great work and good luck.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 09-Feb-2013
Comment from NaughtieScribe
Oh heck, the punchline was to twisted and deliciously satisfying. You've told a lot with so few words. Very hard to do, and you did it well. Good luck in the contest.
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Oh heck, the punchline was to twisted and deliciously satisfying. You've told a lot with so few words. Very hard to do, and you did it well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2013
Comment from Bobbi22
Wow! He is a doctor after all - although a bit unprofessional. Funny that they thought he had something else on his mind. Well written flash fiction. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow! He is a doctor after all - although a bit unprofessional. Funny that they thought he had something else on his mind. Well written flash fiction. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
Comment from megg_2020
Cleverly done! Bladder infection, great twist on the ending and a helluva shot to the ego on the girl. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.
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Cleverly done! Bladder infection, great twist on the ending and a helluva shot to the ego on the girl. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
Comment from Cornelius2000
That's the first I've heard about most men having a "twin fantasy," but it sounds like fun. It's nice to read a short-short story with some humor in it. Good luck with the contest.
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That's the first I've heard about most men having a "twin fantasy," but it sounds like fun. It's nice to read a short-short story with some humor in it. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the story. This pretty girls deserved the remark. Some people think their looks will get them any new lover. Doctors look at the inside. Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the story. This pretty girls deserved the remark. Some people think their looks will get them any new lover. Doctors look at the inside. Great work.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
Comment from Halfree
Funny and well written. It is hard for me to write anything in 99 words. You did this masterfully. Five lines and you made them count. Got some good chuckles.
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Funny and well written. It is hard for me to write anything in 99 words. You did this masterfully. Five lines and you made them count. Got some good chuckles.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
Comment from alexisleech
That put them in their place! It might be a British thing, but I would have been inclined to say 'the two of us'You have managed to use the 100 words very successfully here. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Alexis x
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That put them in their place! It might be a British thing, but I would have been inclined to say 'the two of us'You have managed to use the 100 words very successfully here. Well done, and good luck in the contest.
Alexis x
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
Comment from Macsween
I liked it. It started all risky but ended up with a good comedy moment. Unexpected ending. Good work and good luck in the contest.
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I liked it. It started all risky but ended up with a good comedy moment. Unexpected ending. Good work and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Now that's clever.
Great use of the budget of words.
You made it fun and slid down the page effortlessly.
What a find with the picture!
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Now that's clever.
Great use of the budget of words.
You made it fun and slid down the page effortlessly.
What a find with the picture!
Comment Written 29-Jan-2013
