Mike And The Tree
An inchworm decides to leave his home to explore the World85 total reviews
Comment from kashmayank
It tells a nice story in the poem ,You structured it well and the flow of the words was smooth I enjoyed reading it and all the best
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It tells a nice story in the poem ,You structured it well and the flow of the words was smooth I enjoyed reading it and all the best
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
Comment from fairy77
That was fantastic.You're going to be the next dr.Seuss!Loved the inch worm and the reference to willie and Tenessee.Been there:)I loved it and I'm sorry I don't have a six.Well done!beth fairy77.
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That was fantastic.You're going to be the next dr.Seuss!Loved the inch worm and the reference to willie and Tenessee.Been there:)I loved it and I'm sorry I don't have a six.Well done!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 10-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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AAHHHH man....A six from my Fairy; there ain't nothin sweeter
Comment from NightWriter
There's no place like home. The Brown And Ugly Tree is a well written children's poem. Perfect rhythm and reads smooth from beginning to end. Bravo!
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There's no place like home. The Brown And Ugly Tree is a well written children's poem. Perfect rhythm and reads smooth from beginning to end. Bravo!
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013
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Thanks mate
Comment from donaldww
This is a cute story about Mike the inchworm. Like many such worms, after Mike's trip is over, he concludes that home is where he'd rather be.
Cheers,
DW
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This is a cute story about Mike the inchworm. Like many such worms, after Mike's trip is over, he concludes that home is where he'd rather be.
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Cheers mate
Comment from honeytree
Home is where our heart is especially
When one has lived in "an ugly brown tree home."
I guess the "ugly brown tree"
Was the best after traveling around.
Great poem and art work.
Honey tree
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Home is where our heart is especially
When one has lived in "an ugly brown tree home."
I guess the "ugly brown tree"
Was the best after traveling around.
Great poem and art work.
Honey tree
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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I must tell you that art work is mostly clip art that I put together. I'm sure your sweet six was for the story...
Comment from Jane Johnson
See the the hills (delete one "the" on two separate lines in this verse)
Otherwise, the words flowed quite well and it was a cute story. It would make a cute children's story. The artwork you chose complimented your verse. Cute idea! Thanks for sharing.
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See the the hills (delete one "the" on two separate lines in this verse)
Otherwise, the words flowed quite well and it was a cute story. It would make a cute children's story. The artwork you chose complimented your verse. Cute idea! Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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I don't know how it's possible to read this thing 200 times and still, I missed it.
Thanks much Jane
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It happens. The line was repeated twice in the poem and they were both the same, so I hope you found them both.
Comment from poetic1988
this is a very cute poem, it feels like a children story though
i also like how towards the end your poem seems to ryhmes
mixing in different poetry types
Then Mike said,
"I saw the country,
I saw the the hills,
The rocks were by the sea.
I saw New York and Dallas
But forget about Tennessee.
There was no hope or promise
I saw only misery.
I was so alone,
I'm glad to be home,
In this brown and ugly tree."
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this is a very cute poem, it feels like a children story though
i also like how towards the end your poem seems to ryhmes
mixing in different poetry types
Then Mike said,
"I saw the country,
I saw the the hills,
The rocks were by the sea.
I saw New York and Dallas
But forget about Tennessee.
There was no hope or promise
I saw only misery.
I was so alone,
I'm glad to be home,
In this brown and ugly tree."
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Did you mean to give me 4 stars?,,,if so, please let me know where my mistakes are.
Comment from Gungalo
I saw only misery.
I was so alone,
I'm glad to be home,
In this brown and ugly tree."
Well you have done it again Eric and this time with an inchworm. LOL. I saw this earlier and said nahhhhhhhhhh but I'm glad I read it.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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I saw only misery.
I was so alone,
I'm glad to be home,
In this brown and ugly tree."
Well you have done it again Eric and this time with an inchworm. LOL. I saw this earlier and said nahhhhhhhhhh but I'm glad I read it.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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I'm glad you did too...you said Nahhhhhhh? are you mad at me? LOL
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No it just wasn't something I would read. LOL
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ahhhhhh A sooooo
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Smile.
Comment from Titanx9
This is a beautiful poem that should get the average kid's imagination humming in overdrive. The inch worm's Odyssey and the great rhyming make for an excellent read.
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This is a beautiful poem that should get the average kid's imagination humming in overdrive. The inch worm's Odyssey and the great rhyming make for an excellent read.
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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Thanks much for the sixer
Comment from Zinnia48
A very imaginative, creative, and entertaining poem! I had a great time tagging along. The tiniest of suggestions is: As a Missourian I would like to personally invite Mike to my lovely state, and give him a grand tour. I'd like to think that if he had included Missouri in his adventure, he might have found a suitable tree here that could have been a home away from home. Great work! Caroline
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A very imaginative, creative, and entertaining poem! I had a great time tagging along. The tiniest of suggestions is: As a Missourian I would like to personally invite Mike to my lovely state, and give him a grand tour. I'd like to think that if he had included Missouri in his adventure, he might have found a suitable tree here that could have been a home away from home. Great work! Caroline
Comment Written 09-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2013
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That's too funny...I myself have never been, I'm sure it's great
