The Measure in a Man's Pants
It aint what's in there!10 total reviews
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Mike,
I love the humor in this poem but hate that the museum told you never to come back. What in the world were they thinking? I laughed when I read 'a wanted pre-dickion' very clever I must admit. Your intermittent rhyming just adds more charm to the lines that you composed with care, good alliteration and the theme is priceless......chey
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Hi Mike,
I love the humor in this poem but hate that the museum told you never to come back. What in the world were they thinking? I laughed when I read 'a wanted pre-dickion' very clever I must admit. Your intermittent rhyming just adds more charm to the lines that you composed with care, good alliteration and the theme is priceless......chey
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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I have a feeling the museum hates the way the did things to, I will miss being able to go their as it had the feel of a nice swimming pool of spirit. I know the habits of a biographical chapter and was shocked at just how suddenly popular the last chapter became, but would have liked people to read the one before it first as that had, not only what I loved about the museum, but why.
Wow! What a rating and hate to say it, I think the women get the point more then the FS men. You have to laugh and also forgive, but that doesn't necessarily mean forget. It was actually poetic writing that introduced me to that concept and part of having a full palette available to fit the need.
I thank you very much for the generous rating, the compliments and this review. I should have smacked, "Freestyle poem," somewhere on it, but then again perhaps it is my way of reminding many of the reviewers that there poetic conceptions are the only way either. Glad you loved this one!
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I did love it!
Comment from adewpearl
solid rhyming couplets
excellent simile of the compass needle
good alliteration in possess predilection
risque and fun play on words with pre-dickion
good alliteration in cloths he is clad
interesting and thought-provoking social commentary - I like the Jim Morrison allusion Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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solid rhyming couplets
excellent simile of the compass needle
good alliteration in possess predilection
risque and fun play on words with pre-dickion
good alliteration in cloths he is clad
interesting and thought-provoking social commentary - I like the Jim Morrison allusion Brooke :-)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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LOL! Now you have me thinking, "Ah, to be a poet and like him!" I have to credit Ray Manzarek the inspiration for my risque and fun play on words, though I am sure he would humbly deny being one.
I love this surprising review from you, and to me this poem was a wonderful struggle to produce. While I wanted to state my case, there is plenty to see their point as well, then Jim being Jim, you realize women had their hands (in) it as well, and both a true human nature comes forth which I thinks helps bolster that yearning for one's spirit and soul to break on through. I do get that sense that Jim Morrison scared a lot of people with his thoughts and music as well. LOL
Thank you so much for the compliments and taking the time for this review. Mike
Comment from IndianaIrish
I think you must have had a great time writing this, Mike, and I sure loved reading this poem of yours that made me nod my head, smile, and enjoy all the imagery. I hope you get lots of readers and reviews.
Smiles,
Karyn
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I think you must have had a great time writing this, Mike, and I sure loved reading this poem of yours that made me nod my head, smile, and enjoy all the imagery. I hope you get lots of readers and reviews.
Smiles,
Karyn
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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LOL, I can't place it high enough for that. I know you dropped off with reading my biography, but I was so happy to find such a wonderful story to conclude it with; but I know my life and actually asked God, "Please don't make it the perfect one."
What unfolded with this debacle did just that, and what a shame as I asked her only to appreciate the sentiments and words, but I also had to state I felt discriminated against, and there are a lot of possibilities. I not angry, but disappointed and to be honest, getting declared a pervert is the easiest and lame thing that people use to deal with things, I have been plagued with this my entire life and I have a feeling, someone has to stand up and declare a better way.
I should be absolutely angry, as it created another 8,500 words to write, but it has that Mark Twain bizarreness about it to make it grand. This wasn't an easy poem as it stuck in my mind for two months until I found the right imagery, and really keeping a decent disposition keeps the humor of absurdity intact for others to appreciate.
I love this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from Kelly Shackelford
I truly love this piece and encourage you to submit it to literary (lit-rags) magazines (I was editor of one for two years) as this would fit nicely. Great job!
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I truly love this piece and encourage you to submit it to literary (lit-rags) magazines (I was editor of one for two years) as this would fit nicely. Great job!
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Wow! What a compliment! I love this review and thank you for it, Mike
Comment from jetmichelle
Short reviews may not be helpful but I am not a poet. I only know what is entertaining to read and this was entertaining.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Short reviews may not be helpful but I am not a poet. I only know what is entertaining to read and this was entertaining.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Reviews often tell the author about other considerations that they may be interested in obtaining, and entertaining is one of them. With new reviewers, I do check them and their portfolio out what gives me a better perspective on what they write in reviews.
I thank you for the compliment and this review. Mike
Comment from Matthew M.
An interesting poem comparing the author and Jim Morrison. Funny how two people with similiar aspirations of writing meaningful images can be thought of so differently.
Here are some things I noted as I read your poem:
A compass needle was a funny visual.
Okay, pre-dickion, might have gone a little far, ha ha.
Jims should be Jim's
I am sure the museum would quickly open its "Doors" for Morrison's pants.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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An interesting poem comparing the author and Jim Morrison. Funny how two people with similiar aspirations of writing meaningful images can be thought of so differently.
Here are some things I noted as I read your poem:
A compass needle was a funny visual.
Okay, pre-dickion, might have gone a little far, ha ha.
Jims should be Jim's
I am sure the museum would quickly open its "Doors" for Morrison's pants.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Thank you for pointing that out, I put the apostrophe in. This wasn't an easy poem and my favorite was when I thought about women being treated like trophies and thought of shape of female sex organs. I had a dream involving Jim Morrison and it is in a couple of my writings in detail. After that I was forever changed, and the same happened with Poe in a quirky manner.
I thank you for the correction, compliments and review. Glad you liked it too! Mike
Comment from K.W.
Very clever:) fun to read. I entirely agree. A bit choppy at times. Perhaps read aloud to hear the flow and see if it can be made more smooth. I truly enjoyed this read. Best, k
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Very clever:) fun to read. I entirely agree. A bit choppy at times. Perhaps read aloud to hear the flow and see if it can be made more smooth. I truly enjoyed this read. Best, k
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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I should have wrote that this was a free style poem, and I do read it outloud, but more like music, less like a clock. I thank your for the compliments and this review, Mike.
Comment from PoeticXscape
An interesting piece. That is alot of expressive wording and emotion about a piece ofd clothing. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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An interesting piece. That is alot of expressive wording and emotion about a piece ofd clothing. Thank you for sharing and keep up the good work.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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I had a lot to say, and it took a couple of months for the imagery to fall into my lap. No pun intended? I thank you for the compliments and this review. Mike
Comment from dmt1967
This is a good piece of writing I just have a couple of points the fist point is half the poem rhymes the other half doesn't this stops the smooth flow of the poem and a lot of people on here will mark you down on here for that
The next point is the lines lengths are all over the place again makes it hard to read and some reviewers might mark you down for that as well
And the last point is the verses are different lengths some have four lines others have five
I think we are here to lean so unlike other reviewers I tend not to give anything but five stars I have done but its got to be really bad for me to do that
Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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This is a good piece of writing I just have a couple of points the fist point is half the poem rhymes the other half doesn't this stops the smooth flow of the poem and a lot of people on here will mark you down on here for that
The next point is the lines lengths are all over the place again makes it hard to read and some reviewers might mark you down for that as well
And the last point is the verses are different lengths some have four lines others have five
I think we are here to lean so unlike other reviewers I tend not to give anything but five stars I have done but its got to be really bad for me to do that
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Well I checked your portfolio and found most poems are five stars. Personally I worry less about the rating, then what is in the review. I get poor ratings at times, and usually take a look at people who give them, as many are both new to the site and to poetry as well, other's are that honest in their application of the rating system as suggested.
I do have a hard time finding less then five star poems, which is a tribute to the people at this site. In regards to timing, length or choppiness, I should have noted this is a free style poem. When I write a poem, I sort of perceive the music and try to read it more like musical notes, instead of a clock like timing. I like doing it in this manner as I preserve the points I am trying to make without sacrificing their meaning by trying to shore up rhyming and time.
That isn't permitted in all styles of poetry, but with a few that I really concentrate and put the time in, I do. I enjoyed this review and thank you for it and the compliments. Mike
Comment from EMB
This was definitely the most unique poem I've read in quite a while. No smart comments to make, though several did drift through my head. What I find peculiar is that you decided to deliver this well-thought information in poetry form. I will say that much of your "measure of a man" can actually be applied to a woman as well. (And that says what about your description?) :)
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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This was definitely the most unique poem I've read in quite a while. No smart comments to make, though several did drift through my head. What I find peculiar is that you decided to deliver this well-thought information in poetry form. I will say that much of your "measure of a man" can actually be applied to a woman as well. (And that says what about your description?) :)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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That is exactly true, and I found that on many fronts. I think in modern times, there are many negative comments against men, in terms of how some men operate they are right; but what about the women who also guide themselves on what getting the man with the reputation and offering us sex, or the assumptions of? I felt it best to make this a more solid poem, to include both, hopefully nullifying that aspect.
I thank you for your compliments and review, as well abstaining too! Mike.
