Adam (A Fall From Grace)
Adam`s fall in the Garden of Eden60 total reviews
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well written and well-focused piece. You have told the story well and succinctly.Good presentation. Well done, my friend. Take care~Debbie
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A very well written and well-focused piece. You have told the story well and succinctly.Good presentation. Well done, my friend. Take care~Debbie
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reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your well-written poem movingly tells of how sin came into the world, God's forgiveness, and how we can be saved--through Jesus only.
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Your well-written poem movingly tells of how sin came into the world, God's forgiveness, and how we can be saved--through Jesus only.
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is absolutely beautiful, and it isn't as fictional as some might believe because we are all descended from Adam. A gorgeous free verse! I can't pick a favorite part because I love it all.
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This is absolutely beautiful, and it isn't as fictional as some might believe because we are all descended from Adam. A gorgeous free verse! I can't pick a favorite part because I love it all.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from JM daSilva
I just could never understand why wanting to be like your makes is a crime. My son loves me and wants to be like me, but I guess God sees things differently, huh?
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I just could never understand why wanting to be like your makes is a crime. My son loves me and wants to be like me, but I guess God sees things differently, huh?
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
Comment from Gladness
Well done. I have wondered where Adam was when Eve had her conversation with the Devil. Did he hear it, or get there just in time to see her take a bite?
I have often heard it said that Eve was deceived, Adam was not. That he, as a foreshadow of Christ, took sin upon himself to be with Eve.
I especially like the last two stanzas, He is our everything!
Bless you! Anita
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Well done. I have wondered where Adam was when Eve had her conversation with the Devil. Did he hear it, or get there just in time to see her take a bite?
I have often heard it said that Eve was deceived, Adam was not. That he, as a foreshadow of Christ, took sin upon himself to be with Eve.
I especially like the last two stanzas, He is our everything!
Bless you! Anita
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for the six stars and your words...I truly appreciate them and I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Eric Corsten
It sounds almost like you were writing for the bible here...great
There is a light; radiant and resplendent
in all of His glory.
He came to pay the ultimate price
for our transgressions.
He is the sacrificial Lamb.
We are the lost sheep, He is our Shepherd.
We are the fallen, He is our Savior.
We were condemned to die,
He is the way to eternal life.
For He is truth.
He is Jesus Christ, the Son of God.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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It sounds almost like you were writing for the bible here...great
There is a light; radiant and resplendent
in all of His glory.
He came to pay the ultimate price
for our transgressions.
He is the sacrificial Lamb.
We are the lost sheep, He is our Shepherd.
We are the fallen, He is our Savior.
We were condemned to die,
He is the way to eternal life.
For He is truth.
He is Jesus Christ, the Son of God.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I loved the imagery of this piece. The flow was strong and the words had such depth. Very nice rhythm to this. It sounded like a man who understood his mistakes and now realizes their consequence.
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I loved the imagery of this piece. The flow was strong and the words had such depth. Very nice rhythm to this. It sounded like a man who understood his mistakes and now realizes their consequence.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Excellent picture. Good to see some of the blame taken away from Eve who is usually the bad Guy. She was deceived. Adam chose to eat the forbidden fruit. Mankind was made to suffer. Well done. Nancy
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Excellent picture. Good to see some of the blame taken away from Eve who is usually the bad Guy. She was deceived. Adam chose to eat the forbidden fruit. Mankind was made to suffer. Well done. Nancy
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for reading and reviewing...I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Nebukadneser
What a brilliant, brilliant poem. This is so incredibly well written telling us the story of the creation of man, our separation from our maker, and our reconciliation with our father through Jesus Christ His son.
As the prince of darkness spoke,
his twisted words slithered around Eve`s heart
spreading seeds of doubt within our souls.
I did not recoil, instead I chose
to have my eyes opened.
This verse took my breath away as you refer to the snake, but yet never say snake - Slithered around Eve's heart, I did not recoil - Brilliant brilliant, brilliant -
I am so sorry to rate your poem with only a five star, since I've ran out of six stars.
Well done
Nebukadneser
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What a brilliant, brilliant poem. This is so incredibly well written telling us the story of the creation of man, our separation from our maker, and our reconciliation with our father through Jesus Christ His son.
As the prince of darkness spoke,
his twisted words slithered around Eve`s heart
spreading seeds of doubt within our souls.
I did not recoil, instead I chose
to have my eyes opened.
This verse took my breath away as you refer to the snake, but yet never say snake - Slithered around Eve's heart, I did not recoil - Brilliant brilliant, brilliant -
I am so sorry to rate your poem with only a five star, since I've ran out of six stars.
Well done
Nebukadneser
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much Nebukadneser, for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your words and I am glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
Comment from Shadow Pahn
Great work,
I have some affinity with the story about the Garden of Eden, so your piece automatically caught my eye.
It was great reading something in this POV.
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Great work,
I have some affinity with the story about the Garden of Eden, so your piece automatically caught my eye.
It was great reading something in this POV.
Well done.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks so much for readng and reviewing...I am so glad you enjoyed it...blessings.
