Getting Old
Contest Entry59 total reviews
Comment from Winslow
Dear Writer,
Quite a lament ABC poem on the problems encounterd when growing old. Some real zingers in there.
Good luck in the contest.
A fellow fanstorian
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Dear Writer,
Quite a lament ABC poem on the problems encounterd when growing old. Some real zingers in there.
Good luck in the contest.
A fellow fanstorian
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thanks my friend for you nice comments, I appreciate it very much. There just isnt't enough letters in the alphabet for me to include everything I wanted too. Have a great day.
Comment from 9999pool
Now the metaphor of old age had been beautifully painted and captured with both satire and humor.
All the allergies and abnormalities of approaching the golden age neatly rounded up and safely into the chicken coup - ready for the next great event.
No, not death my friend - just heading to Miami for the last days of the silvered hair paradise.
With viagra and xanax, everything is well planned and easy to execute in case of emergencies.
Wondered what happened to the part about the smart phone? Sold before heading to Miami?
Together went the house, the car and the family too for a piece of the action (LOL, my imagination).
Cheers, Ritchiesszzky.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Now the metaphor of old age had been beautifully painted and captured with both satire and humor.
All the allergies and abnormalities of approaching the golden age neatly rounded up and safely into the chicken coup - ready for the next great event.
No, not death my friend - just heading to Miami for the last days of the silvered hair paradise.
With viagra and xanax, everything is well planned and easy to execute in case of emergencies.
Wondered what happened to the part about the smart phone? Sold before heading to Miami?
Together went the house, the car and the family too for a piece of the action (LOL, my imagination).
Cheers, Ritchiesszzky.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thanks my friend for your great rating and review, you made me laugh. Yep, if you're moving to Miami to live out the rest of your life, you better have plenty of money. Sell the house, farm, the old ladies jewelry and anything that has any value. Sell what you can and pawn the rest. As long as I have plenty of Viagra and Xanax, I'm good to go. Smart phones or any type of phones would be the last thing I'd want or else the kids back home would be calling day and night. Thanks Ritchie and Cheers to you my friend...
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On second thought, I might just sell my house and the old analogue phone and follow you to Miami. Leave the children and anybody else at home and just disappear for a long while. LOL. If you win this writing prompt, there might just be enough faked member dollars to start the journey, LOL. Cheers to you my friend, Ritchie.
Comment from teafor2
Author--This form is always challenging, but made even more
so by the inclusion of rhyming quatrains/couplet. It flows
from a logical (and humorous) onset of ageing: physical health, sedentary, dependance on others, folly and wishful thinking to denial with hopes of a rebirth. This is great stuff. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Author--This form is always challenging, but made even more
so by the inclusion of rhyming quatrains/couplet. It flows
from a logical (and humorous) onset of ageing: physical health, sedentary, dependance on others, folly and wishful thinking to denial with hopes of a rebirth. This is great stuff. Good luck in the contest. teafor2
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for such a great review. I tried to cover most bases about getting old, but I'd have to write 2 or 3 poems like this to cover it all. I'm nearing 70 now, so I have a little experience. Have a good day...
Comment from Connie C
This is hysterical! I really enjoyed reading this. I can think of a few on this site who just might have written this, given their sense of humor and references to growing old. Whoever you are, please know that this was a true delight to read. And it even has rhyme too. Thanks for the chuckles, and my best to you in the contest. I think I'll vote on this one.
Connie
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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This is hysterical! I really enjoyed reading this. I can think of a few on this site who just might have written this, given their sense of humor and references to growing old. Whoever you are, please know that this was a true delight to read. And it even has rhyme too. Thanks for the chuckles, and my best to you in the contest. I think I'll vote on this one.
Connie
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thanks again Connie. I'm so glad that you enjoyed it. I'm nearing 70 now, so I have a lot of experience with this subject. Don't forget, laugh every day if you can. THANKS
Comment from Dawn Munro
Hahahahaha! This is a charming and very funny poem. I laughed aloud at 'v'. You've satisfied the prompt beautifully, and I don't see how this poem could possibly be improved. It's great in every way - the presentation is marvelous too.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Hahahahaha! This is a charming and very funny poem. I laughed aloud at 'v'. You've satisfied the prompt beautifully, and I don't see how this poem could possibly be improved. It's great in every way - the presentation is marvelous too.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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I thank you for such a great review. I'm glad you got a laugh from it, that makes it all worthwhile. Take care my friend and have a wonderful day.
Comment from mauial
What an excellent Abecdarian Poem you have penned here. As I have gotten older, I can relate to all that you say in this piece. Very witty too I might add.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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What an excellent Abecdarian Poem you have penned here. As I have gotten older, I can relate to all that you say in this piece. Very witty too I might add.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thanks again my friend for your great rating, I really appreciate that. I'm also glad that you enjoyed it, that makes it all worthwhile.
Comment from JeanneHP
Made me chuckle. The alphabet of old age. Keeping a sense of humor obviously helps. Loved it!
Author could change the U line for a noun beginning.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Made me chuckle. The alphabet of old age. Keeping a sense of humor obviously helps. Loved it!
Author could change the U line for a noun beginning.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thanks again Jeanne for your great rating and welcome to this site. I hope you have a long enjoyable stay. If I changed the "u" line it would take away the meaning of the following line, but thanks for your suggestion. Have a nice day.
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent abcderian form, and I like how you've used the more difficult letters without forcing those lines or using weird X words that nobody has ever heard of LOL
I also like your abcb rhyming
good alliteration in fading fast
and longer life
love the rhyme of list and pissed LOL
Great use of illustrative examples of the symptoms of aging
Up use to be - used to be
I just love the risque humor of the Up stanza LOL
This is a humorous and well-composed poem!! Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Your poem is in excellent abcderian form, and I like how you've used the more difficult letters without forcing those lines or using weird X words that nobody has ever heard of LOL
I also like your abcb rhyming
good alliteration in fading fast
and longer life
love the rhyme of list and pissed LOL
Great use of illustrative examples of the symptoms of aging
Up use to be - used to be
I just love the risque humor of the Up stanza LOL
This is a humorous and well-composed poem!! Brooke :-)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much Brooke, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. I felt that I needed to write something with a little length to it. Those short 5-7-5's are taking over my thought pattern. Thanks again Brooke for your kind words and you have yourself a wonderful day. Bill
Comment from EMB
LOL Still active with the miracle pill? Well then you can't be that old, now can you? :) I enjoyed this piece a great deal. It gives many a glimpse of what to look forward to and others something to try and protect against, all done with a challenging format and a healthy sense of humor. :)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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LOL Still active with the miracle pill? Well then you can't be that old, now can you? :) I enjoyed this piece a great deal. It gives many a glimpse of what to look forward to and others something to try and protect against, all done with a challenging format and a healthy sense of humor. :)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Well Edward, I'm 68. Thanks for your review, I'm glad that you enjoyed it. I'm afraid this little poem just touched on a very few of the things the younger generation has facing them. Although, for some the golden years are the best part of their lives, while for others, it's a constant struggle.
Comment from Bill Schott
This abecedarian is funny and, unfortunately, full of truths. I like how you chose to include a rhyme scheme, which gives it a lift. Nice.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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This abecedarian is funny and, unfortunately, full of truths. I like how you chose to include a rhyme scheme, which gives it a lift. Nice.
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you Bill, I'm glad you enjoyed it my friend. Have a real nice day.
