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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Where Candlelight Glows"I dare you....
7 total reviews
Comment from VICTIMEYES
well this one is really filled with sexual behavior, the explicit nature really surprised me but it goes the course of a intense night, this was put and formed very nicely and did hold my attentions all the ways through.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2006
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well this one is really filled with sexual behavior, the explicit nature really surprised me but it goes the course of a intense night, this was put and formed very nicely and did hold my attentions all the ways through.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2006
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liked it huh?
you'd love my 'sensual energy' book then
hehehehe
thanx lots for R&R! :-)
Comment from angel of the quill
Gentle rewrite to my own taste. He walks in slim figure made leaner by this black leather
her own blue robe cast far aside
there he is with eyes so tender
for her his loving bride
with his heart inflamed higher than the fireplace so near
he whispers the loved words I love You sweetest Dear
She sighs soft and tender her eyes bright with passion grows
He says to her oh lovely I need you ever so
She giggles as he captures her sweet body in his arm
There into the passion The never feel more than charm
Like magic it is the enchanting Of loves true bliss
As they take each other on a journey with but a single kiss
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2006
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Gentle rewrite to my own taste. He walks in slim figure made leaner by this black leather
her own blue robe cast far aside
there he is with eyes so tender
for her his loving bride
with his heart inflamed higher than the fireplace so near
he whispers the loved words I love You sweetest Dear
She sighs soft and tender her eyes bright with passion grows
He says to her oh lovely I need you ever so
She giggles as he captures her sweet body in his arm
There into the passion The never feel more than charm
Like magic it is the enchanting Of loves true bliss
As they take each other on a journey with but a single kiss
Comment Written 08-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2006
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oooh love the journey part
very creative wording
thank you lots :-)
Comment from easyeverett
"Mixing their body fluids" would read better because of "forever" following it. However, a very provocative write. Why the robe? Oh well, I guess I understand it was primarily a fantasy so you can wear anything, or not wear anything you choose. "Biting", never got into pain in lovemaking. Maybe "nibbliing". Yeah, nibbling is good, licking is especially good. Yes, licking, I like licking. Good erotic, clean little write. easy
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2006
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"Mixing their body fluids" would read better because of "forever" following it. However, a very provocative write. Why the robe? Oh well, I guess I understand it was primarily a fantasy so you can wear anything, or not wear anything you choose. "Biting", never got into pain in lovemaking. Maybe "nibbliing". Yeah, nibbling is good, licking is especially good. Yes, licking, I like licking. Good erotic, clean little write. easy
Comment Written 06-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2006
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hmm fluids... will try that out
thanx lots.... now go take a cold shower LOL ;-)
Comment from mmichelle97219
This is very romantic and amazingly soft. I was expecting something a little more pornographic from the picture, but what I got was a wonderful love story which happens to include a little sex. Very good write.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2006
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This is very romantic and amazingly soft. I was expecting something a little more pornographic from the picture, but what I got was a wonderful love story which happens to include a little sex. Very good write.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2006
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2006
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sugar with a little spice hehehe ;-)
Comment from clhutchinson
You have given this a very colorful written illustration, with great attention to the selection of the wording you used. This flowed very nicely and was clear.
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You have given this a very colorful written illustration, with great attention to the selection of the wording you used. This flowed very nicely and was clear.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2005
Comment from Pili Pubul
WOW ! You really responded very well to the challenge, very sensual and loving, great images , romantic, good flow and fun !
"he now walks toward her
they embrace
as the room gets hotter
he lifts her
to meet him
and they kiss
carrying her to the bedroom
where candlelight glows
and rose petals fall "
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WOW ! You really responded very well to the challenge, very sensual and loving, great images , romantic, good flow and fun !
"he now walks toward her
they embrace
as the room gets hotter
he lifts her
to meet him
and they kiss
carrying her to the bedroom
where candlelight glows
and rose petals fall "
Comment Written 12-Apr-2005
Comment from Sandman
holy mackeral lady
now THATS an answer
bet I could think of a few fun things to do with that snow in that situation
hehe
well done m'lady
thanks for the challenge...enjoyed it
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holy mackeral lady
now THATS an answer
bet I could think of a few fun things to do with that snow in that situation
hehe
well done m'lady
thanks for the challenge...enjoyed it
Comment Written 12-Apr-2005
