Comment from reconciled

Excellent

Hey Jo -smile- good evening girl how are ya? hope everythings okay -smile- Hmmm not sure I'd want anybody kissen my girl -smile- but I get the sentiment. good to see ya Love Michael

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013

Oh Michael...I'm sure you would be the one kissing the widow. :o) I think most men would not like some other man to kiss their wife even if they are dead but hey, I'm a girl (woman and we think so differently) LOL. Thanks for the review. To most women I think we would think it's romantic to think their husband wanted to give them one last kiss...even if it had to come from a stranger.

reply by reconciled on 16-Jan-2013

lol...okay perhaps your right..-smile-

Comment from Gladness

Excellent

This is a great story, sorry you missed the contest.
You don't need a new paragraph for each sentence, it is a little confusing that way. Usually, that means it is a different person talking.

Great ending!

Bless you, Anita

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2013

Thank you Anita for the advice on the not needing a new paragrah for each sentence. I am so far from knowing what is the proper form. I study and study and of course read constantly and observe other writers but somehow it seems I have a hard time with the rules. I am glad you liked my story. I found it very hard to condense my story down to 100 words. I am very wordy. :o)

Comment from Val Crisson

Excellent

Oh, Jo this one gave me goose bumps. Great use of 100 words. Very nicely penned. Just one question how did he know it was her. None the less, really very moving.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2013

Oh Val you have me laughing with your question of how did he know it was her. Hmmm, I hadn't thought of that...I guess from the pictures he had seen as her husband's friend. Also, a question was asked about why didn't he just look up her address. She had moved from Montana to Washington. I think I need to work on this story a little more. I wrote it long the first time then went back and tried to shorten. Oh Lordy, that is hard to do for a long winded person like me. I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from Norbanus

Excellent

This could have been a powerful entry, Jo. In either the 'Fist Kiss Between Strangers,' or any other flash. Very well done.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2013

Thank you Norbanus for reviewing my 100 word flash. Yep, I just spent too much time trying to whittle it down. I should have reserved a spot. Well, lesson learned. :o)

Comment from Terror2s

Excellent

Your story was engaging throughout. I did not noice any errors. I liked your beginning and the dialogue. I thought the transition into the dialogue could have been smoother though. She did not notice him, and then all of a sudden he is talking to her. I felt like there should have been some action or language to get her attention. T2

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2013

Thank you for your kind review. I wrote a longer version "The Vietnam Wall" and tried and tried to get it to 100 words. Not an easy feat. Yes, I agree when you start whittling words sometimes things aren't that smooth. I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from santapola

Excellent

Hello there. I see this is a comp entry . You have written a good flash story here , it should do well in the competition. Hope so.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2013

Thanks for the encouragement. I'm glad you liked the story. Unfortunely, I didn't reserve a spot and was too late to enter. Maybe, next time.